|Reviews for elemental suspect|
| Crazy'nphsycotic chapter 1 . 7/4/2013
It's an okay read. You could work on it a lot tho.
| UnlovedUnwanted chapter 1 . 7/3/2013
5 minuets and 5 days are huge gaps...
| ILOVEJARETH chapter 1 . 7/3/2013
Capitals need to be added when someone is talking and so do lines/spaces when people are talking (eg)
"Hello." Jane said
"Hi." Simon replied.
Simple. And a friend recommend this story to me and I'm sorry to say I did not find it as enjoyable as she did. Could be promising if you worked on it.
| SoMeWhAtCrAzY chapter 1 . 7/3/2013
Too confusing. Spaces need to be added when others are talking. It's basic literature and English grammar. You ought to know that.
| Theimmortaldeath chapter 1 . 7/3/2013
Hawkear-Shadowclan! You forgot one of your friends who even has you in their story!? You should be ashamed. And might I say your grammar needs fixing but for now it's okay... Maybe.
:( not a happy customer
| love-evil-always-vampire chapter 1 . 3/23/2013
Steph, hurry up and continue! :)
| chozowarrior chapter 1 . 2/12/2013
Is that all?! I know you can do better than that, Hawkear!
Post more chapters!I WANT MOAR!
| tubendo chapter 1 . 12/26/2012
Yeah, man— Er, I mean... WHAT DO I CALL YOU?! Anyways cool story. 3 things: 1. You love yourself. 2. YEAH MAN! THE REAL NON-INTERNET TUBENDO IS IN A STORY! 3. Seriously, since when did you own me.
| Mrs Fraser chapter 1 . 11/23/2012
Really enjoyed this read. I think we need to get into creating an original work what do you think?
| Deathbringer88 chapter 1 . 11/17/2012
its okay Grim, but you need to work on it and the summary. anyway i enjoyed it,