|Reviews for The Successor|
| Savae chapter 17 . 2/25
Darn it, I caught up.
I'm really compelled by what it means for Noelle and Rinoa to have this connection. You've alluded to the notion that Rinoa had a similar connection with Edea, but, hm. I have this idea that either blood or familiarity is making it stronger in some way (kind of like how Ellone sends Squall's consciousness into the past even when she is asleep and doesn't explicitly choose him), but then again, I could be completely out in left field.
All the stuff with Seifer... Rinoa's conversation with him. My god, that hit somewhere in my chest. I have spent too much time (and yet, not enough time all at once) with family members who knew they were going to die, and this conversation, it just felt so real, and so beautiful. And to know finally how Seifer dies... It reminds me a lot of the poem the Hollow Men: the ferocity with which he pursues life until it finally ends, not in a blaze of glory, but rather, in a whisper of laboured breath on a hospital bed.
Can't wait for you to update!
| Savae chapter 13 . 2/24
So many good things are happening in this story; I can't even... I love the way you're writing the characters. They really have this grace about them that only age and the weighty experiences they've had could deliver. Also, this is a multi-chapter review, because leaving one per chapter when I'm reading through it all at once like this seems a bit redundant (on that note, I really don't want to catch up; I just want it to go on forever).
I am glad you put in date markers; it actually really helps me, as a reader. I don't know that I'd have as easy as a time navigating and putting the pieces together without them. I don't find them obvious, either; it makes it flow better than having to forcibly narrate their ages, or some other marker to indicate time (what grade Noelle is in, who is still alive and who isn't, etc.).
There are a lot of little things I'm enjoying about this story as well, like how even in their fifties, Ellone still calls Squall "Little Brother". I dunno what it is that makes me find it rather charming.
Also, the scene with Rinoa and Irvine in the hot tub... And how Squall felt, coming back from war and feeling out of place in his own home... My heart was aching that whole time. Rinoa's need for comfort, and knowing that Irvine was not Squall in so many ways—I thought I was going to suffocate, seriously, because I held my breath for so damn long. I think my husband looked over at me once and raised an eyebrow. He doesn't get my fangirlishness at all, though (his loss, haha).
Anyways, still reading! I'll post another review a few more chapters in!
| Savae chapter 5 . 2/21
Okay, so, finally, I'm reading this (chapter five, bay-bee, woot). I love how right away, you've drawn me in with suspense about Rinoa's condition. It is a strange thing to consider that doesn't really get addressed; the passing of powers without the passing of the woman. I'm really looking forward to seeing how things play out for both Rinoa as well as Noelle, at this point.
The way Squall is addressing the problem is almost...sad? Eating hot dogs for dinner (love your nickname for that, by the way), waiting around, and basically taking care of a vegetative Rinoa—it's a weird paradox combination of being both defeated and honourable.
Also, call me vain (I am, haha), but I have to say I was modestly upset at the idea of Squall's magnificant hair thinning. I'm hoping that at least it's happening in a Daniel Craig-esque sexy way. In my brain it is, haha.
Anyways, I'll be reading more soon!
| Ronin-ai chapter 17 . 2/18
yay! another chapter! so much feels on this one too...particularly the flashback part where Seifer tries to unburden himself to Rinoa. Very poignant, bringing back bittersweet memories of a dear friend lost to cancer this last summer. I couldn't be there in person for him but did my best to let him know that we all loved him.
anyway, can't wait for the rest of it, meanwhile I'll just keep on plugging away with my stories as well...hopefully I'll manage to finish them sometime this year!
| Emerald-Latias chapter 17 . 2/18
So many Seifer and Rinoa feels after that exchange. So many. It'd be so like him to pull something like that to get her to show up and propose that silly game to make it easier to attempt divulging what he couldn't say straight to her face without cushioning the blow somehow. He would so lament the shitty way his end would come and not fully learn his lesson about his dream's consequences until he gained more perspective. I also love how Rinoa just told him that she and Squall worked so well by not withholding things from each other but that she would sometimes escape to the simpler times with Seifer when things occasionally flared up.
Insofar as the first part of the chapter (yep, doing this backwards), so the succession was a chain of sorts rather than detachable links? Interesting. Given the descriptions of how Noelle is different than Rinoa, I'm not surprised that her getting the hang of things faster was how she was able to save them. It's so true about how they miraculously forgot to consider Squall in the matter and yet I never really thought of it either.
| irishais chapter 17 . 2/17
| Emerald-Latias chapter 16 . 12/13/2013
For such a short chapter, this does leave oodles of questions behind about Rinoa's sorceress dreams and how much are rooted in some kind of truth. Also, like it was alluded to, this chapter sure does feel very Inception-y. And to be honest, though it might owe to the large gaps between updates testing my memory but, I admittedly found that it was a bit hard to follow and I feel as though there's not enough explanation/groundwork for why Rinoa's seeing herself in a dream. I'd thought that she was no longer a sorceress at this point so...why would she continue having these visions if Noelle is now the sorceress? Sparseness only works if there are enough clues to divine what is happening.
In any event, I do wonder what the divergence from the original dream signifies. And I hope Squall's ok (it seems like he is though).
| Ronin-ai chapter 16 . 12/3/2013
Yay! another update! short, sweet and AWESOME! And yeah, I'm right with ya there in thinking "oh, i'll have this done by the end of the month..." a YEAR ago with my WiBi story. sometimes it happens like that: an idea grows and as you examine and develop it it turns out that there's WAY more to the story than you originally thought there'd be. That's actually been happening QUITE alot with my recent stories anyway (at least my current wips..). Maybe i need to do a couple of one-shots?
sorry. rambling. can't wait for you to back into the groove though, i know a new baby's alot of work so i totally get not having time to write. Trust me, sometimes teenagers aren't much better! maybe we'll ALL manage to finish our current projects and move on to more cool stuff. Can't wait for the next chapter of this one and pretty much anything else you'd care to write. :)
| Ronin-ai chapter 15 . 10/8/2013
Caught that reference. nice. I liked all of this chapter from the wonderful distraction of well.. getting caught up in each other (awesome that they STILL do that even after many years of marriage...sweet) to the fascinating downward spiral into Odine's mad mind. Very cool. Love the stream of consciousness from Odine's notes.. and then that last bit... I SO hope that Squall and Rinoa are both okay...I don't feel that the story's over but (and this is no way meant as a criticism) the way you write it's really hard to tell sometimes! Keep it up though, I love the suspense!
| Emerald-Latias chapter 15 . 9/28/2013
NOT COOL MAN. NOT COOL.
To be so close to all the answers and yet Squall does a foolhardy move like this, thinking she might have gone and done something stupid? (I briefly thought that Rinoa might have had the last page given it seemed so fishy and Edea's was the only file in a mess.) GAH.
All that aside, I liked the touch with Odine's notes. It feels very Odine-y which I suppose is a made up synonym for reprehensible and loathsome. Also, on a random note, nice pick for the date there, I spy a familiarity to it. ;)
| Ronin-ai chapter 14 . 8/28/2013
i love how you weave the emotions in this chapter, Squall and Ivy, Squall and Rinoa, and the aftermath of what they'd managed to accomplish...WITHOUT Rinoa actually losing her life as well. a HUGE relief to Squall and to everyone else as well. so many feels.. love this story. so glad you managed to continue with this, even with little Badger making her appearance and supplanting this as a priority in your life. hope you can keep it up. meanwhile, major, MAJOR huggles from me for your little one!
| Emerald-Latias chapter 14 . 8/23/2013
This was beautiful.
I never really put much thought before into what the possession of the sorceress could have meant to Rinoa other than being scared that she'll be forced to hurt people on that surface level - it ties in a lot of her character motivations in such a logical and moving way with the whole notion of the 'fighter of the oppressed becoming the figurehead of oppression' and how devastating the coma period was to her timeline of consciousness. (Granted, I did do a silly piece about how Squall mysteriously changed his mind while she was out but that's besides the point. ;D)
Tying it back to the story, I love how you had Squall explain Rinoa's story to Ivy in order to contrast it to Noelle's in order to assuage her fears. I know the topic of it being her choice was brought up before, but it just fleshes out the change during time regarding the hot button topics and just their relationships (both Squall/Rinoa's and Ivy/Noelle's) in general - not to say that they can't feel guilty for burdening their daughter like this but nowadays it's a different kind of burden. That definition of love that Squall brought up though, oh man. Heavy stuff. (If I were on Tumblr, I'd be saying 'Feels!')
In any event, this was a most-excellent follow up to the cliffhanger! Thank Kairi for being a good little girl and letting her mommy fic. :)
| Ronin-ai chapter 13 . 5/25/2013
first of all, I agree with this. i know how you want it all to flow together but sometimes leaving it TOO vague does make things confusing. I am glad that you've decided to add little inserts to kind of help us with where and when the story is taking place in that particular chapter/scene. Second, I apologize for not reviewing this earlier, it sometimes takes me a while to figure out what, if anything, I want to say.
Quite simply, this chapter hurt my heart. Obviously, Rinoa didn't end up dying after all but still... Squall didn't know it at the time and his thoughts were about the fact that he was helping his wife commit suicide. Wrenching when the person is already dying and in horrible pain; unthinkable when they are outwardly healthy and strong.
as always i am anxious for the next chapter, but of course, little badger takes precedence, and I know he/she will be making an appearance soon. I hope everything goes well there.
| Emerald-Latias chapter 13 . 5/19/2013
Ok, you're not really gonna like this because I will straight up admit that I'm very confused. I thought that Rinoa HAD already passed her powers onto Noelle? Or was that the point - they thought they had but they really hadn't because the lingering link told them otherwise and the dream told her that Noelle would have gotten them around this time because of the way she looked like she'd be the age she currently is in the dream?
Sorry this isn't a very good review...I just feel like I'm missing something here to get the full emotional impact of what I thought they'd done. The fact that the wine glass poison thing plan came out of nowhere, wasn't really happening matters.
| Victor chapter 13 . 5/15/2013
You kept the outside world pushed back for this one. What I mean is: Your descriptions of the house, the rooms, the general area (wherever that area may be) are always so seamlessly woven into the more important aspects of the chapter. This time, though, the entire thing is almost entirely in Squall's head - his memories, confusion, turmoil - and it works wonderfully. Given what he and Rinoa are going to do, there's a certain... desolation, a determined lonliness... that's very apparent in this.
I feel like that's going to make zero sense to anyone other than me, but trust me, it's a good thing. This was a great chapter, and while you may think it wasn't sad enough, I'm pretty sure the only reason I didn't tear up is because I had the benefit of knowing what was coming. :)