Reviews for A Change of the Heart
BloodyNightScream chapter 20 . 6/28
No no no NO" WRONG! x punches Zadesh in the face x you did not discover him first, because he was already discovered by Aladdin and his group -3- so fame for you on that basis...suck it loser! x flips zadesh off x :D

lolz sorry XD i had to XXD i really like this chapter a lot (: when Zadesh wasn't pissing me off (which surprisingly he wasn't that much) i was falling deeper in love with him as a character yes he's sadistic and such, but there's also something else to him (: this chapter gave me a more personal and deeper understanding of zadesh (though nobody will ever understand or know him completely -w-) this chapter made me laugh a lot to with all of daniel's and zadesh's actions XXD daniel was getting sassy B) taking Zadesh's spot on the bed and trying to take the book i gasp at his behavior! lolz Zadesh is such a child sometimes XD...a pissy, murderous child .w."
i love when he wanted to bash his head because of daniel and he yelled at daniel during one of daniel's tantrums that it was in the drawer to the left...i couldn't stop laughing XXD my favorite part had to be when daniel was talking and zadesh just slapped a hand over his mouth and kept going...lolz i died XXD just imagine that!

my favorite sentence had to be, "I'm fully aware of the situation on our laps, but i've been preoccupied by more important situations than a criminal charge."
lolz idk why but i loved it! XXD

and daniel...lolz "they're just being negative." gosh i don't even know lolz and i swear he's like the group's counselor or therapist, just from asking how zadesh was doing

daniel:"So how are you doing? c:"
everyone else: "-_-..."
Zadesh: "I feel like you should shut up."
daniel: D':

lolz XXD when it first started out with zadesh with him being naked at the waist up i was like "hold up...wait...Back it up, back it up!...WEE OHHH! WEE OHHH! ABORT ABORT! x nosebleed x" lolz yes i definitely like zadesh more XXD
but did it seriously take him hours to come up with that name? lolz it's a good name, don't get me wrong! but hours? XXD oh must be some sorts of stupid...i came up with 'Hell's Serpentine' within 5 seconds -w- it's not great but it's pretty good for a name :P and you think you're plans will work out so well that it's inevitable...when it took you hours to come up with a name?...i'm sorry but x puts a hand on Zadesh's shoulder x..maybe you should go into a new business or a better hobby that isn't quite as dangerous as this...lolz

Awesome work on this! and sorry this was so long (: i just really liked this chapter

P.S. yes malcho... it's just the paranoia kicking in as a group of bad guys plan your death. so go back to sleep B)
Guest chapter 20 . 6/12
Cool! Is there another chapter for this story?
BloodyNightScream chapter 19 . 5/12
aww~ this was a cute chapter ( : nice job! lolz favorite part is when malcho suggested that he would teach her how to fly and she's like "no bitch *slap*" XXD he was just crushed, ii love how you described that a hole was poked in him and he like deflated XXD i was laughing at that! i was like "oh snap!"

lolz can't wait for the next chapter!
keep up the awesome work! u
Guest chapter 19 . 5/11
Wicked Cool! Is there another chapter for this story?
BloodyNightScream chapter 18 . 5/10
yay ch. 18! : D it is a very interesting chapter, full of mystery and anticipation for what will happen next, though i thought Phasir was being more of an ass, not alisha...lolz just saying

i'm rooting for you so keep going! i'll be waiting eagerly for the next chapter (:
BloodyNightScream chapter 17 . 5/10
awesome work on this chapter! i love how deep the conversation between alisha and aatif got, made me think on things. it also gave me a happiness that even though it's a story there are still good people out there who will help you despite all the idiots out there hurting you because you're different.
keep up the awesome work! i can't wait to read more!
p.s. love jerky and his childish ways on trying to steal fish and wanting that ruby and being crushed when he couldn't have it...poor baby x pets jerky x
lolz and how Zadesh would have scoffed at Aatif, that made me laugh
Eternal Sidekick chapter 18 . 4/14
Wonderful character building chapters! Really looking forward to Phasir's impending visit.

Keep up the amazing work!
Guest chapter 18 . 4/14
Moreeeeeeeeee! I love this story, it must go on. I need to find out what happens next...
updateeeeeeeee pleaseeeeeeeee!
Guest chapter 18 . 4/12
Wicked Cool! Is there another chapter for this story?
Guest chapter 17 . 4/8
Cool! Is there another chapter for this story?
Guest chapter 16 . 4/5
Cool! Is there another chapter for this story?
BloodyNightScream chapter 16 . 11/20/2014
another excellent chapter! awesome job rubens lilium! (: your very good at being characters from movies or books, none of the characters are ooc at all! tehee jerky is adorable as ever c: i love when he licked alisha's forehead when he was looking down at her, so cute my goodness, aladdin and malcho are getting deep, the part when malcho reacts to thinking he might end up identifying with iago made me laugh, keep up the awesome work! and i wish alisha and malcho luck in the future chapters lolz can't wait for the next one c:
BloodyNightScream chapter 15 . 7/24/2014
tehee this is awesome as usual! XXD the ending is cute with genie c: just spying on them all creepy like XD lolz sorry
my fave part though is when malcho and alisha were having that silent argument about how he should be nice to genie, that was hilarious in my opinion XXD
all in all good job! can't wait for the upcoming chapters! c: keep it up! your doing great! XXD
BloodyNightScream chapter 14 . 6/11/2014
another job well done Rubens Lilium! this chapter is a little more mellow but in a good way! it brings some more calm to the story after a nice fight, you perfected the calm after the fight part of stories c: sorry i worded that weird X3 its like 11:53 pm so meh, anyway i love how much detail you go into all their feelings, its so descriptive i get wrapped up and its like im feeling those feelings! the sadness, doubt, anger, etc... i can practically feel it all! my favorite part though would have to be when Aladdin was saying how they gave Iago a chance even though Iago was once a bad guy, i was like 'oohhh, eat it sucker' lolz i liked that part c: made me giggle with a devilish grin XD well keep up the awesome work! i eagerly wait for your next chapter c: so hurry up cus im not good with waiting when it comes to stories XXD lolz jk, take as much time as ya need but im still itching to know what happens next
BloodyNightScream chapter 13 . 3/1/2014
nyaaaa this is a cute chapter c: i chuckled at the end with 'whereas it was normally awkward and difficult to shatter.' XD idk it kind of made me chuckle a bit...i guess you can say Malcho is finally 'growing up' *bunny quote fingers* it was also cute when Jerky feel off Malcho's head and DIDN'T wake up XD how could he not?! even i couldn't sleep threw that!..and you know how deep a sleeper i am ;p

anyway, another job well done! this chapter is fantastic just like the rest! c: can't wait for the next one stay awesome! *hugs* and give Zadesh a nice smack from me please -3- big jerk needs one...even if he got slapped around by a giant serpent XD he didn't seem to learn his lesson
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