Reviews for Devotion of Artemis: The Divine War
Fanficlover2017 chapter 23 . 6/21
While the story is good your inability to grasp the English language as well as your grammar, punctuation, spelling and sentence structure errors is all quite irritating. I think a rewrite is needed in order to correct these very glaring oversights and errors!
Guest chapter 1 . 3/16
It's like you ate the writing I did when I was eleven
Wait chapter 7 . 11/27/2016
Wait, Katie's last name is Gardner? I thought it was gardener.
I agree chapter 6 . 11/27/2016
Demeter was barely in PJO and HoO. Like, the only time percy saw demeter was in the underworld or olympus.
Mas2060 chapter 2 . 11/21/2016
I'm gonna be honest here, the whole chapter was good, except the prophesy... but you properly realise this yourself

Shall immortalize the child of oceans:
Child of sea immortal shall be

Following in the name of the goddess of the bear Together hunt ungrateful, which will start a divine war:
Ungrateful hunt with the bears goddess
Divine war they will see.

Goddess of moon and loyal hero will unite, but some will be hindered:
Goddess of moon and loyal hero unite,
Traveling along a hindered path.

Some will rise, some will remain and so the new order will control the world:
Some rise, some remain,
will new world order pertain.

This is my take, I think it works well
MLG KING chapter 2 . 8/19/2016
Perry's mind: "STUPID F###ING PROPHECIES. APOLLO NEEDS TO TAKE TIME OFF FROM THE PROPHECY THING."
TKane2018 chapter 2 . 7/23/2016
I prefer lager chapters cause I can 1 chapter in 10 minutes super fast reader
Bruh chapter 23 . 5/10/2016
This was awesome
Guest chapter 3 . 4/20/2016
WOw youre grammar is terrible whats with the" and then"
castandblast chapter 8 . 3/20/2016
it shows nothing here
castandblast chapter 5 . 3/20/2016
first paragraph, last line. Hermes is not the god of speed. Thieves and Travelers. also, he is the gods messenger
castandblast chapter 2 . 3/19/2016
no offence, but the rhyme scheme for the prophesy sucks. Think of it as a poem, that should help
Guest chapter 23 . 2/14/2016
although there were grammatical mistakes the story was good
Guest chapter 7 . 2/14/2016
although the story is good i cannot understand a damn thing
please correct the text
Collin Oshea chapter 23 . 1/16/2016
Fantastic story, I enjoyed this story very much. Thanks for writing it.
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