|Reviews for Broken|
| Guest chapter 49 . 5/15/2017
I enjoyed your story and I hope you haven't forgotten about it!
| JeSuisLeWalrus chapter 49 . 2/6/2017
Just wanted to voice my support and encouragement having binge-read the whole series again and post my thoughts on the whole series. I'm really enjoying going through the journey that made these characters who they are, especially Rachel's early experiences. The three stories really give depth to all the characters from the games in a way that feels entirely consistent with their original presentations, which is what fan fiction at its best is all about.
My one criticism is that I'm finding the sections with Benezia a little harder going, as - despite the glossary - the frequent use of the formal asari terms interrupts the flow of the writing for me. Despite this they are lifted by the rich characterisation which has become the hallmark or your work - illustrated particularly by the exploration of the characters' thoughts and the little annotations of their conversations that convey their emotions, reactions and thought processes.
The mature presentation of sex is another high point and is something that is hard to get right. It also adds further weight to the sense of who these people are. On the same front, it's good to see how you've managed to both make something of a joke of how everybody wants a piece of Shepard (which is a clumsy and occasionally absurd necessity to allow the player a choice of relationships in an RPG) and make it believable.
Having had a pathetically short attempt at doing my own fic (three chapters and a heap of notes...) I know it can be difficult to get time to produce anything. However, I'm sure I speak for others when I say I'd very much enjoy a continuation, and eventually a completion, of these works and that I fully expect them to remain a highlight of this site's offerings.
| Guest chapter 49 . 11/27/2016
This is my n1 favorite Mass Effect fanfiction. Ever. Great great work! And your Sha'ira is the best. I just want her to be happy.
Lots of kudos!
| jbmedallions chapter 49 . 10/31/2016
I have to say, I've enjoyed your writing so far and it's certainly keeping me in suspense.
The switching perspectives leaves me at times frustrated but it really works to keep my interest piqued.
You've done a bang up job of this. I look forward to seeing where you go with this.
| sherryE chapter 49 . 9/11/2016
So good. I love Aethyta, she and Benezia should have stayed together.
| sherryE chapter 48 . 9/11/2016
It is a wonderful read and a pleasure to be on this ride. Looking forward to mire. Keep up the great work.
| sherryE chapter 47 . 9/11/2016
Aaaah, another great chapter. I love arching their lives evolve. Great stuff
| sherryE chapter 46 . 9/11/2016
One of the many things I love about this story is the depth of their history. Each character. How their lives have evolved. I love Benezia and Aethyta. And now getting close to Liara and Shepard being together. Woohoo. Exciting
| Wooki chapter 49 . 8/29/2016
Wow so there is definitely this ominous feel to Diva and phy-whateverhernameis and I'm like what the heck is going on? And there are so many layers, and I'm like erebody suspect, Ere'body except Shiala. And whoa, how are you Benezia, sexy powerful Benezia and yet she's got that innocent streak a mile long, yeah I can totally see why she has a thing for Aethyta. Aethyta who is never dubious who cuts through the felonious erroneous Trim like a acid edged weapon, Aethyta who's unconventional passion winds Benezia up despite her best efforts. Just give in Benezia, it's gonna be so good when you do, I can't wait to ready that, these two are just so HOT together. I also like that hesitant slightly insecure side of Thyta when she's revving up to talk to Nezzy again it manages to be both endearing and sexy. I dunno that's just me.
| JBebe chapter 49 . 8/29/2016
Ahh, I love how you turn things on its head. I thought Aspasia denying Sha'ira entry had more to do with one-upping a rival, political machinations, and climbing the ladder than helping Benezia "let go." And I had to smile once I realized that Benezia and Aethyta getting stuck had more to do with Benezia being unfamiliar with deep mating melds and finding a mate. I'm going to have to go back some chapters, because I'm a little confused-so they conceived a child, but Benezia lost it? I must have missed it. And how unexpected out of all Benezia coterie to have Aspasia ship it.
Aethytha searching for Benezia and learning more about her importance was interesting as well as the hanar porn star revelation.
| Nessa chapter 49 . 8/27/2016
I smell trouble on the horizon! Diva being held can't end well, and Atheyta on the hunt for Benezia has the potential to cause an international incident. I'm glad Benezia is finally starting to heal though. Thank you for another amazing chapter, and I will hold out at least a week before puppy dog eyeing you. Promise!
| Guest chapter 48 . 8/5/2016
Aethyta as an engineering iconoclast is so unexpected, but is also so fitting that it's genius. It also matches well with how you've written Benezia, which makes them make sense as a couple in a way that sometimes feels missing in other fics. Great chapter and looking forward to more.
| Wooki chapter 48 . 7/30/2016
Im really torn when it comes to those other hetera, Anassa and Aspasia. i still want them to hurt for what the did, but all of this has been so stressful on Nezzy and i just want to see her gain a little equalibrium. Im also hoping for a satisfing reunion between Thyta and Nezzy because Thyta totally deserves that i think. Hostile take overs, super powered Asari, as per the norm you contiune to impress with a varied cast of characters not good nor bad constantly thrusting the readers into twist and turns and gradients and your unique storyline, and eventhough i can only hold on and hope for the best for my favorite ladies, Thyta, Nezzy, Liara and Shep, im still quite entertained every step on the way to the end.
| Pallan Minerva chapter 48 . 7/30/2016
I remember starting this story once but losing track of what was happening due to the strange Asari vocabulary. I'm glad I made it through now. It's very good. I'm looking forward to seeing where it goes.
| Nessa chapter 48 . 7/27/2016
Amazing as always. Poor aethyta - I agree, leaving messages sucks.
You've got me all focused on the science of it all- the biology of the implants and how it would have an effect on natural evolution and why the asari keep putting themselves through these rituals even after they left superstition behind and went secular. The possibilities are fascinating.
Of course, the upcoming biotic battle between all of Benezia's entourage is also something to look forward to
There will be an epic biotic battle right? I'd hate for Diva to just be a knife in the dark :)
I'm just gonna wait patiently over here for the next chapter. This is me. Sitting. Waiting. All patient. Don't you see how patient I'm being?