Reviews for The Forgotten Elf
bntjammer chapter 17 . 10/11/2013
Good story so far! Keep up the work.
trollalalala chapter 16 . 7/7/2013
Good chapter, even if a bit short.
Earwen Elanesse chapter 15 . 3/16/2013
I really like your story! Did you draw that picture cuz I really like it. The only suggestion I have is that it need s more romance. Keep writing!
Narnia and Harry Potter 4 EVER chapter 15 . 3/10/2013
Is she going to fight?
Narnia and Harry Potter 4 EVER chapter 14 . 2/22/2013
YAY shes safe yaay!
trollalalala chapter 14 . 2/21/2013
Things I liked:

-The dialogue in general
-Raerlis' reaction
-Saruman's attraction to Raerlis

Things that confused me:

-It just seemed too easy. Saruman left. Raerlis escaped by climbing out of the tower by rope. Is Saruman letting her go on purpose?
readinginminecraft chapter 13 . 2/12/2013
This is a great series! I love reading it. I keep on wanting to read it ;). Keep up the good work!
Narnia and Harry Potter 4 EVER chapter 13 . 2/9/2013
They need to rescue her quickly!
XxKicking Your AxX chapter 13 . 2/8/2013
RUN,LEGOLAS! RUN! GO CATCH THE ELF YOU LOVE FROM THE EVIL SARUMAN! Please post soon! You are a GREAT author!
trollalalala chapter 13 . 2/8/2013
Raerlis' face grew with anger.

That sounds like her face is growing. A face cannot grow with anger. Anger can grow, but a face cannot grow.

"I am going to get her. I am going to rescue Raerlis." Legolas announced.

For some reason, "I am going to rescue.." is bothering me. That sentence kind of makes Legolas seem like a knight in shining armor and is going to rescue his fair maiden. Rescue just seems like the wrong word to use there, even if he is actually "rescuing" her.

I liked this chapter very much! Besides the above to things I noticed and that the chapter moved a little too quickly for my liking (that's just my opinion), this chapter was very nice. I'm looking forward to an update!
Narnia and Harry Potter 4 EVER chapter 12 . 1/24/2013
Gosh that's not good
trollalalala chapter 12 . 1/24/2013
Things I liked:
-The cliffie at the end left me hanging!
-You told of Legolas' feelings.
-I'm not sure If I ever todl you, but Raerlis is a beautiful name!

Things I didn't like:
-There were not many, but most lie within the plot of the story.
-You also said that Eomer had seen Raerlis. But he didn't try to retrieve her, even though the orcs were all slaughtered in the night. It doesn't make sense to me that he would leave a female on her own, especially one who had been a victim of the orcs
-Then, Raerlis was being carried by orcs, even though I thought they were all vanquished?
-I felt that this chapter was kind of rushed. For example, the meeting with Eomer feels short and too different from the original.
Guest chapter 11 . 1/17/2013
When will the first chapters of book 2 be up? I cannot wait!

This is scarily like my own LotR fanfic... my character, Adelia, also gets taken with Merry and Pippin... she's also part elf, although the other part isn't human... O.o

I don't have the fanfic posted on here, but ya know... :P
Guest chapter 11 . 1/16/2013
Awesome!
Narnia and Harry Potter 4 EVER chapter 11 . 1/12/2013
Is Raerlis going with Pippen and Merry into the forest or not?
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