Reviews for the assassin's way
TheSecondOtherGuy chapter 1 . 11/6/2012
its WAY too rushed and the tenses are everywhere
you need to reread your work and if you can't see your grammar problems get someone else to do it, it's usually easier for others to point out mistakes in spelling and grammar microsoft word is not a good medium
its also extremely abrupt there is very little detail or descripting and that can be fine if its compinsated with say speach but there is very little talking and what there is is oddly formed and you would not hear people saying that
you need to not skip through conversations or give adequate detail to compensate and explain and even if you try to create an emotionless character with little to no personal thoughts you cant skimp on writing details, descriptions of places characters and events because as it is your skipping throught it all far to quickly and if it wern't written in first person it would seem to be more of a summary of a story rather than an actual story.

And no im not insulting you, it's called constructive criticism. Have fun with that
ShadowBrook17 chapter 7 . 11/6/2012
Whoa! That was SO awesome! SO totally worth the wait. It ALWAYS is. Oh man, that was just AWESOME! I loved it and I can NOT wait to see what happens next, that was SO epicly awesome! Loved it and can NOT wait for more! Great job little bro!:D

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ShadowBrook17 chapter 6 . 10/19/2012
Oh man, that was SO worth the wait! I mean really, anything from you is worth the wait. Just amazing! You did great on that and I can NOT wait to see what happens next. Amazing and just. WOW! I'm at a loss for words right now, if you can't tell. Amazing job and can't wait for more, my friend!

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ShadowBrook17 chapter 5 . 10/11/2012
AWESOME, AWESOME, AWESOME! And you know, if you need idea's, I'll gladly try to come up with some. You know I love helping! But again, THAT WAS AWESOME! Oh man, totally worth the wait on it. Just AWESOME!

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ShadowBrook17 chapter 4 . 10/8/2012
Whoa, that was so TOTALLY AWESOME! You did great on it. I sure hope you'll be okay. Man, I'm on the edge of my seat as always. Can NOT wait to see more. Just AWESOME!

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ShadowBrook17 chapter 3 . 10/7/2012
AWESOME! You did me SO well! Thank you SO much Joe! I thought that chapter was just awesome and I can NOT wait to see what will happen next. AWESOME!

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ShadowBrook17 chapter 2 . 10/7/2012
AWESOME! I love it how you're always willing to help anyone in need! I can't wait to see what's going to happen next. AWESOMENESS!

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ShadowBrook17 chapter 1 . 10/6/2012
Whoa, I may know hardly ANYTHING about Assassin's Creed, but you did AWESOME on it. I can NOT wait to see more!

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