|Reviews for Danny Phantom: The Video Game|
| Newspace19 chapter 25 . 11/5/2013
So this story was definitely something new but it was definitely welcome. I thought it was simple but well written, like it was an actual guide sold at GameStop. I liked the original characters too but definitely shady more, sassy silent bastard. I thought the end wrapped up nicely plus leaving an opening for a sequel like most games do but the "secret chapter" was terrible. I'm sorry I know that's rude but I gave up halfway through. It felt like you ruined the group dynamics and pretty much everything else built up in the story. Maybe should've saved it for a sequel? Either way main story was great and fun to read
| yoiyami chapter 2 . 10/12/2012
Okay, I was going to try and read all of this but I couldn't. It's just way too much WTFery for me. I assume this is also a self-insert story, so correct me if I'm wrong. Please, please, please, do not use the word "f-t." It's offensive and it just makes you look unprofessional, although I suppose that's a given what with the story you wrote. Your punctuation is spotty. Sometimes you dont have periods at the ends of your sentences. Your spelling is okay, but you misspelled Britain and Jasmine. You mix up "your" and "you're" occasionally. You write this in a script form, except you use asterisks for actions. I'd suggest using an actual script form if that's what you really want to do. That is all.