Reviews for Lost
MizzPerfect chapter 2 . 2/15/2003
You have MILLIONS of grammatical, punctuational and spelling errors. I can hardly understand what I'm reading. It is also extremely unrealistic and patronizing. I am a busy body, a know-it-all, and an exact replica of Hermione Granger, so don't take my advice personally. Sorry if I offended you.
ReplicaOfHermioneGranger chapter 1 . 2/15/2003
I don't that that Chris and Amy make a good couple. Not at all. I actually find Chris disturbing. And freaky. The books went downhill after he arrived. And, because I didn't think that Amy should have broken up with Eric in the first place, I am in denial about other boyfriends. But I still don't like Chris. What about Andy? Try to add him in for an "interesting" twist!
karmakaze chapter 9 . 1/10/2003
Please continue this story!
replicafreak chapter 9 . 1/9/2003
You have excellent ideas for your story, and you do keep the reader interested, but you need to maybe slow things down a bit, and start a new paragraph between dialogue. It's an interesting story so far, but you need to jump right into the direction of the story, and possibly detail a bit more on where you are taking this, since this is chapter nine. Still keep writing this story, because I am very interested to find out what happens, but it needs some grammatical work and description. Still a very good story.
karmakaze chapter 8 . 12/24/2002
PLEASE CONTINUE! But the organization is right about Aly being a clone, she's just not a perfect one. And the correct spelling is dying, not dieing, but the story is pretty good. I'm glad you double spaced the lines now, and you should really start changing lines when a new person speaks, for clarity, but other than that, the story is pretty interesting. Please continue!
neonfizz chapter 7 . 12/23/2002
this is very very good!thank for saying you could doublespace and my story isn't finished yet i plan for it to go on for quite a while.
neonfizz chapter 1 . 12/23/2002
barley is barely right?just wanna know. and could you plz doublespace?
Goth-girl chapter 7 . 12/1/2002
Sorry, since you changed your chapter, it wouldn't let me review it again, so I had to do an anonymous one. I like the twist of adding Aly in there, but you need to start a new line when new people are talking, and capitalize first letters of sentences.

Ex: When she opened them again it was pitch black, actually more grayish now. The person seemed familiar and the astonished voice was saying "AMY?" let her figure out this was the one, the only, regected clone: ALY. Amy ran twowards Aly being very thankfull to have found her.

But her gratitude ended when she asked Aly " What are you doing here? the orinization must have found out that there was a regected clone" Aly ansewered...

karmakaze chapter 7 . 11/13/2002
Ok! I have a suggestion. Since Amy is now blind, that puts her in a weak position. If you want to add more romance to the story, you could have Chris or Andy try to save her. For a more dramatic approach, you could have the organization come back and kidnap Chris and Andy, and hold them as ransom for Amy, then have her need to save them without eyesight. Does she ever see again? Pleeeeeeeeeease continue!
Corundum Advance chapter 6 . 11/10/2002
amy cannot be blind! noooooooo! how is she going to save chris? ...did she fall in a black hole or something? anyway, plz continue! *is hooked*
karmakaze chapter 5 . 11/6/2002
Hi, Marina! Good update! Has Amy really gone blind? How will she save Chris now? And what happened to everyone? Update soon, because your story is getting pretty suspensful!
karmakaze chapter 4 . 11/3/2002
WHAT HAPPENED TO CHRIS? You really have people hooked on this story, so maybe in your next chapter you should have us find out for shure what happened to Chris, and see what Amy will do. If you keep saying that Chris is gone, or it was a dream, it might get a bit confusing. Still, keep writing. VERY good!
Azn Sakura Angel chapter 3 . 10/28/2002
backstreet boys - the call, re-run. replica - Lost, chapter re-run. It's like...she's going to be repeated times over and over again from when she channel surfed to getting chris's letter! Nice fic right now, short, but really cool. you better continue soon!
karmakaze chapter 1 . 10/28/2002
Hi, me again. I think your story is definately getting better. You leave your reader hanging each chapter, which is good, because it helps make sure that the reader will be back. When I read your first part in July, it was a bit rushed, I thought, but your writing is coming along great. I really hope you continue this, but perhaps make a longer chapter, and by now make it a bit clearer where you are going with the story, or have Amy read the letter! Anyways, please continue, because your story is quite captivating:)
karmakaze chapter 3 . 10/28/2002
PLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEASE CONTINUE! I don't think it would be right to continue my Replica High story, because it is too similar to another work on this site. I'll keep writing replica though. YOU HAVE TO CONTINUE THIS STORY!
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