|Reviews for Powder Burns|
| Giraffes Sent Me chapter 1 . 14h ago
I liked this a lot. I like your style of writing, and I like the little explorations of scenes between scenes. I've often wondered what happened that first night after they came back from the Chinese resturant. Well, now I know...
| Rainie Skyes chapter 1 . 9/8/2013
I love how the darkness of the flat echos John's emotions. Don't know if that was intentional, but that's what I got out of it. The part where John is trying to cover Sherlock up is really nice. Kind of shows that John 'gets' Sherlock even though they haven't been flatmates for very long. Nicely done. :)
| magentacr chapter 1 . 8/27/2013
Lol, what a strange dream Sherlock is having. Sweet that his sleepy brains automatically interprets the blanket being giving back to him as being Mycroft's work. John checking the flat was funny to. Of course it would take him a little time to adjust. His guilt was very in character, and his reasoning on it.
Hmm, you would have thought Sherlock would have antiseptic, althoguh you're right, it's probably just stored somewhere unusual. It's illogical to most people, but i'm sure he has his own logic to the disorganised flat.
| rosieiswatching chapter 1 . 8/16/2013
"Sherlock looked pitifully boyish for a moment. Cherubic curls all over the place. He'd been wearing his coat for most of the night and, for the first time, John was really struck by how unnaturally, almost painfully thin he was- the physique of a starved whippet".
Perfect description of Sherlock. But poor John. A very thought provoking and vivid portrayal of the effects of war...
| Melaszka chapter 1 . 8/15/2013
Beautifully written and explores John's psychology so well, from the methodical way he checks the flat for hidden dangers to the lingering guilt that he's killed a man with children. Fabulous details, like the strange noises that keep you awake in a new flat. Sherlock lecturing himself in his sleep was adorable! You're a superb writer who really knows how to inhabit a character.
| cHoCoLaTe-RuM chapter 1 . 7/14/2013
Your description of Sherlock sleeping was absolutely precious. Loved it!
all the best
| PhoenixFeather0198 chapter 1 . 6/21/2013
Ooh very good I like it :)
| Aiko Isari chapter 1 . 5/8/2013
Even with all the lights out, the flat was never really dark.- Is that secretly a metaphor for there always being a hint towards the truth? I think I'm just reading way too much into things. Hahahaha
Just in case.- In case a Sherlock experiment came alive in the night, yes. And attacked Mrs. Hudson.
About purple jaguars, apparently,-... They are secretly on his boxers.
...their abiding love for snails.- *giggle* I wanna know where this idea came from. Were these from your dreams Eddy?
Sherlock looked pitifully boyish for a moment.- Well, he never exactly grew up properly.
"Thank you, Mycroft," - You thank him more in your sleep than you do in your waking hours. Such a perfect little brother.
But I didn't know he had kids.-That's the worst part about a murder. Everybody's got something to leave behind, even if they don't think about it.
the phase of the moon or something.- It is obviously having to do with the half moon and the pressure of your fingerprints on the switch. DUH.
To be fair, logic isn't always Sherlock's thing. :D
| mrspencil chapter 1 . 5/7/2013
A scene expertly painted in words.
The tone of the piece is spot on, the quiet activities and thoughts beautifully realised. That last action of John's says it all.
| patemalah21 chapter 1 . 4/16/2013
I love your writing style. I can just see John sitting in the kitchen working on his fingers.
| MapleleafCameo chapter 1 . 4/12/2013
Ah nice 'quiet' piece - nicely introspective - can hear John's humour through out this & his anxiety - good balance- sweet moment -& funny - with John listening to Sherlock talk in his sleep .
Quite liked this bit 'And then, for the last, John quickly checked the shadowy room. Windows shut and locked. No serial killers hiding anywhere in the shadows. Venomous scorpions, spiders and snakes not really native to London. IEDs extremely unlikely in this part of the world. Under the bed: clear. Wardrobe: clear. And the gun was still tucked into the back of his belt.'
What I said about balancing humour & anxiety:)
| thedragonaunt chapter 1 . 4/6/2013
Love this. You have a knack of covering the moments other people don't. The inbetweens and aftermaths are a great opportunity for speculation. Kudos to you for exploiting that niche!
Will keep reading.
| SumGhai chapter 1 . 3/15/2013
I quite enjoyed this one-shot - brief but elegant.
I feel the writing style suits the pace of the TV series quite well, and the narrative gives a pleasing amount of insight into both Holmes' and Watson's characters, particularly the segment where the latter quickly examines the rest of the room for potential hazards / threats - a nice shoutout to his background as a veteran Army Doctor returning from Afghanistan.
All of this rapid-fire chain of thoughts as Watson contemplates the effects and consequences of shooting Hope cumulates in that one final moment where he focuses on the task at hand (if you'll excuse the pun) - cleaning up the titular powder burns.
Nicely done :)
| IggyInin20218 chapter 1 . 1/23/2013
| Sundapple chapter 1 . 1/4/2013
Really, I just love your stories. They aren't necessarily big and dramatic and heroic-often, they're quite the opposite. They are a break from the insanity and action and conflict of both Sherlock and the original Sherlock Holmes adventures. They offer instead a glimpse into the lives of the characters: their pasts, presents and, sometimes, their futures. They add more depth to the original plots by supplying the context for the characters.