Reviews for Enveloped in the Darkness |
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![]() ![]() ![]() A very good chapter. I loved this first meeting between Harry and Voldemort. I also like Harry's interpretation of the poem being more a challenge than a simple warning/threat. I hope you won't just skip shopping for various items. I'd like to see how he reacts to the different things around him. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ohh exciting. First glimpse of Voldie. Can't wait for them to meet again. I don't think I reviewed yet. I don't usually review until a few chapters in so I can see whether it's worth it to keep reading and reviewing. Since I'm reviewing now obviously I like your story lol. I like the fact that so far it flows well together and the fact your writing is mature with little grammar and spelling mistakes. Keep going, I can't wait to read more :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() i don't know maybe he shouldn't be si excited |
![]() ![]() ![]() Very good! Harry's barely been in the Wizarding World for an hour and already he's met Voldemort! Fantastic! I cannot wait for more. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Seems like you're trying too hard. Can hardly anticipate meeting a wizard who's a theif, gives him unimaginable pain in his scar and would possibly kill him if he even looked wrong? Yeah, I'd be looking forward to have tea with him too... A good author always brings the character towards each other subtly. Make Harry Impressed by Voldemort's talents (but don't portray it as if canon got it wrong and your OOC Voldemort is the correct version), not have an orgasm by watching him torture his death eaters. That sort of a thing seems fake from a mile away and distracts the reader when they huff and snort at some ridiculous scenario that, they know for sure, could NEVER happen in reality, i.e, is impossible. Regards |
![]() ![]() ![]() I liked those previous chapters better. This one has an interesting ending, but that's it. I was hoping to see more creativity, f.e. Harry would be pissed because he was pushed by a Dark Toser and ruined his clothes. He'd follow the figure to exact his revenge. When he would get closer, said figure would be surrounded by wizards wearing tunics and take the nearest person as a hostage. It may stop aurors but not Harry. He could free the pink haired hottie by levitating and then dropping a heavy object on the unsuspecting fool. Anyway, I think you could make it a Harry/Tonks (or Harry/many but include her). She may be more AU if you wish it of course, but in my opinion she's the best chase there. Nym could even be resurrected at some point to make that pairing possible. It wouldn't be a bad idea if she was to teach him some magic. Anyway, try to make Tonks dark, maybe even slighty evil. It could be a result of her self defence mechanism as everyone always wanted to take adventage of her metamorphomagus skills, nothing more. Harry may be the first who'd try to get to know her and be corrupted by her in turn. -it's one of the options. Other idea: He could think of something, a spell or ritual, to enslave people and gather power that way. |
![]() ![]() ![]() !gasp! How did voldy touch Harry without hurting himself? And why didn't he kill'm, so many questions... (sits back and waits for the next chapter) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thank you for taking an idea such as the orphanage but not making it so unrealistic I couldn't read it. Too many fics are grammar inept or have absolutely no character depth. Please update soon. Also, if everyone is throwing in for pairings, I have to admit I would like this story to be slash or no pairing but overall I wouldn't care as long as the plot is still creative and the pairing doesn't take over the story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ooohhh... Nice! Update soon please!:) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow, this story seems good so far! I really hope future chapters will be as good! :D |
![]() ![]() I liked it. Although you spelled Lilly wrong. Well, you spelled it right that's not the one they used in the book. It was Lily. Please update soon. |
![]() ![]() ![]() A very enjoyable chapter and well-written. I was glad to see how Harry has changed and that McGonagall didn't seem overly worried about how he was acting. It would have made it more difficult in the long run (like Dumbledore not trusting Tom from the very beginning because of Tom's slip-ups when dealing with him). |
![]() ![]() ![]() I bet Dumbledore is already thinking of Tom Riddle. Well, it's your fault, old fool. If only you found a nice family for him... but you didn't. And now the world is going to pay. |
![]() ![]() ![]() That was really good, and I'm so pleased you sent Minervainstead of Hagrid! Can't wait to read the next chapter :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() I LOVE THIS STORY WHOOO! |