Reviews for Unleashed: Wildfire |
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![]() ![]() Your pacing is really, really off, you have so many timeskips in a single chapter that I had to re-read the whole thing to understand what the fuck you were trying to say. You really need to polish your storytelling more. |
![]() ![]() ![]() the leaf sold out the whirlpool and kidnapped naruto's grandma and mother. so why is he helping the leaf? I can understand him wanting to save his sister and friends but the leaf as to pay so how. I would go with him being the new leader as a way to save his sister and pay back the leaf. |
![]() ![]() ![]() great chapter! I love the first idea even if the second is interisting |
![]() ![]() ![]() It's a nice Idea, but you need some polish. My biggest complaint would be the constant interruptions explaining something, stop it. It destroys the flow of the sentence, if you feel the need to explain something, mark it and leave a note at the end. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Next chapter |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yeah for Naruto |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh shit he knows |
![]() ![]() ![]() Dam konoha |
![]() ![]() ![]() I choose option three! And then world domination! Update soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Minato must get hurt or something like that |
![]() ![]() ![]() Dam villagers are really idiots |
![]() ![]() ![]() since naruto is a genius, i would think that the first two option wuold be more plausible. also out of the first two, i think the second would be for a more interesting plot. |
![]() ![]() Outstanding |
![]() ![]() lol. this naruto has multiple personality. genius, calm, scatter brain... |
![]() ![]() ![]() I hop it get better for you |