|Reviews for Chocolate|
| EternalFalsity chapter 1 . 1/3
Thankful for you writing Syaorancest fics, there's so little of them and you write them so well!
I love Syaoran, he's so adorable. This story was very vivid, I loved the progression and acceptance Syaoran had towards his captivity. It all seemed so experimental between the two. I'm glad "the clone" was semi-kind during the sex scenes, instead of all out brutal.
I wish there was a sequel where Syaoran asked his clone to stay with him.
| xXxOtAkU-444xXx chapter 1 . 12/2/2014
I like it! poor Syaoran
| Fi Suki Saki chapter 1 . 10/5/2013
This is insane...!
But i eventually read it until the end...
| Public91998 chapter 1 . 7/10/2013
That was... Awesome... _
| snoopygirl11 chapter 1 . 1/21/2013
The clone's curiosity was used well here :) and Syaoran's confusion felt suitable for the situation. Great fic!
| Skittles Pie chapter 1 . 11/11/2012
You must write a part where he's rescuuuuuuuuuued I love the trauma, but I love the a hating during the "recovery" period and what others do that makes them think they're helping X3
| Guest chapter 1 . 11/5/2012
you do realise that the clone actually is his father... so it is a bit weird reading something like this. but if you imagine some other characters its really hot
| kuroXIII chapter 1 . 11/5/2012
Sorry for not reviewing earlier but I had to go to tutuoring when you uploaded this. You are such a tease. _
This is amazing! I really love the psychological aspect of their relationship in the one-shot. Like how Syaoran is aware that his clone is using negative reinforcement to train Syaoran to respond the way he wants him to respond but Syaoran is helpless to stop it. It's interesting that although C!Syaoran is in control, he is still learning about himself as he uses R!Syaoran for his own needs. R!Syaoran may know more than him about what his body wants but all he has to do is watch R!Syaoran's reactions, to determine his next action.
I LOL-ed at R!Syaoran's internal dialogue (which is kinda a morbid-funny) when he supplied us what he thinks C!Syaoran's thoughts are. "This must be fun" indeed. XD
I expect that after this event, he's not just going to want 'cuddles'.
As for possible mistakes... You don't really have any spelling errors and the grammar was okay. However, there was something 'off' about this oneshot. The writing felt a little too "formal". I'm not sure how to explain it. Like you were being too specific when describing their actions/thoughts?
Either way, I'm really glad that you decided to post this fic and I can't wait to read what else you have in store for Syaoran. :)
| darkchibi-chan chapter 1 . 11/5/2012
Holy crap...That...That was amazing! WAAAAAAY better than my own..! Ugh, your so good at this! You definitely need to write more of these! That was freaking hot! And you got C!Syaoran's personality and curiously JUST right! I must say, this was a VERY good read, and I loved it! I'm so glad you wrote this!