Reviews for Unleashed: Wildfire
Ehhhhh chapter 1 . 12/20/2015
Your pacing is really, really off, you have so many timeskips in a single chapter that I had to re-read the whole thing to understand what the fuck you were trying to say. You really need to polish your storytelling more.
Soledge1 chapter 14 . 11/3/2015
the leaf sold out the whirlpool and kidnapped naruto's grandma and mother. so why is he helping the leaf? I can understand him wanting to save his sister and friends but the leaf as to pay so how. I would go with him being the new leader as a way to save his sister and pay back the leaf.
evans16 chapter 14 . 11/3/2015
great chapter!
I love the first idea even if the second is interisting
TheJesterShade chapter 1 . 11/3/2015
It's a nice Idea, but you need some polish. My biggest complaint would be the constant interruptions explaining something, stop it. It destroys the flow of the sentence, if you feel the need to explain something, mark it and leave a note at the end.
Stratos263 chapter 6 . 11/3/2015
Next chapter
Stratos263 chapter 5 . 11/3/2015
Yeah for Naruto
Stratos263 chapter 4 . 11/3/2015
Oh shit he knows
Stratos263 chapter 3 . 11/3/2015
Dam konoha
KazaHaru45 chapter 14 . 11/3/2015
I choose option three! And then world domination! Update soon!
Stratos263 chapter 2 . 11/3/2015
Minato must get hurt or something like that
Stratos263 chapter 1 . 11/3/2015
Dam villagers are really idiots
bcsclaymore chapter 14 . 11/3/2015
since naruto is a genius, i would think that the first two option wuold be more plausible. also out of the first two, i think the second would be for a more interesting plot.
Guest chapter 14 . 11/3/2015
Guest chapter 5 . 8/3/2015
lol. this naruto has multiple personality. genius, calm, scatter brain...
Lasse2731 chapter 13 . 8/3/2015
I hop it get better for you
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