Reviews for Enveloped in the Darkness |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I can easily picture Tom Marvolo Riddle experiencing something similar. |
![]() ![]() DID HARRY EAT A CUM FLAVORED BEAN?! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Very nice can’t wait for an update |
![]() ![]() ![]() Personally, I think the "If you piss me off, I'll wreck you" message has been delivered quite sufficiently by Harry. I think the details were a bit too descriptive, but besides that, I understood the chapter well, and everything was clear, and very understandable. It was written well, and the title of "The Rage of Harry Potter" is perfect for this chapter. Great job with understanding what you wanted to write, and writing it in a way that readers can understand as well. |
![]() ![]() ![]() You like reviews. I like reviewing. Great work so far. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Intresting start, written very well. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Okay, Albus Bloody Dumbdumb just encouraged the guy to perform sacrificial ritual and recommended runes for it? The fuck? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yay, onwards to cannon divergence! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Interesting start, although Harry do sound too eloquent for a 11 y.o. at times. Perhaps, this is an orphanage with some impressive library and lots of free time, then? |
![]() ![]() ![]() If I was Harry in this scene, there would be two questions that I would ask: why is she sure it was the killing curse that was cast onto him if there were no witnesses and the outcome is not what usually happens after killing curse? And what happened after that so he ended in non-magical orphanage? |
![]() ![]() ![]() His disposition reminds me of a young Tom Marvelo Riddle. Whom many know as Lord Voldemort |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is a well-written story, very interesting and easy to read. The only thing is, Harry seems too old for 11 years. I can't imagine a child having a conversation literally on an equal footing with an experienced politician like Lucius. |
![]() ![]() ![]() And now you're just handing out power-ups to Harry with no drawback? At least try to make it believable. |
![]() ![]() ![]() The sheer amount of arrogance that your Harry Potter is imbued with is nearly beyond words. He is, quite literally, everything that Severus Snape feared in the source material: an entitled malicious brat with no respect for anyone else, let alone figures of authority such as his professors. |
![]() ![]() ![]() The characters come across as caricatures at times, not always mind you, but they are heavily flanderized. I'm not particularly a fan of it. Pansy's characterization was especially egregious. |