|Reviews for The Evil Shadows of Oz|
| happyhooligan2001 chapter 1 . 7/10/2013
This was a pretty good story but I thought Ozma was a little too blase' about this coming invasion not even bothering to warn the Wizard or Glinda to get ready for Luficilla. Also, I have to agree with some of your other reviewers that the evil witch was just a little to easy to beat.
| WogglebugLoveProductions chapter 1 . 7/9/2013
I can see I had a good reason for having this story win first place in my contest. I can easily see how you have potential to help the Wogglebug rise to fame and positive recognition as much as I do. Or at best help to make him be better understood be the small-minded Oz devoted hippies. Of course, in my line of work he will be made famous through my personally made movies that are not related directly to Oz.
I however do agree in a way with the previous review. The conflict felt somewhat too easy to be handled with no true struggle involved. I understand that for fantasy this can at times be acceptable. BUT in real life you always need to strive to look out for both yourself and for others all the time.
| JackPumpkinheadandtheWoggleBug chapter 1 . 6/23/2013
Umm... I guess it's okay, but you really didn't give our heroes enough obstacles to overcome so the story could be more entertaining. It was really just like "Oh, wow, evil witch is here to destroy us. Oh, hang on, it's easy to get rid of her. Well, that was simple and unentertaining. Bye!"
It was okay in the writing, although I do not think Dorothy would ever have bitten someone's hand in one of Baum's books.
And why the heck is it rated T?
| James Birdsong chapter 1 . 3/29/2013
| Count Mallet chapter 1 . 2/1/2013
I enjoyed your writing style. I especially liked some of your vivid descriptions.
I also found it interesting to see that you wrote about a celebration. I, too, included a celebration in an Oz-themed fic I wrote here this past Fall when I was trying to overcome some writers block. It's always fun to see how different people write about a common theme or interest.
I noticed an awkward sentence: "Those who used the magic for evil was considered illegal magic."
Did you mean to say something like, "It was illegal for anyone to use magic for evil purposes." ?
I also saw a place where a singular verb was used with a plural subject. I also noticed a couple of times where the quote at the start of a sentence was ended with a period instead of a comma. These are very minor, though, and overall, you did a good job writing.
Finally, I liked the Latin incantations. I don't know if you came up with or translated those on your own, but it was a nice touch.
Thanks for sharing this story here.
- Count Mallet -