|Reviews for The Successor|
| kikodaisywrites chapter 20 . 1/8
finally finished this monster of a fic! First of, you're a wonderful writer who writes too eloquently for her own good, srsly! Jokes aside, your words just flow and reveal themselves naturally like waves crashing the empty shore that's a blank page. You've amazing imagery and it makes breezing through everything such a visual experience. This one easily makes it to my top 10 ffviii fics! I know you wrote this a long time ago but just thought it'd be nice to drop some words! long as it is, I feel the story could've used less enigmatic/ambiguous dialogue and more descriptive, simple chapters. Sometimes, Rinoa and Squall's convos become redundant because their same fears are being fleshed out over and over, when a few, intense times could have punctuated it better. Would have loved clearer explanations, or maybe I was too slow to get them! either way, loved the dream dynamic and just thought the story would've been greater if the conflict was established early in a straight forward manner. Then again, that's your style and I love your work for it. Keep it up!
| LaylaEvercrest chapter 20 . 11/9/2015
Ok, so I was only two chapters or so from finishing it. I went back to read my reviews and I only reviewed up to Chapter 2! WTH?! How did that happen?! I swear I thought I reviewed it further, but it appears I am wrong. I must have did it in my head and continued on thinking that I would later go back and write it out. #FAIL. Ugh, I'm sorry. I guess it means that it was engaging enough that I got sucked in.
I guess I see what you mean when you said you didn't tend to add enough in. Lots of long spurts of Dialog. I guess the trick would be to space out the descriptions so the reader has bits a peaces through out the peace instead of one giant paragraph.
I do think dialog is a strength. Each character has their voice and it's different. One is very much female while Squall keeps in tone with how a male speaks. I often see that blurring so KUDOS!
Oh and the Seifer and Ellone thing... (HUGE GRIN). I see what you mean. I guess I did read it but... yeah it didn't stick in my head that she was being serious. Not sure how I missed that because it was kind of obvious that she wasn't.
So over all I can see why this is extremely emotion for most people. It certainly hit me in an uncomfortable place. My mom got sick and suddenly her body started shutting down she could no longer speak or think right. My father was so heart broken that he did whatever he could to save her which meant moving her far away from us and we (the kids) had a lot of questions with no answers. That part of the story kind of hit home for me as being authentic. Great job.
So I guess this doesn't make up for the lack of reviewing amidst reading this saga, but uh... you didn't read my stuff so fair? hehehe (Totally just kidding) I just personally hate it when people don't post every few chapters and now I'm that person. Sorry!
| LaylaEvercrest chapter 2 . 5/6/2015
You're breaking my heart dammit!
| x Euphoria chapter 20 . 7/13/2014
First off congrats on finishing this story. It took me for a ride. I really enjoyed all of it. The best part honestly was how easily I can see all of these happening. With that alone makes this story really beautiful. I liked the ending because it was fitting and it seemed very true. Rinoa was finally "free" and I'm very happy for her and Squall.
I still can't get over the Seifer chapter! I think that is going to stay with me for a while lol. Thank you for the story it was worth the read :)!
| x Euphoria chapter 17 . 7/13/2014
Stop. Stop making me cry. I didn't realize I needed this chapter in my life. The whole conversation between Seifer and Rinoa was just so realistic. I accept this as cannon. It makes me so sad. Oh my god :[. It makes me sad because I have this scenario built up in my head that everyone will be friends and grow old together and die happy :[. Obviously that won't happen but my little heart can't take the reality lol.
| x Euphoria chapter 16 . 7/12/2014
Oh thank god they are both alive. That was really scary _.
| x Euphoria chapter 14 . 7/12/2014
Ok. ok. Ok. wow. So I shed a few tears when Squall was talking to Ivy. I'm not joking. It was just wow really powerful. Because it was the truth. It's just crazy to think that's REALLY what happened in the game. I really wish they'd release something new about FF8 ugh. I need it. But wow.
"I didn't want to live without her, which has honestly been the primary motivating factor behind most of the decisions I've made since meeting her "- those lines. I love those lines so much. It's just so accurate. I really love LOVE your understanding of their relationship.
This whole chapter was really beautiful. My favorite so far.
| x Euphoria chapter 13 . 7/12/2014
I already reviewed this chapter 12 so my thoughts will go here lol. I really like that Noelle is a lesbian. It doesn't matter but it's just a small something that I really appreciate.
Noelle and Rinoa sharing the same dreams is also very interesting. I wonder what it all means aahhh.
Chapter 13 was crazy I take it was when Rinoa transferred her powers to Noelle. I really like Ivy too :)
*I would be way past chapter 13 if I didn't end up doing a whole bunch of errands today _*
| x Euphoria chapter 8 . 7/12/2014
I just can't get over how lovely you write Squall and Rinoa's relationship. It's pretty incredible. Like their love is so strong it makes me happy. It seems like they suffered through so much but their just so devoted to each other. It's so special and rare. Perfect for them :)
| x Euphoria chapter 6 . 7/12/2014
AHH I have so many questions but I know the answers are there I just have to keep reading :).
| x Euphoria chapter 5 . 7/12/2014
I really enjoyed the Laguna and Squall part. It just makes me really happy reading about them.
| x Euphoria chapter 4 . 7/12/2014
Have you ever read a story and were like man this is amazing but still like really nervous when reading the whole time. I swear this is one of those stories. Like it's not scary but all the mystery surrounding it I want to know I'm just nervous to find out lol. Hope that makes sense x_x
"I've been a terrible influence on you," she said. "How am I supposed to despair about the future when I've done such a good job teaching you not to?" I love that. It's so accurate.
Older Squall and Rinoa give me all these feelings. They will always be so adorable together.
| Savae chapter 20 . 7/11/2014
Yay, you did it! Honestly, this wasn't even close to the ending I was expecting, but I was still sincerely happy with the turn out! I hope you're good with it too, because this story is quite the achievement.
I'm glad that Squall and Rinoa were able to be at peace with everything in the end. It might not be exactly the future they wanted, but it's one they can live with, and that's better than most scenarios I could envision for them. I'm glad you didn't pull the story into a whole different direction with the information hunt at the end because I think it would have been belittling to their struggle. Your restraint was definitely a good thing.
Anyways, great work, and I hope you post another epic soon!
| x Euphoria chapter 1 . 7/11/2014
I looked back for my last review and found out that it was April of 2013... :[ And I spelled beginning wrong. ugh _ Fail. Well I'm starting over :) The first chapter gives me so many different emotions. I love seeing the happy Leonhart family so much with their adorable daughter. But then the present makes me scared cause I remember some stuff ahh !
| angelwingprincess chapter 20 . 7/11/2014
Waaaaaaah, Finally finished reading this and you did a wonderful job wrapping it up! I'm truly more of an optimist at heart and would have hoped for a happy ending, with them finding a way to get Rin better or some other nonsense, but this is more realistic and I can see it being a more plausible ending than whatever rainbow I'd have put in there. Definitely a great work and ending. Just so you know, I have spent the better part of the past two days reading this in every extra moment so you defnitely got my attention! 3