Reviews for Harry Potter and the Gift of Memories
Zarroc789 chapter 17 . 16h
I have not finished the chapter but how has he not realized Dumbledor knew about the troll
pupstarstar chapter 3 . 22h
I would like to point out the typo that it being a Harry/harem is not in the summery.
Zarroc789 chapter 1 . 9/16
Skyrim reference yes
Guest chapter 30 . 9/11
You sir are a legend.
TSAImpregnable chapter 30 . 9/11
Beautiful work, one of the best pieces of fanfiction I have ever seen.
Face Yourself chapter 11 . 8/28
Oh. You sorted him into Gryffindor. Where he logically would have never chosen due to wanting to avoid the feud between Gryffindor and Slytherin, so that he wouldn't be cutting off access a large section of contacts barring vastly more work. Well, it was fun until this, but nnnnot worth continuing to read now.
Face Yourself chapter 10 . 8/28
But... the sorting is alphabetical... and Blaise's surname starts with a Z... how was he sorted before Harry here? Also, Merlin predates the foundation of Hogwarts by a rather large margin. :-\ It's always very, very annoying to see people say he attended a place that wasn't built until 500 years after his time.
Spazzman29 chapter 21 . 8/24
I have no idea why you added Hermione she literally adds nothing to the group and like Daphne said she's an annoyance.
Face Yourself chapter 1 . 8/24
Rife with misspellings (physic - physique, Mr. Fig - Ms. Figg, apostrophes where they don't belong, etc.), and the idea that any pre-teen would ever actually exercise daily with the sort of routine Harry is shown to have is ludicrous... but other than that, I'm hopeful for this to unfold into an interesting story.
Spazzman29 chapter 19 . 8/24
I was enjoying this story, then you added Hermione.
The Abyss of Infinite Worlds chapter 10 . 8/23
'It was the feeling the castle gave off; the way the hairs on the back of his neck stood up, as if some kind of mystical energy permeated the atmosphere;the way his blood surged through his veins at an increased rate, like some foreign energy had invaded his body and was being pumped into his bloodstream and nervous system' It sounds like he is experiencing a surge of prana through Magic Circuits.
The Abyss of Infinite Worlds chapter 7 . 8/22
'Enhancement'...He uses Reinforcement Magecraft.
The Abyss of Infinite Worlds chapter 7 . 8/22
'Enhancement'...He uses Reinforcement Magecraft.
joncst chapter 2 . 8/12
"out when it gets dark": Sunset is quite late in England during the summer: did they really stay in the library past 8pm? Since he was invited to dinner, i'm guessing it wasn't much past 5-530pm?

"fatty and his ratty friend is": s.b. "are" (unless Lisa is making the mistake).

"Hook, a fantasy tail" s.b. "tale".

"he still had plenty to spar" s.b. "spare"

"turning with pandering slowness" s.b. "ponderous"

Bringing out the Slytherin Harry a bit, plus more evidence of the effect of eidetic memory. Wonder if a Malfoy is one of the people caught by the Marauders, and how that will affect his meeting with Draco.

Jon
joncst chapter 1 . 8/12
"The story's that were found in books": s.b. stories
"was not that far from Private Drive" s.b. Privet

"it was now 4 o'clock in the morning": Sunrise in Surrey England on the longest day of the year is about 4:50 am. Morning twilight starts at about 4am. Sunlight would not be visible through a blind until at least 4:50 or 4:55, even if there were no trees or buildings to the east.

Viet Nam war started 1955. If Master Wei was 17 in 1955, he would be around 53 in 1991 for Harry's 11th birthday. If he entered the war later he would be correspondingly younger.

"Surrey being a small city": Surrey is a county in England: wiki/Surrey
Little Whinging is of course a made-up place. It is deduced to be near the real-life Staines: wiki/Little_Whinging

"by stint of sheer stubborness": 'stint' isn't exactly wrong here, but 'dint' is the more common word. /dictionary/dint

General comment: you seem to have a fondness for comma splicing, e.g. the sentence in the 3rd-to-last paragraph (unfortunately, i have the same problem when i write). Maybe break apart long ones?

"Another reason was simply because none of his acquaintances had anything to offer. Harry saw no benefit in befriending them and decided it would be best to keep them at arms length".

One could go to the extreme:

"None of his acquaintences had anything to offer. Harry saw no benefit in befriending them. He would keep them at arms length".

All that aside, you have a good premise. I made it to the end of the first chapter thinking about how this Harry will interact with the other characters (particularly Hermione, given his liking of history), and wanting to read the next.

Jon
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