Reviews for Maya's Troubling Journey
SoulReaper888 chapter 17 . 7/10
oooooo suspence. nice! well im gona call it a day for now give u some time to process just hom much i actually revie xD. all in all its a good story i like it alot. I look forward to reed some morenwhen i have time again. goodluck! and may the gods grant thee sharpness of mind and strength of spirit!

Reaper out...
SoulReaper888 chapter 16 . 7/10
ominess hint towards her parents being dead or involved... i like
SoulReaper888 chapter 15 . 7/10
lol well becoming Po shouldn't be THAT bad xD i mean his IS the dragon warrior... obviosly he's doing something right lol. Nice job with the spar btw it was good.

I bet she has to cook please tell me she has to cook xD
SoulReaper888 chapter 14 . 7/10
ooooooo the juicyness of it all... I love how people always get in their own way by not explaining stuff... its like they ask for trouble bwahahahahahaha
SoulReaper888 chapter 13 . 7/10
LOL! Runningbaway from home 101 how to bash ur mom in the head and have agood reason xD Well played TigerNinja well played indeed

Reaper out...
SoulReaper888 chapter 11 . 7/10
hahahaha fhe ship is real! gj on thay moment it works for me
SoulReaper888 chapter 10 . 7/10
I am confuse... This seems quite out of character for the group. usually theyd storm maya's house to resque her friend... i under stand if Shifu advises against it because of political stuff but theyd atleast propose it. Sorry i just felt that i should point that out
SoulReaper888 chapter 9 . 7/10
DumDum duuuuuuum! (sorry i just had too xD)
SoulReaper888 chapter 8 . 7/10
lol that is the friendliest psychlogically messed up kidnapper ever. do jot try that in real life people it will fail, but im glad it word for Anamer-... i kean Amy... xD

Reaper out...
SoulReaper888 chapter 6 . 7/10
wow Maya's a bit of a badass xD. I feel i should let u know that when ur referring to character more than once it is wise to refrain from using the same word over and over. like when u referred to Po at the beginning. u used panda 3 times in concession which kinda breaks the flow of the story. after using panda once try using descriptions like "heroic blob" or "Black and white saviour" maybe. ofc this is just advise u deside what to do with it
SoulReaper888 chapter 5 . 7/10
PO TO THE RESCUE! Skedoosh...
SoulReaper888 chapter 4 . 7/10
ooooooooo I sence family issues! xD well played uncle tonie well played indeed. what shell become of our heroin. will she keep running or find a way to fight back against her persuing (for some reason i cant find the spell check for that word) father? oh the suspence the drama!
SoulReaper888 chapter 3 . 7/10
oh i noticed something here. u shouod put in a line brek whenever time passes between too points or ther's a perspective change otherwise it confuses people and makes the reeding of the story too rushed. other than that good work
SoulReaper888 chapter 2 . 7/10
i see very good. nice touch with the flower. u convey the characters fear well. I do sugest longer chapters, but the diary entry feeling is also working in it's own right. I commend thee on keeping me fasinated
SoulReaper888 chapter 1 . 7/10
wow nice. you have more skill at first person writing tuen most people I've seen post that way. I am impressed. I cant really see how well you write story wise after just one chapter ofc, but sofar it seems good u built up suspence well with such a short and ominous chapter so I cant wait to read on.

U yet the Reaper stamp of aproval! (BAM!) Rejoys!

Rraper out...
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