|Reviews for What is Family?|
| ScytheMeister7 chapter 20 . 3/9
Please do continue
| Pirate18 chapter 20 . 3/1
YOU MUST CONTINUE! This has been the most suspensful, ans entertaining fic I've read in a long time. Please don't keep us waiting for longer! You have a talent, use it. :)
| Guest chapter 20 . 2/8
Ahhh this story was awesomely cool! I actually really like how u incorporate bits and pieces from the real episodes :) u should really finish this story, it's begging to have an ending and I really wanna know what happens next. Thank you for taking the time to write this story thus far, please finish it when u have the time... Which hopefully won't be too long a wait for your anxious readers haha.
Sincerely, your anonymous fan
| Heather Mallard chapter 7 . 2/6
Very interesting chapter ...poor Neal. I dont see why Keller, didn't just kill him when he had the chance, but I guess he felt he could use him with the forgeries. Now it seems that Neal's painting has sealed his doom. poor Neal. I am quite sure he didn't mean to let the cat out of the bag. Peter must be beside himself. I am enjoying this story of yours but do stil find some of the English used disracting.
For instance., your still using the word 'lied' wrongly. He 'lied' on his bed, is NOT correct English. There is no such word as lied in this context as he in, 'he 'lied' in his bed!
'Lied' means to 'lie' to tell a fib and is the past tense use of the word and that is all.
As in 'He lied to his friends, when he told them...blah blah..." understand. I hope this clarifies the use of the word 'lied' for you for your future stories...and I hope you take this correction, in the manner they are given...i.e that I am not trying to be nasty, but to simply inform...
Well done over all and thanks for the fun read. 3
| Heather Mallard chapter 5 . 2/5
Hi I am enjoying this story...However that said can I just say one never says, 'Neal lied in his bed!' The right way to write this would be to say, 'Neal lay in his bed. It's 'he laid down on his bed' and not 'he lied down on his bed' Do you see the difference?
...The word 'lied' would be used in the context of 'he lies'; he tells a lie; or the past tense use of the word, 'he lied... about the evidence ..' etc ...Ok?
Just an example of some of the English you are using, that is incorrect.
Apart from some discriptive writing being long winded and unecessary, the jist of this story is nice and kind of cute...However that said, I am finding the English, and grammar at times waring, I cannot lie. Your Beta should've picked up on it and if you don't have one, maybe it would be a good idea to get one.
Sorry to sound cruel, but I do believe your idea's are good and if it's just the English and or, the poor grammar that is letting you down, then I am telling you, that can be improved upon. If you're willing to learn, that is. All that said for now I am still reading and so I like your idea's. Well done.
| Renks chapter 20 . 2/4
I want to know what happens!
| Guest chapter 20 . 1/31
are you still working on this story?
| Guest chapter 20 . 1/16
OMG please update! :D
| lady Seria chapter 13 . 12/13/2013
Hey, I love your Story. The plot line is great - something different from the norm. I just wanted to take a quick look at the Story and now I can't stop reading...
Just a short side note about this chapter: potatoes did not come to America from Europe. They originally are from Chile, spread over South and Middle America and were brought to Europe after Columbus. People over here actually refused to eat them because they were poisenous (they tried the aboveground stuff) until the German king had the fields guarded by his Military - then People thought it might be valuable and started stealing and eating and eventually growning them... Just an interesting tibit... :-)
| Abby chapter 20 . 11/9/2013
You have to finish this!
| Guest chapter 1 . 10/12/2013
Please update soon, would love to know what happens next
| Guest chapter 1 . 10/1/2013
Please update soon, this story is really interesting and i want to know whats going to happen
| towelday42 chapter 20 . 9/29/2013
Love this fic! Pls keep writing!
| Guest chapter 20 . 9/5/2013
Oh come on its been two monthes now...isn't it time u update...
| Guest chapter 20 . 8/23/2013
please update soon