Reviews for Each mark
348joey chapter 9 . 8/26
And the plot… get stupider. I'm afraid I've lost interest at this point. So here's a quick review:
Characters seem to be acting mostly in-character except for Ruffnut. Tuffnut is depicted as an idiot who apparently never bathes. Otherwise, it seems fine as far as character consistency goes. B
The plot was mildly interesting at first, but it just got more and more boring. C-
Pacing was a bit odd at times. Some things seemed to just be skipped over or completely forgotten. Drabbles don't usually go anywhere, but I'd still expect the stories within each chapter to be more consistent. B
Spelling and grammar is bad. It's just above the point where I can't read it. I can understand roughly 90% of what was written. I usually know what the hell is going on. Slightly below average quality for FanFiction. C-
Overall: C There are better stories, but there are also worse. It didn't hold my interest for very long, but it still lasted about 8.5 chapters.
G chapter 20 . 8/18
Oh my fuck. This story was amazing. No doubt! Shoot, unbelievably extatic-however the word is spelt. Anyways, loved it.
Guest chapter 20 . 7/28
That was wonderful. Probably the best Sex Series I have ever read. U should try to make more about other various stories and people. I hope u continue to write.
Anonymous.
Guest chapter 15 . 7/16
interesting
marcus.edwards.3323 chapter 20 . 7/16
mmmmmm 100/100
marcus.edwards.3323 chapter 18 . 7/16
see if Heather wasnt a bitch she would have win hiccup and astrid would to find someone else anyway or hiccup can be player and seduce both girls knocked up/impregnate the girls then later have the best orgy ever and while astrid is his wife he would have heather as the mistress and the contest on who can pop the most babies for him hahhahahhahahahaahahhaa
marcus.edwards.3323 chapter 17 . 7/16
oooooooooo
marcus.edwards.3323 chapter 16 . 7/16
wow very nice i think you mess up a couple chapters with spelling but other then that its good
marcus.edwards.3323 chapter 14 . 7/16
wow really good
marcus.edwards.3323 chapter 13 . 7/16
ok good
marcus.edwards.3323 chapter 12 . 7/16
oh now he is act gentleman like
marcus.edwards.3323 chapter 11 . 7/16
well thats way pass bf gf status i mean depending on the age and if they want to they have sex yet when it become more intensive its more to a higher status
marcus.edwards.3323 chapter 10 . 7/16
wow
marcusedwards411 chapter 9 . 7/14
wow intensive
marcusedwards411 chapter 8 . 7/14
hmmm
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