OK.. defiantly need more . I want to know what happens, so at this is a most excellent teaser to get folk interested :-)

:). Ahh., being drawn in deeper..

I had problems with chapter two's quality. it seemed fine to me Chapter one pulled me in, I had become quite interested in these people.

Brilliant chapter...I see our discussion in it and am TOTALLY honored *Raises Ta'al* Peace and long life!

I like your characters. Not sure where you are going with this but you have peeked my curiosity.