|Reviews for Hazing|
| manga.geek.3 chapter 1 . 4/15
Hard to watch? Definitely. More difficult to watch Mustang's reaction? Quite on the mark. It was a hard read, but I appreciate your writing! Well done!
| seraserastuff chapter 1 . 2/20
I loooved this fic. It totally indulges my thing for Roy-cares-about-the-wellbeing-of-Ed-but-in-a-firm-and-standoffish-way. I've been reading FMA fic since about 2003 (yikes) and used to be obsessed with yaoi but I'm now finding the parental stuff more appealing and it makes more sense I wonder if my RoyEd infatuation was some freudian thing - BUT ANYWAY Lets change the subject back to your fic:
I think younger me would have been angry at your treatment of Ed, but the wisdom-filled (lol not really) me enjoyed it. I don't approve of bullying, or IRL hazing, or in particular adults bullying a little child, especially nude, I'd be like WTF and would be first to call the police - BUT... in the universe that Ed inhabits, this is how it is - and how it needs to be. Ed had two limbs ripped off. Ed survived automail surgery. He has to fight adults and go into battle and risk death...so this is nothing. I'm looking at your reviews and it's weird some people are cool with murder and rape in fic but being bullied is a no-go?
I like your Samson character and can see why he is 'everyone's favourite' in Delta unit even though he is a complete twat. I love the use of the expression 'shit-eating grin' very appropriate here. Now, 20 is an adult but it sounds a very young age to me now. It actually makes it less creepy that a young, cool, but very immature guy is bullying Ed, it makes him more like a annoying elder brother. Usually fics have some old pervert guy obsessing over Ed because some issue with their lost youth or whatever. So this helped steer it in the more-playful, less-creepy right direction.
Ahem anyway. Samson kind of sounds like a 20yearold Ed. Ed could easily be this much of a dick - but the difference is that Ed is nice to kids because he is very much adjusted to the role of protective elder brother, not teasing douchebag elder brother. BUT i could absolutely see 20year old Ed doing this to a fellow new (adult) recruit.
In a messed up way it was err...nice of Samson to welcome Ed. I like that he was totally indiscriminate in his choice of victim, seeing past age boundaries to dole dole out his aggression equally, aww. Ironically, that's what Ed wants - to be seen the same way as everyone else - but he's too inexperienced to realise what is going on and follows his instincts instead , to run away/fight etc. I think your understanding of this situation is very clever and nuanced, you have pretty much every angle covered.
They all saw it as a friendly/funny thing which is realistic, ad I will never fucking truly understand because men are weird creatures , BUT it was important for Ed to be accepted and SEEN AS ONE OF THEM. In a way Samson is nicer than those who initially ignored him
Seems Ed made it worse for himself by refusing to relent which escalated the situation. I don't think there is any way that he would have - it was totally in character for him to resist.
I do appreciate that Roy went to check on Ed within 30 seconds of hearing about what was going on and I am satisfied that your Roy WOULD have been angry about the sexual stuff, had he heard about it or witnessed it - I am sure he would have felt more guilty and maybe sympathetic in that case.
I squeed (do people still use that?) When Roy took his hand without a word and helped him out AAAHHH and then Ed feeling it was not Alphonse, aww, then annoyed he allowed roy to hear/see him so vulnerable.
"He had personally come down and picked out a Top Locker himself to make the boys life difficult" That made me burst out laughing. soooooooooooooo Mustang. This is canon for me now. This happened. I believe it. Roy made a special trip to make sure to get a top locker for Ed. So important he couldn't entrust this task to any other.
'I can't fit in here, not yet'
'No you cant' said Mustang tenderly...(aww. he didn't take the opportunity to make a joke he fits in his locker lols)
Ed doesn't want to be the loser guy...but he's probably more popular for having gone through with the hazing and it earned some respect points
Hmm I also like that guy who protests everyone standing in front of his locker because he only cares about his date, that was funny and adds realism and how they are individuals
I feel really sad for Ed's confusion and helplessness - but that's what I was in the mood to read, what I was looking for, and found in your fic which totally delivered beyond expectation. Sometimes I just like to read angst. I found angst. And harsh-parentalnon sexualRoyEd. It's balanced with humour -you've totally delivered.
My one lil criticism would be when they say 'hey, he just moved to transmute!' after seeing ed's hand motions. - it's very rare to be able to perform alchemy without a circle - though I'd expect them to recognise it since they are trained. I think that seeing this from Ed would have REALLY surprised them, maybe impressed them, made at least one go 'hey it's the kid who can transmute without a circle i heard about him' etc, some acknowledgement of this unusual trait (...and then obviously Samson doesnt care and continues on lol)
Erm anyway I'm reading your creepy tucker fic for a second time now after finding it today... will review that at some point soon. I'm glad I found your fics!
(...More fic with Samson pls? more ed-military guys? *_*)
| Guest chapter 1 . 11/29/2016
i thought this was amazing! :O
and gosh! the A/N at the end made me cringe!, (not because of you, because of the people that commented) its a fic people! and a damn good one too! and i didn't get any sense of 'bullying is good' from this fics, in fact i got the opposite! its showing you how uncomfortable situations like this can be for person in them.
and i thought everyone was in character, and Roy was very Roy-like, you did a great job!
i have read about 150 fics, and i keep a small list of 'so good must read again!' fics, and this one will go on that list! (4 of your other fics are already on that list lol)
| Attackoneverything chapter 1 . 11/28/2016
Loved it XD
hope to see more from you XD
| lexieconextreme chapter 1 . 11/23/2016
Oh, poor Ed.
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/21/2016
Hard to handle. I won't sign this review because some people can't take anything they think is criticism so I just don't anymore.
Hard hard hard to read. Very well written but hard. Maybe realistic I suppose Hazing has the reputation it does for a reason but it's hard to see people get away with acting like a$$holes. Ed was innocent this time. Would have liked to see Mustang do more about this.
| SoulMore chapter 1 . 5/3/2016
| Linvalay chapter 1 . 11/22/2015
I love this fic! I'm not going to say that i agree with bullying or hazing or that i condone it or anything of the sort; but i will say that i am thankful to every last person who made fun of me in my youth because without them i wouldn't be who i am today...and i love who i am today.
| tantei-chan chapter 1 . 8/31/2015
I found it hard to find the humor in this one, sorry.
It was a good story though. There were no grammatical errors.
But... really? Did Ed really have to go through all that?
Plus the Mustang character here, he was alright but not the Mustang I adored.
| Rain in the Dark chapter 1 . 8/8/2015
Alright, I've read your a/n, but the story still bothered me. Ed has enough crap on his plate without ordeals like this to 'make him stronger', and I honestly don't see Roy's logic that getting humiliated like that would do him and his character any good. I can understand not intervening since interference is only bound to make things worse anyway, but smiling about it?
Don't get me wrong - I don't expect coddling, and riling up and making fun of a new recruit is a given, but this is outright abuse and there's nothing to be happy about.
Also, not to attack you or anything, but I think I found the review you were talking about, and the reviewer didn't imply that you had been bullied. Rather, she implied the opposite, that you hadn't and therefore underestimated how traumatic the experience could be.
Ed is a tough kid, but he's still a kid. If that's what his beginning years in the military had been like, it's no surprise he had trouble relying on anyone but his brother until Maria Ross slapped the stupidity out of him. Between his father, Mustang and even Breda, his general impression of the adults would be that they are pretty useless and would leave him to drown and fend for himself as soon as the opportunity arises.
And, well, when it comes to Ed - let's face it, Mustang is somewhat of a softie. More so than Hawkeye. Riza told Ed about Ishvar and about Nina's death, treating him like an adult, while Roy couldn't bring himself to tell him about Hughes, trying to shelter him. For all his talk about the brothers already having seen hell, whenever push actually comes to shove he frets. With that flexible mind of his, especially knowing about the hazing, I think I can see him subtly ensuring that it wasn't taken too far rather than beaming about it. And being snide and condescending in the wake, pretending he had nothing to do with it, of course.
In short - yeah, I do believe Mustang is a jerk in this story. Sorry.
| Guest chapter 1 . 10/28/2014
Wow didn't think I would like this and loved it. You made the soldiers bullies without making it personal and I think that must have been so hard. You really know how to write.
| Sifufirelord chapter 1 . 10/26/2014
Omg no poor ed, i almost cried. Now i'm sad
| Brenne chapter 1 . 10/14/2014
LOL! Poor Ed, I bet he's gonna hold a grudge over this for quite a while! XD
| lilyflower chapter 1 . 5/17/2014
This was terrible! I wish Mustang had done something more of comfort. Ed's tough so I am not going to cry about how this was written. I saw your comments and it's way stupid people would say those things. Hazing is called Hazing for a reason. If it was something else we could call it getting to know each other time or something like that. I don't know anything about Hazing in the military so I can't say if this is extreme. I can say I felt bad for Ed but understood what Mustang meant. Ed will thank Mustang for this later. No matter how much I wanted hugs to happen I know it's better that they didn't here. Thanks for writing a story with such a setious topic. It was a good read. You're a really good writer Lily.
| TheColdfireAlchemist chapter 1 . 5/8/2014
This story was well-written, but I do agree with some of the reviews that said the hazing was taken too far. I think even soldiers would show a little restraint to a twelve year old boy. (No offense intended towards anyone who is a soldier in real life.)