|Reviews for Picking Up the Pieces|
| BernerMom chapter 35 . 3/12
Absolutely beautiful story! You are a very talented writer, especially at a younger age. I was completely engrossed in the story. I especially liked how you ended it from Draco's perspective. It really was fitting. Beautiful work!
| Ehann chapter 15 . 2/27
I just saw that you wrote this when you were fifteen. You are an amazing writer and I love your story
| RhodaBush chapter 35 . 2/27
| Gabriela chapter 15 . 2/12
What what what you are 15? holy mother ! When i was 15 i could even write an essay. My god! you're so great! Im really loving this! This might be one of my fav fanfics of severus and hermione. Congrats! Keep it up with the writing, you've got potential girl! Lots of love from brazil.
| Sheri chapter 35 . 1/10
LOVE IT ! This needs to be the next movie! Have you thought about that?
| Beeny chapter 1 . 1/5
Really well written! Compelling!
| Merade chapter 35 . 12/4/2013
I stumbled on your story a couple of days ago, and I found it so compelling that I had to read it straight to the end. Personally, I think I have been searching for a proper resolution for Hermione, and I love how true you stayed to her character. Her ultimate rejection of Ron is precisely what a smart and mature woman would have done (I still can't understand why she and Harry forgave him for walking off when the going got tough in DH). I thought the pairing with Snape seemed far-fetched, but, having read your exposition, it makes sense. She is far older than her years and needs someone who loves what she loves: books, intellectual curiosity, and mental discipline. If he hadn't been so closed off emotionally, Snape would have had a teacher crush on her; older male teachers idolize students like Hermione. You capture and honor her complexity as the "insufferable know-it-all" who also possesses the truest heart, unflagging loyalty, and boundless empathy. She is the only character in the Potterverse who would have the perseverance and optimistic ability to forgive someone as deeply damaged as Snape. If he were to have lived, he would have earned the redemptive future you gave him. Your theory rings true, and I appreciate your writing this story.
When you referred to your age after Happy Birthday, I was stunned. Without sounding too old and condescending, you have a great understanding of character and relationships for someone so young. I would hazard saying that you do more credible job resolving Hermione's character than her creator. You also do a lovely job showing that Snape is a true match: he is her intellectual equal giving her the challenge she needs; he is brave and loyal with a capacity to love equivalent to hers; and he provides a dark foil to her light. JKR took the easy, superficial "opposites attract" route with Ron and Hermione's relationship which simply doesn't ring true in its exposition. In some ways, Snape and Hermione are "opposites," but their character oppositions are more like yin and yang than Ron and Hermione's oil and water. You convinced me that your pairing shares fundamental values that allow them to accept their differences. Those differences turn out, through your explication, to be of personality exacerbated by failure to communicate. I thought it was quite smart that you had Snape wrestle with his loyalty to Lily, proving he really was true to his word. His redemption in canon hinged on that pledge made to Dumbledore, and I came away from your story believing that Snape had not only remained loyal to Lily but also that he discovered that Lily's legacy was of love. Without Hermione's help, he could never have felt love.
At one point in your AN, you explain why you have Hermione seem girlish about the discovery of Snape's physicality. That rings true for an inexperienced young woman who analyzes everything. What worked even better was your portrayal of Snape's inexperience. He a seasoned "man of the world" who only knows of women...and even human touch...through observation. His desires are decidedly adult and yet he doesn't even know how to be touched. No bodice-ripping allowed! The restraint you show in your characters is pitch-perfect, reflective of both their inexperience and their personal discipline. Well done.
Your dialogue and descriptions are very good and writerly. They read very smoothly. The only thing that became bothersome was the repetition of variations of smirking and lip-biting (though I laughed when you pointed out Snape's observation that she bit her lip too much...such an irritation in canon!).
Thanks for writing this piece...and good luck with your writing. You surely have the raw talent.
| C chapter 35 . 11/20/2013
I really liked this story, I think Severus was written perfectly as so many stories struggle to match his personality well without making him too soppy when it comes to Hermione. Good luck if you decide to write any more.
| r99smith chapter 35 . 11/20/2013
this was a wonderful story. i am so glad i found it. i am surprised that it received so few reviews. I do wonder though, why was Luna so adamant that Hermione not take off the the bracelet? Did Hermione ever need to use the Liquid Luck? What about the rest of the Phoenix tears? Thanks for writing.
| Aconite7 chapter 35 . 11/7/2013
Just finished reading this and have really enjoyed it. Also I have to say it's great that you based your Snape on the book Snape and not Alan Rickman. Much as I love movie Snape, I prefer it when people stick to the original Snape image from the books :-)
| ZabuzasGirl chapter 1 . 10/14/2013
Update immediately, please!
| Paula chapter 35 . 9/20/2013
I just loved your story! It was great to follow Snape and Hermione, their inner life and all. You write very well, I think. This story should definitely have the capacity to be another movie! Have you tried to get it out as a book?
Thank you so much for this beautiful romance - I enjoyed every moment of reading it! (Your whole story in a couple of days...)
At last: Hope you will continue your writing! As I understand youre a young person, and if you write THIS GOOD now, where will that end?
Thank you again for letting me know more about my favorite charactre; Snape!
| Guest chapter 35 . 9/16/2013
wile I'm not a fan of the pairing it was a beautiful and well wrote story that portrayed the characters well and is a story I became fond of. -Nox
| TheLadyJaye chapter 35 . 8/31/2013
LOOOOOOVED this story! Thank you. And what a sweet, delightful ending!
| TheLadyJaye chapter 15 . 8/29/2013
Ok, they're coworkers, why can't anyone know? It shouldn't be against rules for them to date?