|Reviews for The Time of Consequences|
| Noonie1 chapter 5 . 9/2/2016
Great ending! I personally don't think it needed more... lots to think about :)
I am glad to have more of your writing to plow through, even if they are shorter pieces. Thanks!
| GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 5 . 11/7/2015
Since this story is just a short continuation of the last one, I'm going to review them together.
I really can't put these stories in my favorites list or my "The Very Best Luna and Harry" community. It's nice that you wrote a closure chapter once you decided you would never finish, but it's not at all a satisfactory ending. This Luna character is not the quirky, worry-free one of canon, and she can never be shipped with Harry (or anyone, for that matter). There is no comic relief character any more. Sirius has become mostly serious. So has Luna. Ron and the rest of the Weasleys have been written out by putting Harry and Hermione in Ravenclaw. Remus has been shunted off in isolation to do research. Nymphadora Tonks is off doing her own thing.
It's very novel for Voldemort to take over Fudge, and then oust him from office by taking down Dumbledore, then the government falls as a consequence. But at that point you really needed to find a way for Sirius and Luna to discover that Fudge was harboring Voldemort and have the good guys win. It should have been a no-brainer when Fudge showed up to apply for the DADA position. Fudge probably couldn't fight his way out of a paper bag.
With no ships and no comedy and the wizarding society descending into darkness and dictatorship even earlier than last time, no wonder you didn't want to continue it. It is salvageable if you ever decide to rewrite it.
| K chapter 1 . 10/3/2015
Not too sure about this one. It seems to me you gave Volde too much power much too soon. I'll give it another chapter or two.
| jason chapter 5 . 9/6/2015
Dont forget you owe me a 32 oz. .95 CENTS PEPSI
| Jason chapter 3 . 9/6/2015
Linda turn off your
| oneeyereader chapter 2 . 4/11/2015
Wonder if Jedi Goat is Related to Jedi Master Goat.
| aueaoue chapter 1 . 3/23/2015
pity that you abbadoned this instead finished, it would take same amount of effort.
For example Luna could realize that Fudge could be Tom so she, Sirius and polyjuiced Harry go to his office to test if his scar hurts.
Fudge decides to kill harry given oppurtinity so they duel until Fudge tries to AK Harry but fails because he depleted his small magical core and Harry stuns him.
They find diary, destroy it then polyjuice Fudgemort as Luna and kill him so Luna could escape as polyjuiced Fudge and happily live ever after.
| DarkViolet7258 chapter 5 . 3/16/2015
So it all goes in circle
| Stromsten chapter 5 . 2/3/2015
Thanks for the closure! It's actually quite good, with that twist at the end, and really, it's much less depressing to skip Chapters 5-56 of that storyline. ;)
| zolydck chapter 5 . 1/4/2015
well thank you for the closure (all be it depressing).
I would have hoped harry would be smart enough to realize (even if after the fact) that he was clouded by grief but I have to say this is well written and a very interesting twist on the typical time travelling stories.
Thank you for the read.
| mrpietan chapter 5 . 11/23/2014
had reread from the beginning. at least you ended it. it has ended. yes?
| Ibskib chapter 5 . 11/21/2014
A shame, some authors like planning out everything, and having a framework to keep the red thread, others prefer writing more freeform with sometimes only a loose idea of the end so they don't lose motivation, and just edit more to keep it coherent, perhaps the latter approach would fit you better? If you ever regain the desire to write a larger project.
For perspective: Brandon Sanderson is one of the former while George RR Martin belongs to the latter group, probably why his drafts keep growing ;-)
The ending feels pretty anticlimactic, perhaps it would work better in a written out story, but the idea of things resetting to canon, as the ending Luna wished for just isn't very satisfying. Cedric being possessed was pretty obvious, but cool anyway.
I had difficulty buying that Harry never would never speak Luna again, after all she had no more foreknowledge, something he should have accepted in time, and placed blame where it belonged, at this point they had known each other for quite some years, that doesn't jive with the Harry from Snorkack, or did a happier life make him a worse person somehow?
attention - intention
never spoke - never spoken (helping verb)
Briton - Britain
| Arpad Hrunta chapter 5 . 11/21/2014
Interesting. I like this ending, and I like the missing gap, actually. It's a neat waybof doing things, especially in a time travel story.
The cyclical nature of the end is perfect, of course.
| Twiggy-Hoyden chapter 5 . 11/21/2014
Its as good a way to end it as any.
It was an interesting idea, but time travel stories are hard to write. Tis still a pretty good story, though this ending turns it a little dark.
| yuiop chapter 4 . 4/24/2014