|Reviews for Fifty Shades Brighter|
| Guest chapter 6 . 7/28/2013
I like how you wrote Elliot into the scenario which gives a nice explanation to their interactions before CG meets up with Ana and Elliot meets Kate for the first time too.
Flynn is way over paid.
Its too early for CG to acknowledge real feelings for Ana yet. They haven't even kissed! He is just obsessed and infatuated at this point and confused why he feels anything at all for a girl. BTW, I thought she did look like the crack whore since that was one of the reasons Leila later reveals to Ana, and CG too or perhaps you have some other plot going on...
Great job in weaving the original story in yours.
| Guest chapter 5 . 7/28/2013
Love your story. I like the twist of him following her and sitting on the other side of the wall while she was sitting there crying. I always wondered from the story if he had followed her and cringed at the thought that if he had and saw her crying, how that would affect him. Its sweet how you have written it. This CG is such a sweetie and you are doing such a great job with the internal struggles he goes thru! Wanting her, wanting to be normal but all the self loathing and doubts really hinders his deep need and wish for a normal relationship because he just doesnt feel worthy. So yes, I am very thrilled to read how you are going to show the changes and evolution that CG will go thru as their love story progresses. Thanks for keeping it so believable and interesting!
| Guest chapter 4 . 7/27/2013
Excellent chapter! A little confused about the dream but it is such a treat to read your writings. Indeed, you are so thorough! CG POV is wonderful and you got the whole situation perfect. I imagine that E L James would have wholeheartedly agree with your take on this POV story and be so proud of the flow and progression of it. Thanks, love it so much.
| Guest chapter 3 . 7/27/2013
Wow, you are an amazing writer! What a pleasure to read your story. It is to fun to read your take on CG's efforts to deal with his desires and feelings for Ana. He does want to change and is so confused, and does not understanding all the feelings that hes dealing with. I love the way he softens and is happier when he thinks or talks to Ana. So sweet! Thanks for posting!
| nedbella chapter 21 . 7/27/2013
OMG! YOUR BAAAAACK! I have missed you and your story something shocking. I'm doing my happy dance. Awesome update and I'm gagging for more as usual. This is only getting better and better. Can't wait for more. Thanks for coming back, this story is worth waiting for.
| Guest chapter 2 . 7/27/2013
Great story. You have given us a more detailed in sight into his traumatic past as revealed in his dreams and it is very fascinating and good to read. It is very refreshing since most stories here at FF hardly touch those childhood situations and we rarely get a glimpse of what he might have been thinking of then as a child when he and his mom were so abused. It would be so interesting to get his mom's POV and how perhaps despite addiction & everything, she might have been gentle with him ?...and maybe struggled to try to raise him but wasnt very good at protecting him which is perhaps why he is so confused, ambivilant but still he loved her, and also hated her.
| Guest chapter 2 . 7/27/2013
Your story is amazing! I love it. It is so probable and believable and wonderfully well written! So glad I'm only on chapter 2. I really like the way you have CG thoughts, responses, and the situations you have written are so likely.
| Luvdisney2007 chapter 21 . 7/27/2013
I'm glad to see that you are back. Thanks for updating.
| Foggynights chapter 21 . 7/27/2013
So glad you updated ! Love your story !
Post soon..Thank you!
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/27/2013
Love it very much so far. Very well written and CG POV is always wonderful to read. I am so glad there are many chapters to go...Thanks for posting!
| girlofmidnight chapter 21 . 7/27/2013
It was all worth the wait.
| Aquanik chapter 21 . 7/27/2013
Thanks for the chapter can't wait for the next one. Hope it's not too long
| Luvdisney2007 chapter 20 . 6/24/2013
Not all stories need sex written out and we the reader can let our minds take over. What seemed really important in your story was "the date" and touching on trust.
| 87Penguin chapter 6 . 6/23/2013
So I tried to put a review for the last chapter (chapter 5) but accidentally hit sent before finishing the first sentence. :-/. Anyways I wanted to say that I really enjoy your writing and how you are taking the story line. I just wanted to mention one thing at the end of chapter 5 it seems as if he sees her is her own car when she's suppose to be in Kate's car since Kate took Ana's car to take the boys home and the equipment. Other than that it w as GREAT!
| 87Penguin chapter 5 . 6/23/2013
This story is com