Reviews for Magical Origins
Veronica McClure chapter 67 . 9/14
SlamDunk, Slamditch, Slamquid, Quid pro quo changed to Quidproslam: Just the names I came up with maybe u never thought of, maybe u did, but maybe they'll serve to pry other ideas out of your head, or others.

Great chapter! Hope u r continuing?
Veronica McClure chapter 5 . 9/14
Any thing a bully thinks he or she can do to Harry will just end up chilled, frozen, or "All Wet" . I'd like to see Harry become at least comrades at arms if not friends with Zabini; political allies with a Draco who eventually wises up about his Father, Dumbledore, Riddle. Ron, I would like to see forced to be on his own without anyone to explain away his own rudenesses & if needed, by transferring him to a smaller school where he will get his hardest written in stones ideas about what makes "Dark Wizards" knocked out of him: maybe just watered down. And his new school being smaller, and possibly had more than one animagus sneaked in several times in their 250-year history, the staff of Ronald's smaller school discovers Scabbers/ Peter Pettigrew earlier, because they perform animagus revelio on all pets brought in.
Veronica McClure chapter 4 . 9/14
But Heck! Liliane hasn't even started her period! I really will pity your Harry when Liliane's raging hormones begin mixing with her fire elementalism!? Then again maybe they should remain together because his water elemental powers may be able to douse the worst of her fire. :}
dragon slayer of death 98 chapter 46 . 9/9
please have artemis be in a relationship with him, even if its as a mistress or she only sleeps with harry
dragon slayer of death 98 chapter 20 . 9/8
i do hope he does have a relationship with artemis, i like her and she deserves to have someone who will care and love her, i think harry's first time should be with artemis, she wants to give him her first time so he should her his
dragon slayer of death 98 chapter 10 . 9/8
i hope lily didn't cheat on james or something
Kevin chapter 57 . 9/7
Very good story and funny too, who would of known harry would be sleeping with so many girls.
Lord Peverell-Potter-Black chapter 67 . 8/25
very good story am hoping its not abandoned but once again i saw a lot of similarities between this and Elemental's Power but it is definitely a story i like really hoping you will continue with it

can't wait for the next update
Lord Peverell-Potter-Black chapter 1 . 8/23
good story story so far but already I have seen similarities between this story and another one Harry Potter and The Elemental's Power Written by Sage Ra niw I'm not going to accuse you of stealing those similar ideas because I don't know who's fanfiction came out first I am just merely stating an observation
Ice man chapter 67 . 7/24
I hope you continue this story it has been very good so far and I'm sure it will just keep getting better that you for the story
Dissenter chapter 2 . 7/14
This story seems very interesting. However, the grammar makes it too difficult for me to read. I usually ignore minor mistakes that people make every once in a while. But, I couldn't get through two paragraphs of this chapter without finding a bunch of errors. I skipped to see if chapter 67 was better, but the improvement was marginal. Opening the reviews affirmed that the grammar did not improve that much. Now, I'm not saying the story is bad by any means. It's just that I can't read a story with so many grammatical errors. For this I have a suggestion to make: Find a good beta. That will ensure that future readers don't encounter what I did.
ItsReaper chapter 60 . 7/11
Why did you have Harry exclaim Voldemort is back. He is a Slytherin, which means he would go about it carefully not to ruin his place. Now you have him acting like a rash Griffindor in canon. This chapter contradicts the character you have built up.
xXLolzManXx chapter 67 . 7/9
Story is great, the grammar is shit
Fireguy892 chapter 67 . 7/8
is this gonna be finished
Ralph chapter 67 . 7/7
I’ve read the whole story in a couple of days and I was wondering if you would ever finish it considering the hiatus and move to different stories. Please don’t give up on it! It is an amazing story
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