LOL! Eat up! Great chapter I can't wait for 5!

Are all these facts based on the light novels or something (I haven't read them)? Coz they're really cool and well thought out. Damn, I am so excited, and getting Liz involved in all this somehow just makes everything five times better. I am so excited! :DDDDDDDDDDD

Love this! More please! I really like the way you're writing the characters, especially misuderstood Kirito. Good work:)

Great story can't wait for the next chapter.

And now things are starting to get more intense with them realising the reality of what is now happening to them...

The chapters just continue to get better and better! I love all the interactions between Asuna and everyone. It's awesome that even though Agil/Klein aren't particularly close to Asuna and their only connection is Kirito, they all have an amount of trust/friendliness toward each other (and also probably develop a bromance 8DDDDDD)

and I also adore the Kirito/Asuna relationship that you write. It's so blurred since they could be close friends/family. It's just a billion times better than the direction they took in the anime :3

TWO UPDATES IN ONE DAY ME GUSTA ;D I would totally hang with Klein's guild if I could.

My favorite aspects so far is the role reversals in the chapter/portrayals of Klein and Asuna as well as the attention to SAO's world. I'm sure you've delayed giving information on what has happened to Kirito because of the plot, but the lack of information from his perspective here is kinda pointed. I guess this narration feels a bit distant to me after watching the SAO anime, which is told from Kirito's point of view and can be very personal and moving - one of SAO's aspects that stuck out to me.

In any case, I'm interested in seeing the kind of SAO you originally had in mind. :-) Best wishes!

i didnt see that one coming...

About economy, in MMO you should be able to buy item like healing crystal in NPC shop right, and its price should stay the same. How can the price of that kind of item increase?

I like the reversals too! 8DDDDDD

OMG ASUNA. I AM LOVING HER SO MUCH MORE HERE. SHE'S NOT WASTED LIKE IN THE ANIME 8D (I love you so much, Froggy *squishsquishsquish*) but somehow I'm starting to ship Klein/Asuna and thinking of Kirito/Asuna as my brotp instead. Of course I also adore the Klein/Kirito brotp too 8DDD

but ah, I love the little court case here. Unfortunately since I actually know the details of american court cases, it's a little bland (but actual court cases have so much complexities/details so don't worry about it!). But we all knew Kirito was going to be convicted regardless.

Also, I absolutely love Klein and his bro-guild. They make me grin at their silliness/awesomeness

I'm so excited for the next part! Work at your own pace to get it done! c:

I enjoyed this very much! I like the idea a lot, and am very interested to see future installments:)

I WANT KIRITO TO BE THE "DAMSEL" IN DISTRESS THIS TIME! HE LOOKS SO CUTE AND HELL, HE NEEDS HELP EVERY NOW AND THEN TOO! XDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD

Okay, fan girling. Forgive me. I am so happy this is your NaNo novel. Fast updates are very much appreciated (read: glorified). XDDDDD

WHEN I PUT ON MY NERVE GEAR, I TOUCHED MYSELF!...
::GENIUS:: xD you have my support keep it up :D

I like the Asuna that you write more than the SAO anime/novel Asuna because she seems more real to me-whether it be that she is tired (all throughout this chapter), conscious of her celebrity status (and how it affects her), and her perceptions/worries/care for other people.
I also like the element of Kirito's mysteriousness. Not in the usual sense of dark/sexy/mysterious but rather the basic idea that Asuna really doesn't know who Kirito is whether it be in the game or real life (Since Asuna is pretty well-established but Kirito? He's just a solo beater)

Also, Heathcliff is like...the freaking biggest troll ever (I can only imagine the biggest trollface on him)

Great start, has lots of potential. Keep it up