Reviews for Ship of the Line: Humanities Loss
SSSra chapter 1 . 1/8
good story will you be continuing it or is it dead?
WBH21C chapter 1 . 12/8/2016
So very well done!
Flint Tintin chapter 1 . 11/23/2016
More, please! The story is great, very interesting, makes me ask What Happens Next?
Storiesdr chapter 1 . 11/6/2016
Excellent start, hope to see where you will go from here.
Stalyon chapter 1 . 8/20/2016
An interesting story. It's a real shame that the story hasn't been updated.
MattKennedy chapter 1 . 4/24/2016
So much epicness and potential! Hope you continue the story sometime! :D
Guest chapter 1 . 4/20/2016
A good start and I hope you'll post more.

I should probably point out the plothole, though it might just be sloppy thinking and inertia on the part of your crew. They indicated that they had to return to Earth orbit go return the Three Aliens to Earth, and in fact did so even after it was conclusively proven unnecessary. ;-)

From their location behind the moon they sent transported down uniforms and communicators to Willow and Buffy (and testing that first with inanimate objects was certainly prudent even if done without much forethought), then they transported Willow up to the ship and then both Willow with Giles back down, to return with Buffy and Xander's books, and all of that before moving to return their other 'guests.' ;-)
Avalonemyst chapter 1 . 12/6/2015
Very well done
Saul Good chapter 1 . 8/17/2015
Holy. Fucking. Shit. This was fuckin amazing. ive read a a lot of your work and they all stand up on their own. You write incredibly well and I would love to read more of this fic
Dymian chapter 1 . 8/2/2015
Please more please more please more? Please?
hank chapter 1 . 7/15/2015
interesting concept , has potential, I would be interested in seeing more if possible
bogus chapter 1 . 3/22/2015
This fic pretty much sucks. The characters are both weak and out of character. Mentally and emotionally weak with very little willpower or personality or sense of themselves. It's trivial to see your personality leaking through them, you whiny little child, and I don't like it. You're pretty much completely mindless with only two settings: childishly impulsive and dumb as a stone..
Blackholelord chapter 1 . 12/27/2014
Well its not bad for a first chapter. Boy it sucks for Xander, but still couldn't you made him into a science or medical officer than the EMH or even an alien version of those two occupations.
Fizzfaldt chapter 1 . 12/24/2014
I'm liking everything you've written so far
Difdi chapter 1 . 11/2/2014
You have a couple of errors in ths chapter - one technological, the other a case of poor phrasing.

The technlogical error has to do with cellular telephones and the speed of light. The Moon is 1.3 light seconds from the Earth. This means that a radio signal, sich as those used by satellites and the cellular network takes 1.3 seconds to travel each way. This causes a significant lag time when communicating over such a distance. While subspace communications are effectively instantaneous over distances under 100 light years, 20th century Earth communications can't receive them.

The phrasing error has to do with Xander ordering things from the replicator system. Xander is recognized as the ship's EMH, in other words a medical doctor. The computer could certainly produce a glass of Coca-Cola, but the word 'coke' does not necessarily refer to that beverage, especially not in common 25th century usage. Coke can be Coca-Cola, a type of coal or, as is most likely when the computer is fulfilling an order by a DOCTOR, cocaine!

The computer is likely to ask for clarification, much as it did with the Twinkies, but if it does not and simply assumes that it should provide the most likely substance a medical hologram would order replicated, it would produce a white powder, not a brown beverage. Given the security access of an EMH in the absence of a Chief Medical Officer, it wouldn't even ask for command permission before producing the drug.
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