|Reviews for Hell|
| LizzeXX chapter 14 . 10/15/2013
Lol, it would be a little hard for me to have done those reviews as I was, according to my email alerts, in a meeting with my boss and then driving a car at the times they were submitted :) I don’t check my reviews till the end of the day and did not see these recent ones till around 11pm. Even now I am using my lunch break to respond to something from yesterday. Not everyone who defends a story is the author you know, I’ve found my readers are very…protective lol. As this story is completed, meaning I can’t upload another chapter just to respond as that is against the rules of the site, and you’re a ‘guest’ review that I can’t PM to discuss ways to better the story, I feel this is the only way to ‘reply.’ As you can see, this is the actual author, I don’t ever review my own stories by the way, the only time is to leave a reply, as a ‘guest LizzeXX’ and only as a guest so that I might later delete it. I will always sign as LizzeXX and I will always delete the review within the week (as I will be deleting this one) as I feel it’s cheating to review your own story.
This is merely a response, I’ll say what I always say about OCs. It’s perfectly fine if you don’t like an OC, that’s cool, some will some won’t and that’s ok :) Everyone has their own opinions so to each his/her own. I only try my best to make a character realistic and believable within the scope of the story-Universe I’m writing in and the background of the character themselves, giving effort to letting readers get to know the character as well as the main ones through focusing on them. I know my best will not always be good enough for some and that’s why I keep writing, to grow as an author. And that’s why I will keep writing no matter what :) Unfortunately, for this story, we don’t see all of Michelle’s background till near the end of the trilogy though I do try to make all her talents justified through that background and her history as a Hunter :)
As this story is completed, the OC is who the OC is, so there might be other stories out there (I know there are definitely better ones) that you might be interested in reading than to continue with this given the dislike of the OC. Something more worth your time because I really would rather people read things they enjoy than suffer through things they don’t. Perhaps, one day, when I have enough time between family/work/school to actually eat 3 meals a day and sleep more than 4 hours, I’ll come back to my older stories and tweak them and edit them again, until that day, this is all there is, just me trying my best on my journey to grow :)
This 'review' will be deleted with in the week.
| Guest chapter 10 . 10/14/2013
Ahaha, I like how the author goes under anonymous accounts to defend herself and write nice comments about her talents on her own story. But no, it just got more Mary-Sue the more I read until I was genuinely laughing at some parts. Oh, of course, Michelle gets all of the cool moves that the brothers pull off in the show, all of the lines that they're known for, obviously she has a past with Gabriel/The Trickster and OBVIOUSLY she is important. This doesn't even have a decent plot outside of Michelle; it's just an exact retelling of the show second-by-second with a useless character thrown in that has no personality and a generic predictable backstory. She barely even has any added lines, she just steals lines from other characters from the show. This is a truly pathetic story. The chapters are insanely long, too, and I lose interest in them about halfway through. This is a very OC-centred story; everything that makes the show characters THEM is stolen by this bland OC, and you make her sound like the main character rather than the Winchester brothers.
| Mitchie chapter 1 . 10/14/2013
Was rereading this again (LOVE IT) and got to HEaven, was gonna review there, but saw something here, watned to comment on...if you close your eyes you can see in the dark better than trying to squint and adjust.
And Ic an balance a bowling ball on my head, just because i CAN doesn't mean I do 24/7. So what if Michelle can hide weapons well? Just because she CAN doesn't ean she'll be fully packing heat every hunt. Lighten up, it's a fanfiction.
| JackSpicer2311 chapter 1 . 10/14/2013
Dude, Guest, calm the f*** down. If you don't like the story/OC then, here's an idea...don't read the story? All it really does is prove to people that the author has some serious skills if, having discovered you hate the OC early off...you're STILL reading. Commenting on it, really won't change the story, it's completed.
But btw...you might want to read the .whole thing. before leaving comments, LizzeXX explains ALL the things you bring up later on that justify Michelle's talents completely. IDK how many times she's mentioned/will mention that you have to wait for everything to be revealed, which is amazing of an author to be able to pull off, that level of curiousity and waiting for 3 stories.
| Guest chapter 6 . 10/14/2013
Oh my fucking God, and now on the next chapter she knows exactly what they're dealing with, even with no evidence, AND claims to know almost every freaking supernatural creature in the world? AND can hide over twenty weapons "easily" on her person? No, she's not realistic at all. God, I'm sick of fucking Mary Sues everywhere. And I'm only a paragraph into the sixth chapter.
| Guest chapter 5 . 10/14/2013
Oh my God. Are you actually kidding me? I could tolerate this story at first, but I'm only on the fifth chapter and I hate Michelle. She's such a Mary Sue, holy shit, I can't even bear it! She's immune to the demon blood by YED, yet she's a 'special child', she has powers from before that were "awakened" by YED, she can SEE IF DEMONS ARE POSSESSING PEOPE, she can fucking see in the dark, everyone is shocked at how pretty she is and how "badass" she is... a typical Mary Sue... And I'm only on Chapter 5, there's probably a shitload more. Oh, and what's that? She gets to steal half of the main characters' well-known witty lines, too? Oh, of course!
| RippahGoneWolf chapter 14 . 9/16/2013
This story was awesome. I am so going to the next one. :D
| Kathy chapter 2 . 7/19/2013
I loved this chapter, I thought the way you introduced snippets of Mich's personality and her background was really well done. Also, the way she interacts with the boys as a hunter, and not as a crazy fangirl/ item is really refreshing! A new fan to SN, and to SN OC fics, i'm really excited for the next chapter!
| Guest chapter 11 . 7/18/2013
HOLY SHIT I LOVE THIS STORY SO MUCH it makes me so happy because my names actually Michelle and i have a thing for Sam and sometimes my friends call me Mitchie (which is at least better than them calling me shelly because only my family calls me shelly)
| Paddy and Moony's Angel chapter 1 . 6/3/2013
Hey I just have i say I totally agree with you on Supernatural going downhill after season 5. This looks like its gonna be awesome. I know you are an amazing author as I have read your Docoter who Stories (Love them!) I can't wait to keep reading!
| CourtneyRae31 chapter 6 . 3/2/2013
Those gifts were freaking AMAZING!
| Ninavs2 chapter 14 . 11/20/2012
| Ninavs2 chapter 10 . 11/20/2012
Michelle a virgin?! That was kinda weird... And Sam didn't know? It's kinda hard to believe that in 6 months together they didn't talk about it... I mean he remembers...well ok.
| Ninavs2 chapter 9 . 11/19/2012
Wow this fic is really good! I started just curious but damn...I'm addicted!
| MidnightAlley chapter 14 . 11/1/2012
This was great! I'm looking forward to reading the next one.