Reviews for Changing pavements
Don't trust your eyes chapter 16 . 7/22/2014
I don't know what to say... I like it when things are over the edge, but this time he almost miss the opportunity! I think he is making things too difficult and Ana too easy!
KissOfShadows13 chapter 16 . 7/22/2014
Aaaaaannnddd... she's not going to NY! I hate to say 'I told you' but... I told you!
Took him long enough to realize that Ana IS the exception to his rule. It took him... what... three months? For someone who's as smart as he's supposed to be, he's quite slow. Sorry!
I know it's a common theme to create a character that comes and destroys all the previous rules, the exception but that's a dangerous road. If the character changes for the other person and not for themselves, it's not going to lead to a long and healthy relationship. Ana will become his support pillar and that should NOT happen. I think, at this point, Flynn can come in and try to make Christian see that the change has to come from WITHIN.
Looking forward to the next chapter!
KissOfShadows13 chapter 14 . 7/22/2014
So that didn't go down as planned... yikes!
KissOfShadows13 chapter 13 . 7/22/2014
It's nice to get Christian to take care of Ana and show off his protective side. I liked that.
Then the heavy things started rolling and they got stuck right in the damn middle! Seriously, Ana? Push some more! Something's gotta give with all that secrecy!
And with Elena in the picture, offering to find him another sub... I guess I should have figured it out when Ana visited Grey at Escala on a Saturday and found him in the gym and not the Red Room of Pain.
I never really got the impression that they were 40 years old stuck in 20 years old bodies when you think about their past: both of Ana's parents are dead so I think it's safe to assume that her childhood is gone and she needs to act like a grown up and pay more attention to the people around her; as for Christian, you've shown us his playful side more than just once.
KissOfShadows13 chapter 12 . 7/22/2014
Didn't Ana live with her aunt Olivia? What's Elliot doing sneaking out (- or in, I didn't really understand what was going on)?
So Ana and Christian make up. It's nice but I can't help but feel like it's not going to last long.
I liked the previous Ana. She thought more clearly and that was good since Christian obviously has no clue what he wants or how to get what he wants. When one character is running around like a headless chicken, it's good to have another one to be the voice of reason.
In conclusion, we need some Olivia and Ana time! ASAP!
KissOfShadows13 chapter 11 . 7/22/2014
Honestly, I expected more from a CPOV. I'm a little disappointed. So... yeah... I guess that's all I have to say about this chapter. It didn't clear anything up! NOT A SINGLE THING!
KissOfShadows13 chapter 10 . 7/22/2014
The chapter was both funny and awkward. Why would Elliot have three Viagra just waiting to be put into Christian's drink? And, of all the people Christian could have called, he chose Ana. Bad choice!
KissOfShadows13 chapter 9 . 7/22/2014
I think their relationship is very complicated and it's bound to come around and bite both of them you know where.
As for your other stories, I would suggest you pre-write at least ten chapters and see how that goes before starting another story. There's always the chance that you lose inspiration before you even get into it. Give it a thought ;)
KissOfShadows13 chapter 8 . 7/22/2014
Whoa! This is what I call a CHAPTER!
So many things happened in this chapter that my head is still spinning!
First thing's first: Olivia! I gotta hand it to her, she likes living on the wild side! That's all I'm gonna say! I think we can safely assume that Ana's off the hook for her little stunt with Christian. I love it when Karma comes around and pays off the dues ;)
Second, Christian Grey takes Ana to a nice party and leaves her hanging after a guy just hit on her. I would have LOVED to read that someone else kept her occupied for the rest of the night and then Taylor could have informed him and made him a little bit jealous. Dropping off your date like that in the middle of the evening is not nice and he should have paid the price instead of Ana running and comforting him just so he could brood some more.
Third and final: Ana's falling for Grey. Oh, it had to come to this, I guess...
Let's see where this takes us next! Next chapter!
KissOfShadows13 chapter 7 . 7/22/2014
Hmmmm... a date with Mr. Christian Trevelyan-Grey? I can't help but wonder how that's going to turn out. I have to say, it clashes with his character since Grey has a non-dating rule in place (he has a sub) so I wonder what are the reasons behind this decision.
Ana gets the chance of flying to NY... I wonder if she'll actually go there since it would mean some time apart from Grey and since their relationship is so... weird, I'm really looking forward to the chapter when she'll tell him about this opportunity.
KissOfShadows13 chapter 6 . 7/22/2014
Come on! They get whipped cream on each other and we don't get to read how that went down? That just MEAN!
Their relationship isn't really a relationship because they want things but don't work towards their goals. Yes, they're cute and their banter and bickering is nice but it kind of lacks... consistence. They act all 'friends' and then they do a 180 and end up licking whipped cream off each other and Ana's totally cool with that? Confusing.
PS: Barbra Palvin is gorgeous but I still don't think she fits the bill. Then again, I've already expressed my opinion on who's supposed to play Anastasia (ie. Katharine Isabelle).
KissOfShadows13 chapter 5 . 7/22/2014
Hmmm... I have to say, I'm more interested on how their relationship evolves more than the sex scenes that will follow. I'm guessing you'll change the rating to M... right? Anyway, I can understand the appeal of writing some lemons with these two but the general feel of your fic is that they won't just hop into bed and be happily ever after and I, personally, like that approach.
It's odd that Grey has a sub but keeps Ana close. If the roles were reversed, I'm sure his character wouldn't be too happy. Am I right or am I right?
As for Ana... she seems OK with the whole arrangement but I have a feeling it will backfire and blow up in her face. Again, time will tell. Or, better said, the next chapter! And I'll go and read it now ;) Ta da!
KissOfShadows13 chapter 4 . 7/22/2014
Talk about awkward! Olivia just cock blocked them! But I think that's a good thing at this point in their 'relationship' since Ana wants the whole hearts and flowers and barely knows anything about Christian. And we're exactly in the same boat as her since it's only Ana's point of view that we get to read. Maybe there's a CPOV in the future? I would like to read it!
Holy s**t, Grey can cook! A man after my own heart! ;)
Again, the chapter feels a little bit rushed and a little more attention to grammar and the general layout of the chapter wouldn't hurt. Keep that in mind ;)
On a different note, I could do without the lyrics of the song. It's lovely and all but if I wanted to know the lyrics, I could have googled them ;)
downWiththeFiction chapter 1 . 7/22/2014
Gah! Please update soon! I love this story! :)
KissOfShadows13 chapter 3 . 7/22/2014
Gotta love Olivia! She gives good advice! I really like her character! Olivia seems to be the perfect character to remind Ana that she DOES have a backbone and I hope to see her more in the following chapters. With that kind of advice, Ana's bound to keep Grey on his toes!
As for the actors you have in mind, gotta say I LOVE Ian! He's got the whole bad boy attitude down to a T and he's a really good actor. Miranda Kerr is lovely and looks really young but I have to say I've always pictured Katharine Isabelle as Anastasia Steele.
A few words about the chapter... it seemed more like a filler but that's not a bad thing, don't worry. I wish we read a little more than just the usual banter between niece & aunt and the Grey brothers. Okay, enough rambling! :)
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