Reviews for Sasuke Potter
Furionknight chapter 3 . 11/1/2012
I look forward to more :)
JKGoblin chapter 1 . 11/1/2012
When the warning said grammar errors you weren't kidding. Some of the sentences don't make sense and there are some misspellings. I would suggest you get a beta to help you.
DTDY chapter 3 . 11/1/2012
Brilliant chapter.

Also, don't worry about the grammar dear. I am from the US and still I find it a pain in the ass.

Be well and I shall await patiently for your next chapter.
Shizuka-naru Goketsu chapter 3 . 10/31/2012
It is a shame that he didn't teach Naruto anything more than a bigger Rasengan and how to use the first three tails of Kyuubi. As for this story? I reccomend you read a story called Uchiha Fukurou by ToBetasered; it hasn't been updated in awhile but I think it'll inspire you with some ideas.
xXxOtAkU-444xXx chapter 3 . 10/31/2012
I like it! **
Fluehatraya chapter 3 . 10/31/2012
Aww, what a wonderful friendship.

I recommend making sure that you don't mix up the spelling of a word with another, like 'quiet' - to not be loud - with 'quite', which has a totally different meaning. Your sentence structuring is definitely unusual - a result of your not being native to English, probably - but I personally find it quirky and enjoying to read.
CrescentMelody chapter 3 . 10/31/2012
Oh my goodness! Poor guy, sort of. I really did like the two friends bonding moment. The deadly hallow symbol in his green eyes caught me by surprise. It was a good kind of surprise though.

I can't wait 'till the next chapter. Update soon, alright?
VNaz123 chapter 3 . 10/31/2012
Hey! Great job till now. All you need to do is get a proof-reader who can spot the few mistakes you make. And since you mentioned you are open to pairings, please let this not be a yaoi. Also, with the way you depict Sasuke/Harry, I don't think any of the girls his age would be a good match. Could you consider Guren, Shizune or Samui as potential love interests?
My Solitude chapter 3 . 10/31/2012
This is a pretty interesting chapter. XD
merryday chapter 3 . 10/31/2012
Hey, don't beat yourself up regarding the grammer! Each chapter is better than the last. Even native speakers have trouble with using the correct tenses.
Harry Uchiha Potter chapter 3 . 10/31/2012
awesome chapter and i have to say i don't really mind if you overpower sasue/harry as long as he keeps his skills under wraps and uses them in an emergency
JaredDrake chapter 1 . 10/31/2012
Grammar still needs work. Lots of little discrepancies here and there.
obscurereader chapter 3 . 10/31/2012
give naruto chakra chains. That never happens in fan fiction. And maybe give Sasuke different Mangekyo abililties
Mon Esprit Libre chapter 3 . 10/31/2012
He chuckled slowly to himself, he doesn't think that anyone in the village would belief that such a loud boy had such a quite hobby.

Should be

He chuckled slowly to himself; he didn't think that anyone in the village would believe that such a loud boy had such a quiet hobby.

I'll be honest, your grammar needs work. Also, believe is a verb, belief is a noun.

Would you like me to proofread/beta this for you? It'd certainly make people want to read it more and not complain nearly as much about grammar/spelling mistakes. Just let me know!
Red Crow chapter 3 . 10/31/2012
i see so much adorable fluff. will there be love in the futuure of our two boys? with each other? or will they be brothers till the end?
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