Coming back just to express my opinion on this obscene fucking garbage, but just to be clear using rape as a plot device makes you almost immediately a dogshit author, so cheers.

And in a world of pensieve memories and truth potions, shit like what’s happening with Malfoy here would never happen. But instead you keep all of these people in the same school together, and the only justice is at the end when Malfoy just, dies? And I don’t think anyone else involved faced any justice, it’s so ass, how can you even contemplate such an unsatisfactory conclusion.

Like the things you can accomplish with magic and they’re just sat on their fucking hands like “ooh boohoo what can I do they’re going to hurt my family.” LIKE..? Fuck this. Just letting you know you wrote a genuinely good idea that you then ran into the fucking ground with this untouchable Malfoy bullshit, deeply toxic Daphne, and Harry being a fucking pushover, not to mention every peer and adult in his life constantly pushing him towards awful choices and never protecting him.

Garbage.

LOOOOOOOOOL knew it, because of course that shit show would somehow help them get back together.

Literally NOTHING changed, fuck this shit man, completely skirts around the real issue because Harry still just simps so fucking hard for this cunt

LOL BRO WHAT? These people don’t give a SHIT about Harry bro I called it, oh my GOD

Oh my god they’re going to be back together before the fucking school year even starts again aren’t they?

How is NO ONE telling this teenager to take it slow and maybe, idk date someone else?.. like he’s a kid maybe don’t stay with the person who is directly responsible for your most recent brush with death. Does no one give a shit about Harry’s mental health, or is it just “we need Harry to be the best of us so he must forgive and forget” FUCK I am supremely pissed off with this story, hate reading at this point

Why… can they not just force students to lift their sleeves? If it proves they’re part of a terrorist organization it makes perfect fucking sense to check?.. again this isn’t a court of law it’s a fucking school, the board and the headmaster make the rules

He forgave her in ONE CHAPTER. What a wet fucking blanket, DUDE?!

Maybe the first story of yours where I genuinely can’t stand the pairing? Daphne is just not worth it bro.

And this forced Malfoy shit is so annoying. They don’t need to convict him of a crime to get him removed from a school, they’re separate fucking things. It’s so ridiculous that any teacher would subject students to someone like him knowing what he’s done, it’s not a court of law. Christ this story is painfully aggravating, especially since I know Harry is going to forgive her, which is just insane.

Overall, I still liked this story. I really enjoyed Tracey as you wrote her, and I liked the characterizations between your 2 MCs and their relationship. I didn't think that Daphne was portrayed too toxic, like others have said.

The only thing I did not enjoy was the review I sent in for chapters 15 and 16. Felt like it didn't add anything to the story and only took away from the quality of the other 31 chapters.

Still, enjoyable all in all.

Yeah you completely killed the story with the last two chapters.

Using rape as a catalyst for sudden drama is the epitome of poor writing, and to further that, you couldn't even address the cheap plot device you used last chapter properly. Astoria was raped, and yet she's giggling and asking for a male presence to be next to her. Abigail and Anton's daughter was raped and obliviated, and the perpetrator was not charged or caught and is still in school, and yet they're allowing their other daughter to stay in school because of OWLS (lol sure).

You used a horrific event of rape as a cheap plot catalyst without much thinking behind it, and now you can't properly address it with the proper writing. It's just something that happened for you to move onto your real plot point: Daphne selling Harry out.

Chapters 1-14: 8/10
Chapters 15-16: 0/10

Sorry !, had two storys open . My review " Amelia should know,,," was not about this story

Given her position Amelia should know what "first degree murder" is. In this chapter, it is evident she does not

I really enjoyed the story, well done. i thought you did a good job with the drama and the romance was enjoyable.

one question though. you seemed to be leaning in the direction of doing something more with pansy as a character, but she slept with someone for information but we dont find out anymore then that and shes never mentioned again? like she's not even mentioned by name at the end and what happened to her and all thats left is to assume she died?

either was it was a good story, keep up the good work and you should feel proud of yourself.

Oh well, why take the easy way out

Go for the hardest way

I like everything about this story good build up decent harry but to often have i seen the authors want to add a lil razzle dazzle like rape or something controlling as if the plot isnt thick enough just my two cents

Harry was Quidditch captain which means he could use the Prefect bathroom. Said so in Half Blood Prince