|Reviews for Gone|
| Bree Lawson chapter 1 . 6/22/2013
Just a couple of things that seemed just too out of character not to mention. 1. Elliot went through so much abuse as a child that he would never hit someone, especially if that someone was Olivia. He knows that her mother abused her and he's just not the "woman-beater" type. 2. If for some unknown reason any boyfriend of Olivia's hit her, Elliot or not, she wouldn't cower away from him and she definitely would go back to him.
**It's neither a great nor terrible story, but the characters are just so unrealistic and not themselves that I had a genuinely hard time making myself read the whole story.
| Haha chapter 5 . 5/30/2013
Wow this story kind of really sucks. I'm sorry to say, it feels rushed and fake and not worth reading
| BeautifulBenson4015 chapter 12 . 11/25/2012
| Paisley Mae chapter 12 . 11/24/2012
My honest review of the story:
I don't agree with the reviewers who said this is a crackfic, because it's not. I can tell you've put some effort into the story, and your writing has improved immensely from when you first posted! I'm glad you took the suggestions of reviewers and improved your writing for the better. When you first posted, you always used chat speak, but now you post with correct grammar.
I agree the characters do not interact like normal adults. I think it's quite clear that you're quite young, am I right? I read some of your reviews and people from your classes reviewed. You can't expect a young writer to write like an adult. If you read the stories I posted when I was in middle school, you can tell the characters definitely don't interact like normal (mature) adults. You can't expect a young writer to have the mentality to write at a mature level.
You've come a long way, and I think there is room for improvement that will come as you mature in life and as a writer. To the flamers, leave her alone. Let's see some of your writing.
PS: I would strongly advise against having Olivia give birth to twins or triplets because that's so cliche, in my opinion. I had her have triplets in my very first story, though.
| katechoco chapter 12 . 11/24/2012
So that's the deal with this story: The plot and the idea in general is really good, it is obvious that you have some ideas and imagination. But. They way you portrayed the characters, the way they interact with each other, is really not how adults interact at all. To me it feels like you wrote it in a rush, there's no depth, and that's a shame, because there are some good ideas there.
| Guest chapter 1 . 11/22/2012
Very good plot you have going here. Don't let the envy and ignorance of these flames discourage you. Write to your hearts desire and please update x
| Ll chapter 12 . 11/20/2012
Thank god it's the bed because this sucked
| Cookerygirl chapter 12 . 11/20/2012
Make it TWINS! This then pleases all the kids.
| Guest chapter 11 . 11/19/2012
Hey why wont u reconizge me! LOL from; C, From Technology
| Guest chapter 10 . 11/19/2012
I love this! from,c
| Guest chapter 9 . 11/19/2012
I am scared now. How can u do this to me Sarah! LOL from; c
| AmberNicole16 chapter 11 . 11/19/2012
That was a very good story and you're a very good writer. Don't listen to those people have nothing more to do than just write negative things about it. If you think you did well with your story than you did well. KEEP WRITING!
| Guest chapter 7 . 11/19/2012
SAD,SAD, SAD! thanks Sarah!
| Guest chapter 6 . 11/19/2012
Awwww, thats soooo sad, how can u do this to me Sarah? LOL from, C
| Guest chapter 5 . 11/19/2012
You brought everybody back that I love! Thanks sarah!