|Reviews for The Marriage Flaw|
| semicharmed chapter 4 . 9/7/2017
You also have issues with using-or not using-hyphens and apostrophes correctly.
| semicharmed chapter 3 . 9/7/2017
You're missing a lot of commas.
| Francis-rose chapter 1 . 8/29/2017
This was great
| Guest chapter 18 . 5/1/2017
| Reagan Bequette chapter 18 . 3/20/2017
| anon chapter 3 . 1/19/2017
You ought to consider using a beta-reader in the future if you decide to write again.
| Irrevelent chapter 7 . 3/12/2016
What? This chapter implies that two people who have intention to marry could be denied being together in lieu of taking a compatibility test to be paired with a potential non intended marriage partner. Not. If such a thing were even a possibility, Harry and Ginny would just up and marry now. There's no way that two people intended to marry already would be denied and tested as the whole intention is for people to marry, hopefully happily.
| Guest chapter 13 . 1/14/2016
221B Baker Street?
Hmmmm, I'm not sure if I prefer Snape or Sherlock. (Nah...Sherlock Holmes is better)
| riskeybusiness chapter 18 . 2/10/2015
Really enjoyed it! Don't think you dragged it out at all, if anything it was rushed at the end. Thanks for sharing :)
| Guest chapter 18 . 10/17/2014
| RiverWoman1 chapter 18 . 10/3/2014
Lovely ending. And don't stop writing. I know with two young 'uns it's difficult - (been there, done that got the tee) - you have a talent for this ship (your vids also prove it) and I would love to read more of your Snanger stories.
Anyhow - thanks for writing this (and Gilded Love).
See you around the boards and YouTube.
| RiverWoman1 chapter 16 . 10/3/2014
Y'know what? I think this works much better without the smutty sex. Personally, I think it would have been wrong to have dived straight into their first intimate moment: it actually makes the reader (by that I mean me) use their imagination. Was it great sex or was is just OK? Did the earth move or was it simply maahh?
You bring out Severus's softer side slowly, which is good; after all, he is a man who has had to learn to hide his feelings from an early age so he can't suddenly become all mushy.
I haven't read the 'flaming comments'(I'm still finding my way around the site) - which I always think are cowardly anyway - and believe me, I know what it's like. I have been flamed by more people, 'so called readers', because they don't like how I write a character or I'm not following strict canon. I believe these people just don't 'get' fanfic in any of its forms; whether as a written story or on video.
Keep doing what you are doing; write what you need to write and if readers don't like it - there are plenty of other stories out there they can find!
| RiverWoman1 chapter 12 . 10/2/2014
I like your Ginny!
| RiverWoman1 chapter 6 . 10/2/2014
Oh I love Hermione when she is forceful - and she has a plan, bravo (I think!)
| RiverWoman1 chapter 4 . 10/2/2014
I didn't have a problem with accent and my Da was a Scot!
From the date at the top, I guess you now have a toddler! Hope it all went well.