Reviews for This Old House
Jo A Curl chapter 8 . 4/24
You know my dear Lady Margaret though Mad you may be, with the turn of a word and a flick of your wrist you create a world that is believable and filled with trials and tribulations that can bring out the deepest withheld emotions for us all. For that I thank you. This is one venue that you can tell an author how much you appreciate their work. For this is truly entertaining.
Laura Carter chapter 15 . 4/22
...wet oriental rugs down to kitchen
Should be:
...wet oriental rugs down to the kitchen

"A monster, madame? You are the definition of the word!" ...I love it!
Laura Carter chapter 14 . 4/20
There was nothing was vicious scrawls across the paper.
Should be:
There was nothing but vicious scrawls across the paper.
IBarnabas chapter 13 . 4/19
Wow! A chilling twist! Very emotionally brutal. I laughed at Willie using Barnabas' Inverness cape as a seat liner, but my laugh was soon stifled by the sudden turn. This is my favorite in the Willie Loomis series so far. I feel like his best development is here. Something you add into this that I really enjoy and savor are the few moments that Willie spends with David. The moments are few, but precious. There's a lot of heart in these moments. Another great chapter, and your affection for the character really shines through in the dialogue. I love it. :)
Laura Carter chapter 10 . 4/18
Love "peanut butter for toothpaste."
Laura Carter chapter 9 . 4/16
At night he laid in bed...should be At night he lay in bed.
online-editor/lay-vs-lie
It's enough to drive you crazy!
Thanks for writing such great stuff.
cynthia curran chapter 3 . 4/12
Willie and bed bugs, and Jason always.
myhrr chapter 2 . 4/3
Wow Mad Margaret. This shows a whole different aspect of barnabas. Poor willie...no beefaroni? As Janet said to Brad in the beginning of rocky horror...I really like the skillful way...you wrote this tale...fantastic!
Magical Irish Dolphin chapter 18 . 3/28
Nice ending. I like that Willie compared himself to James Dean, and the Collins Christmas party sounds amusing. Also thought it was funny that Barnabas is scandalized with the possible existence of female cops. Get with the times man! I bet you write an awesome Julia!
IBarnabas chapter 12 . 3/28
That's exactly what I was thinking! Willie was not a coward! Your take on these events from Willie's POV is incredible. These last 2 chapters show how, even though he is a broken man, he is fearless and keeps changing Barnabas' rules. If one good thing came from all those misadventures with Jason, it was that he learned how to stand up for himself and find a way to do what he wanted to do. Really enjoyed his dream sequence! The million dollars was so funny! Very well-written, and I loved the Barnabas dialogue even more. -applauding-
cynthia curaan chapter 2 . 3/26
Willie remmeberd her of harry, lol.
Magical Irish Dolphin chapter 17 . 3/26
You once again provide some fun and interesting interactions for Willie to make with other characters. Like the scene with Dr. Woodard, and the hint that Maggie may not be dead after all. I like how you gather various characters at the church, and made the Blue Whale bartender have a beautiful baritone voice. Poor Willie having to spend another lousy Christmas/birthday. His relationship with Barnabas is becoming more complex. I like that I don't know what to expect from these two.
Magical Irish Dolphin chapter 16 . 3/24
I like your take of Jason's demise, and interesting conference between Willie and Barnabas. The little snarky notes they wrote each other at the end is funny.
Laura Carter chapter 12 . 3/23
...with a biggest deadbolt...
Sounds better:
...with the biggest deadbolt...

...it was time for the shit hit the fan.
Should be:
...it was time for the shit to hit the fan.

I warned what would happen if you...
Should be:
I warned you what would happen if you...

He needed that last shred of self-respect...
How 'bout:
He needed that last shred of self-assurance...

Brought a tear to my eye...just the one eye.
Laura Carter chapter 10 . 3/22
...prisoner was becoming increasingly aware of her surroundings and circumstance.
Feels better if circumstance is plural
...prisoner was becoming increasingly aware of her surroundings and circumstances.
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