Reviews for The Ninth Sekirei Pillar |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Hey, I just finished reading your story, really enjoyed it! The way you described each scene made it super easy to picture everything, like I was right there with the characters. The emotions came th rough so naturally, and the pacing and dialogue felt really smooth. It’s a solid piece of writing |
![]() ![]() ![]() Fuuuuuu-SION! HA! SUP BRO! CHIHO AND UZUME FUSED TOGETHER TO BECOME: CHIME! i presume its pronounced "chee-may" and not "chime" like a bell. |
![]() ![]() ![]() What's interesting is that oddly enough, even "normal" Naruto could have had the Married Couple thing happen to him, sheer on the grounds of mental flexibility. i remember reading a fic where Naruto creates a female clone to be a "permanent" companion, to emulate the feeling of having someone to come home to, and since this clone *was* him, she knew exactly what he needed, as he needed. over time, she stopped being a clone of Naruto, and her own individual person. And that made the relationship even stronger. So the clones being capable of evolving into their own individual beings if left around long enough, makes perfect sense to me. and if they have a way to make their existence "normalized" then yeah, taking it also makes sense. |
![]() ![]() ![]() VALKYRIE PROFILE. hell even Hanabi's Norito is partially from VP. "Oh blackness without beginning nor end. One-eyed god imprisoned there, now Harken to my Call! GRAVITY BLESSING!" Still doesnt beat "BOW TO ME! WORSHIP ME! HONOR MY NAME! LEZARD! VALETH!" "No mercy for the damned...no escape from the Catastrophe! METEOR SWARM!" |
![]() ![]() ![]() sad the Gae Bolg itself couldnt be used. could have made a joke about Naruto's Gay Bulge penetrating Sasuke's Raw Ass. y'know, like the badly translated original version of FSN. |
![]() ![]() ![]() The story is already complete, and I don't know the future yet buuuuut, I will say from the point of view of the reader ... this was canon Naruto from what it seems until after the war... During the 7 years... Naruto seemed to pick up more on Fuinjustu the sealing arts ... other than the seal for Madara and the apartment they were at he doesn't seem to really use that art... During the 7 years no weapon training? They kept up the training for 7 years to stay in shape for Madara and not once Naruto thought to pick up on a different art? He has people around him that could've/should've suggested this in my opinion... Hell Kurama is smart... I'm sure he would have suggested this... and I'm shocked and sad the other Bijuu isn't in the story ... a fragment was left in Naruto could have pulled a hey we back since technically Madara doesn't hold them anymore. This goes to show as great as Jiraiya is (love the character don't get me wrong) ... for what almost 3 years the training wasn't as great as people make it sound to be. All I really want to say is I feel you could have added more to Naruto skill set from a War Hokage Naruto. Definity going to finish reading though love your story still so far Xp |
![]() ![]() ![]() A shame Minato got left behind. He needs Musubi in his life. The two are great together. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hopefully Chiho and Uzume will get access to his blood at some point to help her. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hpw the hell does that work? A shadow clone henged acting as a completely different entity? His chalra is literally narutos so he should still be her ashikabi? |
![]() ![]() ![]() “Sometimes he wondered if he was gay” he says about a clearly traumatised Minato after being raped, even though he stated he loved qnother girl. Poor Minato he deserves better friends *crying emoji* |
![]() ![]() Extremely well written story. Loved the plot even though I rarely read long stories. Thank You for writing this. |
![]() ![]() Naruto Chakra is orange-yellow, thats why his chakra mode is like that |
![]() ![]() ![]() well you are a shitty author who can't give proper explanation for shits he does... let's talk about it in points... 1. you mentioned that naruto has three affinities wind,water and lightning and now u say he is worse with lightning. 2 I can understand the problem with sage mode but you seem hell bent on naruto's combat abilities being hampered even for no reason... he created six clones with more chakra to do jutsu and hiraishin and he is exhausted wtf is your logic... 16 year old naruto made countless clones continuously for battling kage level shinobi when the war started and it has been 8 years since then so how can his chakra capacity be so low?... 3. you mentioned that his combat abilities has gone down cuz he has been complacent for 2 months and didn't train... the third hokage was able to fight 3 kage level shinobi even after not being in combat for years... tsunade war shown that she never trained when she was away wallowing in her sorrow but was instantly able to fight orochimaru...4. you yourself said that naruto had also branched in kenjutsu so he should be able to fight mutsu better and wasn't sasuke also a kenjutsu user didn't naruto fight him for like a decade shouldn't he have more experience in fighting with kenjutsu users?... he trained for 8 years in fuinjutsu but hasn't even shown any combat ability with it ...5. wtf is it with you and powerscaling... you gave sage mode 88 and sagemodekyuubi only 100... bro both levels have like the difference of sky and land 6. he is a master of wind jutsu but he still has to do complete handsigns 7. so managed to get naruto's mbi credit card? ... wasn't hanabi glaring at him the whole time and what kind of hokage is naruto if his awareness is so shit that he can't even notice that and your pathetic excuse of naruto being in deep thought and not noticing higa?teen Kakashi being in deep thought was able to notice a shinobi and act accordingly...8 . did naruto not learn a thing as hokage ... leaving hanabi in foreign territory while being injured and not even a clone guarding her...9. mutsu should have been on Backfoot not naruto ... naruto has more combat experience than mutsu's age and was in a war against all powerful madara and cuz of some disadvantages he is being pushed around...10. naruto's clone being surprised that yomi was able to use wind and so shocked that he was dispelled by attack , so naruto was everytime so surprised that he would be able to block an unkown attack his opponent used?... naruto knew sekirei has abilities like these but still was surprised and at the same time mutsu didn't know an ashikabi could fight like naruto but was surprised but didnt let his movement stop ... 11. the all powerful madara could not do anything while hanabi attacked even when surprised... bro he had the most powerful eternal mangekyo sharignan and hanabi's hands were blur?naruto was just a flash at his highest speed but madara was more than a match for that, he even evaded 2nd hokage's hiraishin but couldn't block hanabi ? I know the attack would still hit but he could have hit her too so wt hell and for what reason did you make naruto seem so op sensor who can't even sense anything to save his life... and your pathetic excuse ... he was in deep thought or had little chakra... bitch Karin after being stabbed and used by sasuke could sense naruto's and kurama chakra so well that she could feel them... and I'm forced to read this fic cuz I'm addicted to fanfiction that are complete. and could u please reply ...I know its too late but I wanna hear you explain ... bro |
![]() ![]() ![]() fantastic story! thank you so much for sharing it! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Fucking amazing an interesting ride definitely an the immortality did catch me a bit off gaerd at first but I suppose it all worked out in the end right |