|Reviews for Diary of a CCP book 1|
| Guest chapter 1 . 11/2/2013
| Edhla chapter 1 . 7/3/2013
Disclaimer: I don't know the fandom, sorry. Also, I know that old fic is old, but I'm gonna go ahead and review it anyway :)
This is an interesting premise for a fic and I like how lively and enthusiastic you seem to be about it.
That said, there are a number of spelling, grammar and punctuation errors in this, so much so that I found it pretty hard to read what you were getting at sometimes. Some pointers:
- Capital letters. "I" is always a capital. Capital letters always go at the beginning of sentences. Capital letters are always needed for names.
- Commas and periods. There were sentences that had no punctuation at all, and they were run-on and really hard to read. If you like, I can point you toward some websites that give some pretty good rules on punctuation and how it actually changes the way people read your fic, which might help.
- You need to take a new line when a new person speaks... that third paragraph has a number of different speakers but it's nearly impossible to tell who's speaking at any given time.
I don't mean to be overly critical and I certainly don't want you to think I'm being mean. I think every writer and story has potential, but it's a shame this one isn't getting the attention it deserves and I'm almost positive it's because it's so extremely hard to read for the reasons above. Keep writing x
| freespiritx chapter 1 . 10/19/2012
Great story I love Katie she's really cool, funny and dumb.