|Reviews for Half Blood Troubles|
| Jade's One of a Kind chapter 4 . 1/23/2013
Language? Oh boy...;)
Well, decently elaborated chapter, my friend. I must admit, I had gotten lost by most of the bunched up information that had been occurring. Take it easy, it's not like you're competing in a marathon. A successful outcome of a chapter is always one that elaborates on crucial details, and takes their gradual time. Just remember that. It'll engage readers a whole lot more since you're easing them slowly through the plot. For example, let's say you write about a couple, in which one of them loses their memory, and everyone close to that individual must help retrace their steps from the very beginning. You wouldn't mention in the first few chapters that 'Oh, the person suddenly remembers their love partner', would you? You'd have to progress everything step by step, so the reader can enjoy the experience, instead of everything stated out bluntly. You understand? Even if you'd have to input multiple cliffhangers, and even if the whole fanfic is like, 35 chapters, you're still giving the reader a chance to actually feel as if they could jump right into the stories, themselves. Don't twist my words, I was immensely fond of the chapter. Just remember that tip I presented to you, and your fanfics will be masterpieces just like that. :D
I believe I'm just about finished with my rant. No one would form a rant in a review if they never cared of the author's writing style. I do care for yours. There's always a space left for improvement, and you must fill that space up as much as possible :)
Take care, my friend. Let this be a lesson and learn situation according to you, alright? I will indeed be on the look out for more of your works in the future :D
| Jade's One of a Kind chapter 3 . 12/3/2012
Huh. A flying group of pegasus. Being related to Alex and Percy. What a world...
One word, and one syllable. SHORT. S-H-O-R-T. I mean, I've witness barely any detail in chapters, but THIS?! It's like...Napoleon! LOL.
Finish. I'm fond of it. The next chapter better full of all the thrilling details, my friend.
...I'll be on the look out of the next update.
| Jade's One of a Kind chapter 2 . 10/19/2012
Yeah, I agree with Alex. " WHEN ARE THEY GETTING THE LETTER?!"
Haha, Don't worry. You have a good amount of chapters before they get sent to that Academy. I'm never THAT impatient.
Going back to more relevant info, I adore your writing style! Way much more detailed and realistic then your other fanfics; hope no offence was taken.
But seriously. I hardly know of the series, but the way you're explaining the countless events taking a part in this story, it's like I know so much!
Keep it up, my friend!
| Guest chapter 2 . 10/19/2012
| Jade's One of a Kind chapter 1 . 10/19/2012
Haha! (I laugh like that under enthusiasm).
Great start, my friend! So, Dylan. Is he a character that will be part of the main plot or is he just a minor individual? Because already, I feel strangely attached to his form of personality. If he has already made his appearance in the books, then simply ignore my question, and let me hollow at my ridicules...
So hurry and post chapter DOS on the site! Keep it coming!