|Reviews for A Warm End to A Frosty Legend|
| DarkFrost chapter 1 . 9/23/2014
This was great, but why! (Stupid Pitch!)
| Guest chapter 1 . 1/8/2014
| catlover2976 chapter 1 . 7/4/2013
Please update it or something it cant end like this
| Guest chapter 1 . 4/10/2013
the whole time i was laughing at your profile picture
| thehunterwholived chapter 1 . 1/7/2013
you should add a second chapter, showing the others' reactions!
| leggo lover 99 chapter 1 . 12/15/2012
| caligo-lux chapter 1 . 12/7/2012
huh...well...what to say to that...
no plot...no chance for the reader to feel bad for jack because there were no character development, no explaining of feelings...no story development...
sry its more like an idea for a fill request ...not a story...there is so much missing...were is are the feelings?the tension, the fear, pain, hopelessness and terror...were is the silent heartbreaking acceptance...?
Panic had already set in once he landed here- this sentences gives nothing to the reader but simple information...same with : He finally accepted his fate as he let the platform sink the rest of the way, taking him with it.
the end leaves the reader more with a:" huh WTF?" feeling than a :"OMG the poor dude"
maybe i am just overdoing it with my critik but it really bothered me that you seem to care so little for your own story.
| IJackFrost chapter 1 . 12/6/2012
WHAT THE HELL? WHY DID U KILL JACKIE? i hate you now!
| thunder angel13 chapter 1 . 11/29/2012
| Guest chapter 1 . 11/27/2012
ahhh waaaaa why did you kill himm why waaaaaa