|Reviews for Ritually Yours|
| Mirror Snow chapter 2 . 4/15
Not sure if I missed it somewhere, but Hermione is 11 and pregnant. Are you trying to outdo that teen mother show '17 and pregnant' or something? Hermione was never the curvy type, she was slim. Do you realize that a 10 pound baby would be at least 1/10 of her entire body weight, assuming she's 100lb at 11? Being a girl, she's probably even less. Physically, she'd be immobilized by a baby, to the point of being unable to move. Have you SEEN a pregnant woman in her third trimester? Her belly is huge! I think you need to change their ages or move the troll incident up to their later years for the premise to be possible.
Premise just doesn't work for me 1/5.
| Stormshadow13 chapter 12 . 4/3
| Hawk6782 chapter 1 . 1/3
Hi I just finished reading your story I thought it was pretty good I liked that it wasn’t the typical pregnancy fic and I am curious if you will continue it. I will admit I haven’t looked at your posted stories yet but I plan on it keep up the good work
| azulkan2 chapter 12 . 10/14/2017
| wolfgang108 chapter 1 . 10/14/2017
Just one thing; how would she know class rankings two months in to the first school year, never mind knowing she flips back and forth with Harry ?
| jdboss1 chapter 8 . 10/14/2017
I have had to stop here and leave my review
. There were a couple of things I cannot stand about this story, and I just want to scream at
(Overall I do like your story is just a couple of points that I really really really really irritated)
1 . Why hasn't Hermione had an abortion you have given no reason why one should be possible
If for the store you wanted her to have the child you could have come up with some magical reason why she couldn't have had an abortion
2 Hermione living in the boys dormitory
an amusing twist, but WTF she has seen two boys naked and there has not been more outrage
and Harry insisted on leaving the door open is bloody awful as well harry seeing her naked
I can understand predates and not up tight about nudity as older people, but at the age of 11, I wouldn't have been happy her classmate see me naked
. My biggest problem
3 bloody religion
this is not America . Most people in Britain don't care about religion , plus having magical powers really belittles any great achievements in the Bible
everything from singing a song in a different language to having to attend midnight religiousness
And to add insult to injury, one of Harry Potter's classmates is regularly attending a Christian ceremony at a magical school, a place that has spent the last thousand years hiding from
mad religious wackos wanting to kill witches
The school wouldn't tolerate Christianity for even a moment if you believe that his religion should kill himself immediately
I may except somebody I'd be religious but I would expect just as many not to be into Christianity and to see some form of back and forth. Even if the guy does client seek out or start a church in the school
but just plain acceptance is laughable
I am British, I attended a British boarding school the other students and myself found religion to be laughable at best, and even if a couple of us felt slightly religious we would have done zero religiousness
without the prompting of a parent
4 . Ron is a certifiable idiot never appreciate stories that try and redeem him, but you have to have a good job on it
I am actually enjoying it is just I wish it was better
| Lionasha No Bruja chapter 2 . 6/17/2017
I really doubt that even an eleven-year-old Hermione wouldn't throw a major fit at the idea that she'd have to wear a collar with some boy's name on it. And have a child at the age of twelve.
| dianaanne chapter 7 . 5/30/2017
Neat twist on Severus giving Harry Lily's notes.
| Rheya Ramsey chapter 12 . 5/20/2017
Haha, very good story! Loved the Hedwig interludes, she's my favorite character after Harry and Hermione.
| ChaseRyans123 chapter 3 . 4/30/2017
Well I have to say that I like the premise, although I do take a bit of issue with 11-year-olds being pregnant. But I do have problems with the way you've written a few things. First, I don't understand why McGonagall's response to those girls wanting to bond themselves to Harry was "Oh don't do that, the ritual is dangerous!" And not "You little sociopaths are ELEVEN. You don't get to make such a permanent decision with far-reaching consequences when you've barely learned how to read and write!"
Second, as a Ravenclaw I don't appreciate how you portrayed the members of that house. Ravenclaws are described as enjoying "Knowledge for Knowledge's Sake". These people only care about the class rankings. If anything, Ravenclaws would hover around the middle of the pack because they'd keep getting distracted by their personal research and side-projects. It would be the the other houses trying to dominate; Slytherins because good grades mean better jobs after school, Gryffindors because they want to beat the Slytherins, or the Hufflepuffs because they keep working and perfecting to do the best they can do. The Claws wouldn't care.
| AlthieraInLove chapter 2 . 4/26/2017
They're eleven or twelve when they had a baby. Eleven or twelve. They had a baby in that age when I barely had a social life when I'm thirteen. I don't know if I'm supposed to be 'jealous' or 'sympathysing' I forgot the correct spelling and I'm quite unable to change it at the moment) them in their situation.
| AlwaysAnAussie chapter 12 . 3/13/2017
Fascinating story. Thx for sharing.
| the-power-of-love chapter 12 . 3/12/2017
Love it now off to the sequel I go
| Avalonemyst chapter 12 . 3/8/2017
A very delightful story! I love how you incorporated so much music into the story! I also loved how you had the fat friar holding mass!
| muumi2three chapter 8 . 2/20/2017
I finished this a couple days ago and chose this chapter to comment on because my favourite character in this fiction is Hedwig and my favourite segments are the Hedwig point-of-view. Amusing but convincing owlish logic. I like Seamus's singing too, but I'm afraid it's Hedwig who's hooked me on reading the rest of the series!