Reviews for Phoebe the two tone liar
Lemontention chapter 1 . 10/24/2012
I tried reading this and I got lost. I also feel a headache coming on but that might be seperate. Might is thw key-word in that sentance though.

Posting chapters as seperate stories is against the rules. Their is a chapter feature, if you can't find it I'm free to share.

Also big blocks of text are bad writing and against said rules. Grammar as atrocious as this could get your story reported as well.

Do the community a good deed and remove this, make this an actual fanfiction with an actual fandom or turn it into original if it's not already and give it a major re-write. Please and thank you.

-Ming Chi
Yemi Hikari chapter 1 . 10/9/2012
It is against site rules to post chapters as individual stories. On top of this, writing in one big block paragraphs isn't proper writing, not is making all your yelling in chat speak. You might actually get people to review your stories if they were properly formatted. Then again, you aren't posting to a major fandom.