|Reviews for Moonlight|
| anon chapter 6 . 6/25/2016
Please continue this if you can! I'm really liking it so far, Mina seems ike a very sweet character and Xan is absolutely spot on. I'd love to read more of this!
| Kyn chapter 6 . 2/24/2015
Hee! This was much nicer to read. I am still here, and still reading!
I like how all this is going, and I am waiting to see more :)
| Kyn chapter 5 . 7/19/2014
Hmm. This is interesting.
I suggest you reconsider your formatting! It is sufficient enough that I am able to follow it, but it is very non-pleasurable to read things that are center-justified. Throwing Xan's conversation with his son in italics and left-justifying everything might be enough; I'm not sure.
Do continue writing!
| Bonnaroo chapter 3 . 11/3/2012
This is fantastic! Great framing device idea with Xan retelling the story to his son, and the detail of his torment with Mulahey and his imprisonment is quite well written and enthralling to read about. I like that you don't drawl out the events, and the way you have written post BG Xan is pretty spot on in my opinion. Great job!
| Akili-chan chapter 1 . 10/8/2012
Good start! It's always kind of weird to see Xan not going "Doooooooooom" all the time but he's an adorable father in this.
| Blue-Inked Frost chapter 1 . 10/7/2012
Good to see this fic! An intriguing start. :) I haven't played the mod, but I like Xan. With a baby involved and a story not over yet, I wonder if the premise is that Charname took time off to have a baby between SoA and Throne of Bhaal - which would be interesting.
Typos - "A cool summer breezes blows" (breeze), and tense issues in your first few paragraphs - you start in present tense (blows, breaks, stirs) and then switch to past tense for the rest of the story(walked, began, stared). Some missing commas: " a male voice says gently touching her shoulder" (between 'gently' and 'touching'); "Now what's wrong little one?" (between 'wrong' and 'little one'); "Lovely aren't they?" (between 'lovely' and 'aren't'). Not all rules about commas are firmly set, but they can add a lot of clarity to sentences with multiple clauses. Also, when addressing someone, a comma's generally used before the epithet or name. "What's wrong, Eleanor?" "What's up, my dear friend?"
I hope to read more of this story. :) Good start!