|Reviews for Animagus Mishap! SLOW UPDATES!|
| Tiltman.bbb chapter 36 . 8/21
This was a great read well done please continue
| Faery66 chapter 36 . 8/20
Hope to read more soon.
| Guest chapter 36 . 8/2
want to see blaze join harry soon
| babiluv22 chapter 36 . 8/1
Update update update update
| draco7347 chapter 36 . 7/23
really love this story cant wait 4 new chapters
| xXxnarusasuxXx chapter 36 . 7/13
| MoonSaberGirlX chapter 36 . 7/9
This story is really great so far and I can't wait to see what you come up with next. I really like how you put a new twist on the Blaise and Harry aspect without just out right making him a girl or gay. Just an idea and I'm by no means telling you how to right your story, but I thought it might be cool if you could work in making Fawkes a human female and becoming one of Harry's girls, maybe even the Sphinx from the last task since she is a giant female cat/human hybrid in her own right. just a few ideas I wont be offended if you don't use them or stop reading the story, as I said before you are doing a brilliant job with it so far, and I can't wait to read more.
| Guest chapter 36 . 7/5
| Guest chapter 36 . 6/30
Please more chapter pretty please this and rise of overlord Vulcan rewrite
| KrulciferAkitsukii chapter 36 . 6/27
Looking forward.. :3
| Kitten Arina chapter 2 . 6/18
Sorry but you forgot she shows that she is an Animagus to all her first years even if she doesn't say that she is one.
| Runecutter chapter 11 . 6/15
I really like the story. It has a lot of original plot points like Sirius "Disguise", Hermione's way of keeping her changed biology "secret" or even the idea of Riddle not being found "worthy" that I have literally not seen anywhere else. And it handles it's well "liberties" in character reactions and personality with a lot of respect giving them pretty well worked out plot lines to explain why they are who they are in this alternate Universe... Even the pacing of Harry's changes making a first appearance is decent, while we still get a "on calendar" development that is quicker than maybe strictly reaslistic, it spreads out over a couple of chapters instead of happening in a Planck Time unit all at once and without any trigger or reason. So kudos for doing a reasonably good job on writing this little tale.
Of course there are also downpoints like the spelling which goes overboard every now and then with false equivalents of words, the most offending of which is a typical american problemword "defiantly" (meant is definitely and it occurs at least three or four times before the point I'm reading on right now, somewhere in Chapter 17 or 18...) or bad editing/uploading which leaves strange butchered sentences / half sentences split in the middle of a word behind. And of course some of the wide spread problems like "lying/laying", "I and me" and such stuff are also happening all the time. Not a deathsentence for a story per se, but a thing that should be improved before good stories can really turn into "great" ones.
Then there are some pretty disappointing stereotypes like his animagus forms. It's not enough that he has magical animagus forms that influence his human thoughts and reactions, it's not enough for them to be five with him acquiring more not impossible right now, no it has to be some weird and childish "special forms" like "royal". That's usually a reason to close a story and never return to that author again, nothing good has ever come from people re-inventing the unicorn or yet another dumbf*** dragon-species.
And ultimately there is the reason why i'm putting this under THIS chapter instead of at the end of to where I've read on my tablet/mobile phone where I don't ever review anything... basic biology failure during a lemon scene. I don't know why it happened, there may be a totally legit reason for having wrong impressions or it might just have been bad phrasing with no real fault of your own behind it, but the Hymen is a small skinny "cap" on top of the vagina where its opening to the "outside world" lies. It's never been deep inside the VJJ and you can't put your male noodly appendages in for inches and inches before it gives, no matter how often you'll read the eversame descriptions in stories. Which for that exact reason is one of the worst warning flags for "badfic" there is in life. As more often than not authors who use this cliché and literary falsehood write horrible lemon scenes with lots of such impossible things happening. Please stop furthering the number of stories doing it wrong (IIRC it happened again with Hermione in her segment although it wasn't as clearly described as here as the emphasis was more on her pain than on Harry's feelings during that moment) there are lots of things why a guy might feel an obstacle when delving in deeper, not the least common of which is the woman feeling uncomfortable from first time experiencing this "something going in there" or the part in question usually being about 3 inches "long" or smaller and almost closed in the middle when relaxed being forced to quickly turn into "stretchmode"..., but there simply is not a skin finger deep inside the girlparts that could break when half his manhood is already doing the in-and-out game anywhere in human anatomy. (We could also go into why it does not even need to "break" if you just take your time and try to be careful, but that's not really something a story needs to have. Correct anatomy IS!), oh that also is a not too pleasant stereotype with Harry carrying a "third leg" in his pants... although this is more of the "yawn" type of being overused and done badly so often that it just isn't anything thrilling anymore to read.
So again: I like the story, but boy... has it got some problems.
| Bjorn chapter 20 . 6/13
It's an enjoyable story so, but harry could talk more like a teenager. It's difficult to enjoy a story about a youth who says "whilst". Also updates more often would be appreciated
| james2ds3 chapter 36 . 6/13
is harry going to have a phoenix added to his list of animagus forms or pet
| mbahgila21 chapter 36 . 6/4
Well.. nice chapter... i hope you add Ginny in Harry's harem as a mate, but you dont... well... iam dissapointed...
Sorry for my grammar.. english is not my language...