thank you for sharing this story with us. It is one of my favorites, and I eagerly await the next chapter.

Honestly, it's rare to find a Harry/Fleur story. Even rarer yet to find a slow burn one. I've found that most people that ship Fleur with harry rarely look at the person and thin that they just want the protagonist to end up with the de facto "Hot One", so for that this story has my attention.
Furthermore, the plot and how you deal with the confusion and lack of information is pretty awesome. The first person keeps new things coming and makes catching somebody up on recent events(Fleur" much more interesting. I'll be keeping a look out for any updates, and hopefully it will be soon. I myself have a lot going on so I completely understand what its like to have to drop hobbies in favor of improving your lifestyle.
Also, while still a little sudden, the build up to the kiss was phenomenal.
Best of luck, and send me a chapter early for you random act of kindness! HAHA

Having reached chapter ten I find myself mildly puzzled as to why Harry is almost continuously a background figure. Another point that perplexed me was how even the original author missed the crucial point that Harry was supposed to be Riddle’s equal. From that perspective Harry would be pretty special as regards speed and raw power which Tom Riddle was supposed to have in abundance, so logically Ron in your story would be flat on his backside as would Fleur in a duel. A reason why he doesn’t display the abilities of the one that the Dark Lord marked as his equal would flesh out how Ron holds his own. Some authors use the horcrux in his scar as a plot device which could be cliche but this is a fan fiction not the original so I say throw in as many as you feel comfortable with. Fleur one could easily grasp was by far more experienced so a result would understandably favour her. The description of Molly (who is a favourite character of mine) illustrating how she could have been the one to end Bellatrix was superb, giving the reader a definite understanding of how formidable a witch she was. Overall this is a well constructed story albeit with a dearth of the genre central character showing his mettle, but as it builds perhaps Harry will come into his own. Do please try to continue this as it has already displayed great potential to be a darned good read.

Your story is great. That person... gotta be politically correct now days dont want to offend a bitch lol... is a crazy most likely homicidal maniac who for some stupid ass reason decided to waste time and effort reading and writing bullshit reviews. keep up the good work

Wow, interesting story-line with interesting pairings. The guest reviewer (chapter 11) is a complete an utter nut-job who seems to have too much time on his hands and probably lives on his own. I can't understand why he has reviewed the way he has but think he doesn't understand the meaning of fiction ie "literature in the form of prose, especially novels, that describes imaginary events and people" or "something that is invented or untrue". As this is a fan fiction site, one would have thought that the nut-job would have understood the nature of fan fiction and reviewed in an appropriate manner. Please keep posting.

A semi-corporal owl should be A semi-corporeal owl.

I mean, the guy made some good points. Ron/Daphne is a tragic abomination of a pairing. Naturally, I'm a big fan of Harry/Fleur, but also Harry/Daphne. And Harry/Fleur/Daphne. So, I think she's too good for Ron, even when he's supposed to be a more interesting and competent guy that usual.

The story is a little dull because it's Fleur-centric and the bulk of the drama and action is, of course, surrounding Harry and his closest friends. The mama-drama is sort of interesting, but it also feels kind of unnecessary. I think the part I dislike the most is that her mother had drunken rages that resulted in Fleur breaking a limb, and another where she was tossed into a fucking fire. That's a bit much.

I also don't personally enjoy how, comparatively, Ron is much "cooler" and has been sort of implied to generally be better than Harry so far. There's been some (more recent) hints that Harry isn't as much of a loser in comparison as it previously seemed but not quite enough to shake the image of Ron suddenly somehow being more heroic and powerful than Harry. Harry needs some more of that Chosen One stank.

Though I don't especially like Ron, a competent and super loyal version of him is typically nicer than the alternative. I just prefer my primary protagonist to also be the primary bad ass, so I want Harry to be more impressive. Though, with Dumbledore around, the bar is set pretty high. If he isn't one of those retarded "bash fic" versions of Dumbledore, anyway. If I had my way, Dumbledore's level of knowledge and mastery would be the bare minimum I'd like to see Harry reach. Eventually. The knowledge might take longer than the war, but the talent with magic feels necessary, considering Harry's position in the story. He's the Chosen One. Voldemort's "equal". Essentially his generation's Dumbledore, as far as Dark Lord opponents go. He's just... way too plain and boring canonically.

The rest of the shit that guy said was hilarious though. I really enjoyed the "kill that fucker at least twice" bit. I mean, at least he's thorough. Did he compare Ron to Herakles, or am I reading too much into it?

Well I can't say I'm happy that fluer not returning but I always knew that it was a possibility. I found the sharing memories to be interesting. I would like to offer a bit of advice. Fleur and Harry are the End game you might want to add a bit more of these personal moments that they shared in this chapter.

Hey Scrubb you have a he'll of a tale going here .I'm so sorry with the ignorant trolls hounding you .Take it like water off a ducks as a greedy reader I have to say more please and Thank You

It's your prerogative to mock those reviews, but there's a grain of truth to them. While they weren't the most eloquent, those reviews do express a very valid point - Harry Potter is not a significant part of your story.

He's the object of discussion, and occasionally performs actions as part of a group, but other than Occlumency lessons, he's relegated to a tangential plot device to keep the story moving forward.

Others praise your slow developing relationship and not rushing. To me, this is simply because he doesn't have a role in this story - and it reads as such.

From this last chapter, it's possible that you realize this. But even this chapter feels extremely contrived and forced. You have them in an unrealistic situation, developing their relationship through physical proximity and looking at memories and the reason for this is because Harry Potter has had no other role than as a student of Occlumency.

It's not a crime to emphasize Ron & Hermione instead of killing them off in the first chapter. I actually really appreciate your characterization of them (even the "betrayal" which felt extremely obvious, I'm actually astonished you decided that none of the other characters would have guessed it). But you've over-emphasized them in such a way that 100k words into your story, Harry Potter is just a device to move the plot forward rather than a character in his own right.

Feel free to continue to disagree, even mock and shame me. I just feel it would be a pity if a story as good as this continued with such a problematic issue (in my opinion)

This last chapter was, by far, the best chapter of this story so far. Maybe because it focused on only one or two storylines, the most interesting ones, which is the slowburn Harry/Fleur pairing and the stuff with Umbridge.

I read the whole story for the first time today and I enjoyed it quite a bit, but I have to say that there were also a few times I came close to quitting. Most notably in chapter 9. I really felt that you completely jumped the shark there with having Ron somehow trick Voldemort into getting taken to a ministry ball with a portkey. It's just completely unrealistic and seems to have been way too easy to pull off. It completely took me out of the story. The fact that even after that the ministry still didn't believe Voldemort had returned is even more silly.

I decided to keep reading though because there's also a whole lot of great stuff in this fic. The originality of a Fleur POV for instance, how you got her in Hogwarts, the slow burn relationship with Harry, the clashes with Umbridge, Minerva's characterisation, all the Order stuff. It's all really great. Fantastic even.

It's just a shame that those brilliant parts are too often not the focus of the story. Instead there's a storyline of Ron who suddenly changed that just kept dragging on and on without anything interesting happening. Maybe because we only see him from Fleur's POV? I love Ron most of the time, and I'm glad there's no bashing here, but he's pretty much a completely different character from canon out of nowhere. Way too competent way too fast, and in a relationship with a Slytherin he barely interacted with. It's jarring. And despite how super competent he is he still became an alcoholic because he thinks he's not good enough? A really weird change from the Ron we all know and love.

My advice would honestly be to just shove that Ron storyline way to the background, or resolve it soon. Cause at least in my opinion it's by far the least interesting part of this story and it has really overstayed its welcome.

Another thing you might want to consider is giving some of your good guys some more bite (here or in future stories). Some are a bit toothless for the most part, making some scenes (especially in the earlier chapters) too cheesy. What I mean by that is that characters don't have many clear personality flaws. The first thing Fleur does is apologise for being a bitch last year, and we get an explanation of why she was so much different in GoF compared to your portrayal. Septima is a Slytherin who's actually a half-blood and hates everything about modern Slytherin. Daphne is a Slytherin who's constantly going against Malfoy and is in love with Ron and gets along with everyone. I could go on.

Probably the most loved character from the books is Snape because he's such a flawed and relatively complex character. He's an asshole who still does the right thing. Mostly. It wouldn't hurt to make Fleur a bit more haughty or bitchy. For Septima to have a bit more house pride. Or for Daphne to have some pureblood ideas. They can still all be good guys but it would make them more interesting characters.

Like I said though, this last chapter was really great and I can't wait to read where the plotlines of this chapter are going. So keep it up and good luck writing!

Many thanks for the creative gift!

I really really liked this fic. Flyers perspective is so interesting and I appreciate the slow burn so the Dr th and romance doesn't feel rushed or seem out of character.

I had no expectations when I decided to check this story out...but am so glad I did. Quite well done!

Thanks for the story...