Reviews for Deal Come Due
zekeschance chapter 3 . 12/1/2016
Oh my. As a mom I can totally understand why Mary was so on edge and losing her temper. Loved, loved John's reaction to her outbursts and knowing he had to help her but still protect his kids. Which is what he continued to do from here on out. Even though sometimes it was unconventional, that was always his main goal. When Mary took Sam from John and Sam cuddled up to her in forgiveness, that was such a GUH moment. But her realizing his gentleness and forgiving nature at that age was so sweet. And describing Dean's personality as unpredictable, I had to laugh because he is so unpredictable! But Mary's agitation and fear was so real to me as was John. I could see this happening that day because we all know Mary had to have had that loathing fear in the back of her mind for a while. And the way she has acted on her return is like she's so sorry for not being able to protect her family and save them from the life they had to lead because of her. Just a great story. Really made me think of her feelings. Thanks so much!
KKBELVIS chapter 3 . 11/1/2016
Just love your tiny the Batman cup faded from one too many washings.

Sammy gumming the action figure.

"People just say stuff." So pre-hunter John. Thud.

How protective and all knowing about his Sammy Dean is...even at such an early age!

And The whole...'do you think I'm so Awesome? I think I'm so awesome' Just love how that came from John and Dean carried it on. Just adore that.

Mary is a basket case as she should be.

Such a normal sounding family - albeit Mary's panic - but not for much longer. This just ramps up the whole series - this insight into their lives before demons and monsters.

Spin-off! Spin-Off! Supernatural the early years! Plug in. Ha!

Loved the whole meal preparation and Dean's sweet sweet Poetic prayer!

Was the pizza guy the demon or wasn't he? Whaaaaaa! Love how you leave that question unanswered.

Gonna go with Yes...he was! Whaaaaaa! Creepy!

Beautiful piece! You hit every note perfectly. This is exactly how it went down. Guh!

Thank you for your time and care in writing and keeping us fans entertained.

Karen chapter 3 . 11/1/2016
So glad you finished this fic and you ended it perfectly, especially as Mary has returned in S12. You got totally Mary's state of mind, being on edge even about the pizza delivery guy and snapping a couple of times, worrying John and upsetting her boys. Loved how you had Dean know exactly what Sammy needed, even down to his food and stalling laying the table to play with his little brother to keep him happy. And could so imagine Mary breaking down at the end, knowing what was to come, just hope she joined them in bath time after and read them a bedtime story!
Great writing as usual, loved it.
lenail125 chapter 3 . 10/31/2016
Always, always, always so good to read something from you, :)... this was perfect! Loved Dean is of Sam and how he just knew what he need it, wanted and happened!
KKBELVIS chapter 2 . 10/31/2016
LOL...mommy will get home when she gets home she's only been gone an hour. Ha! So John and so sweet how you write little Dean.

Adored Dean's big brother shirt and how John notices how Dean already acts like he owns the car. Ha! That's such a special tender touch right there! Bam!

Dean the 'Sammy whisperer.' Yes! Loved that...and how he thinks Batman is the best and nobody is better except his Daddy. Guh.

Adore how Dean knew Sam was scared right off the bat.

Your John here was perfectly how he would be before he knew about hunting things.

How Mary is struggling with telling John the absolute awful truth...whaaaaaa!

And then the whole pizza bit...we all know they are far from a normal family...but here you've woven that in so expertly!

The last chapter gave me chills...this chapter gave me tears! For what is to come of this family...whaaaaa! Amazing.

Oh, the feels! Love it.
KKBELVIS chapter 1 . 10/31/2016
Oooohhhhhh...chilling chapter...chilling and creepy! Gave me goosebumps up and down my back.

Good job!

Love how you fleshed this's exactly how it would go down! Needs to be filmed in a spin-off version of Supernatural! Amen!

Like how it all starts out so normal to keep the baby entertained...Sammy's sweet floppy moose.

You wrote: 'Salt was just salt to a mother and wife/no longer the tiny white particles that separated life from death.'

Guh! Guh! Guh! Loved that whole bit you wrote.

This is so perfect...especially now with Mary back!

Thank you...onward.

SPN Mum chapter 3 . 10/31/2016
What a mess Mary became after running into the demon at the store. Instead of trying to think about how to protect and ward her house and family, she lost her cool and yelled at her boys. Acting like that wasn't a good way to prepare John to listen to what she needed to tell him, either. It just made it seem as if she was close to having some sort of breakdown, not to mention it was alienating her family. It amazes me that Mary never thought about the demon coming back in ten years to collect on his deal, when he told he would. She really should have known better. Everything DID change that night, in ways she never could have imagined, unfortunately. :(
scootersmom chapter 3 . 10/31/2016
Your story was great! I really felt that was how Mary must have been feeling that day...there is no way she woudn't have remembered! You did a great job expressing what she was feeling.
Victoria chapter 3 . 10/31/2016
What a GREAT way to finish this one! Just perfect! And we all know what happened after this. Thanks for the finished chapter of this perfect little story. Love everything about it! Can't say I love having Mary back on the show, but I do love how this story fits. And of course, I LOVE your writing and wish you could do more of it...but totally understand how real life gets in the way of our fanfiction life, so I'm just always happy to see your name pop up with a new submission. Thanks again and keep up the good work!
Aranna Undomiel chapter 2 . 5/26/2013
You know I'm a big fan of your Mary/John stories and I already love this one :) Hope you'll continue this soon.
cherry619 chapter 2 . 12/25/2012
Ooh it gets deeper. I like this look at the family right before the deal but it kind of makes your heart break in knowing what is supposed to happen to them all. Charity
SupernaturallyEgocentric chapter 2 . 12/18/2012
Very good chapter. Foreboding!
sammynanci chapter 2 . 11/26/2012
Oh my god! This night? Is "the night"? Poor Mary,he was so happy for ten years ;_; Good job,I love Dean and his overprotective,jejejje. Baby Sammy is so adorable! Thanks for writting! chapter 2 . 11/18/2012
Fantastic chapter. Four year old Dean is so cute and so tuned into Sammy too, the bond between them already strong. He really surprised Mary asking her who scared Sammy and think he surprised John too, alerting him more to what was wrong and what Mary wasn't yet telling him about what happened at the grocery store. And had to smile that Sammy had a stuffed moose toy! Plus Dean at that age already very food orientated! Am really interested in where you are taking this story, such an original idea.
ccase13 chapter 2 . 11/16/2012
I hope they get a better start in this au than in the series. I love little Dean as the Sammy wisperer.
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