|Reviews for Michelle goes to Say Brook University|
| Guest chapter 1 . 11/7/2012
Decent start. I'd recommend starting the first chapter, if you're doing chapters, with at least a bit of the plot - why is she telling us? Of course, going to college for the first time is good enough, but I don't know how many would think to Wiki to know what it is - still, I did and congratulate you on a unique SF college. Telling us what it is and what she's interested in learning will increase the chance people will read on.
Also, while Nicky and Alex are cousins, as one fic on here shows (I think it's "Cousin Aunt Stephanie"), there could be a family story behind why she calls them that. that's something you can tell us later. You cuold say, "Well, of course they're my cousins since they're Uncle Jesse and Aunt Becky's kids, but I cal them my little brothers becasue..." And then just say they're like brothers since they've always lived with her, or have her promise to get into a more detailed story later about why.
| ShirleyTemple1932 chapter 1 . 11/9/2012
intersting idea and i love your profile picture of Ashley Olsen