|Reviews for Overlady|
| Eltyr chapter 31 . 10/12
...the second Maggat said "let's get down", I immediately knew where he was going with it, and I absolutely died of acute asphyxiation brought on by uncontrollable laughter. Write on, you gloriously mad genius you XP
| Eltyr chapter 24 . 10/5
I can't tell, is that theme Scyl is humming the Metal Gear Solid sneaking theme?
| Eltyr chapter 22 . 10/2
Maggat went and got all Detritus on us, rofl. I love it!
| Eltyr chapter 20 . 10/2
Alsi, don't think I didn't catch that Monty Python reference there with the three five thing, lol
| Eltyr chapter 20 . 10/1
Leaving early to avoid the traffic... yep, i knew I had you pegged as a Discworld veteran.
| Eltyr chapter 19 . 10/1
All of those "Aha""s makes me think you based Louis off of Dragon King of Arms from Pratchett's 'Feet of Clay.' At least partially.
| Eltyr chapter 15 . 9/28
Awww, pour Louise It can't be easy visiting your own grave.
| Eltyr chapter 14 . 9/26
LOL, for the map sequence, the minions were humming The Game of Thrones opening theme, weren't they?
| all forms of fluff chapter 59 . 9/26
First time through.
I am stopping at this point after going to the last chapter and seeing that the story is on hiatus. I guess the biggest point to raise in this story is the actual language used. It sounds like something stupid to complement a writer on, to me anyway, but you've created a great world that is all your own with the way that everyone speaks. I'm not sure if your borrowing from Overlord, I have never played the game, but the completely redesigned world of The Familiar of Zero. Since I am not continuing into the next arc, which I don't believe will bring any kind of conclusion to the actions of Eleanore in this chapter, I will not post any questions about the Familiar runes being removed from the minions. They had them long before Louise put on the glove, and I'm not sure how Overlord and Familiar of Zero magic conflict or work. And I'm not really expecting any answers to any questions I might postulate. However I should point out that the spring summoning ritual is a Void magic ritual, which is why Louise is able to summon Saito at all with her magic. In this story Void magic seems to be Evil magic. So one has to wonder who was the founder? Was he the first overlord? I've only seen two seasons of FnZ so I have no lore to back up any thoughts. Then again at this point you have totally blown apart any cannon material for either fiction so its all your own story now. And I honestly don't know If I'll be continuing with the story. Eleanore came out of left field to steal the glove. The argument could be made that you had been inserting her into the story ever since Louise went after marzipan, but I don't really like her usurping the glove, and likely the minions, from Louise. (I'm pretty sure I've been misspelling her name but not going to check.) And I have to wonder, if Eleanore now has the minions because of the theft then dose she become the Overlady? If she dose and the story becomes Louise defeating the overlady of the north to become a Hero then I'm pretty sure its all going to be a "Eleanore planed this all from the moment she broke out of prision!" moment and that's going to be super lame. As far as I could tell the gauntlet wasn't really affecting Louise the way it did Eleanore... You know what. The story was great right up to this point and I checked to see how much was left only to find the hiatus warning. So its likely I won't be back until this story is Completed. Until then I wish to thank you for sharing it. It was surprisingly entertaining to read. You really brought this world to life and actually made me feel bad when you killed off a minion. That was impressive. Well, I'm off. TA!
| Eltyr chapter 8 . 9/25
Oh dear me, I can think of many ways that Louise's plan could go awry. But it's not a bad plan.
| Eltyr chapter 6 . 9/24
OMG, those passphrases. You've read Terry Pratchett's "Guards! Guards!" Haven't you?
| Eltyr chapter 5 . 9/24
This has to be done:
"They're Pinky... they're Pinky and the Brain, Brain, Brain, Brain, Brain!"
Nope, not sorry :)
| The Dark Hour chapter 1 . 9/23
I honest to god thought it was gonna be an Overlord (オーバロード) x FoZ fic... And I thought I finally found a good one too, but now I feel stupid...
Still gonna read it anyways.
| Eltyr chapter 2 . 9/20
Lol, LoZ references abound with the giant hands and such.
Have I mentioned how much I love the Pratchett-esque vibe you have written this in? Very entertaining
| Eltyr chapter 1 . 9/19
Love the Pratchett-esque humor in the scene setting of the opening :)