Reviews for The badest pony ever! and new foals
Xx.WildatHeart.xX chapter 1 . 11/9/2012
Okay, this review is going to be plainly and simply constructive critism. First of all, you might want to find a better alternative to 'one day' it can immediatly anoy the reader. Try using an action to start of or some speach? Secondly, you should try writing this story in first person? Maybe from Amy's point of view or Ty's or maybe even Ollie's? I think this will suit your writing style better. Please don't take this as a bad review cause that's not my intention. _