This is very good...
Finally something which is not a cut paste of the original story arcs
Are you ever gonna update?

Hey there, I came over to this fic after seeing Lanky Nathan's shout-out in A New World, The Story of a Lost Shinobi. At first, I thought it would pretty similar to his story because of the similar titles, but I am liking it so far. The only thing that gave me a pause was the mention of mages with the same Slaying magic. I remember Natsu saying in canon that the only fire that he could not eat was what he generated. He could eat all the other flames.
It's only an insignificant detail, but I just wanted to mention that.

Natsu's simply too OoC here.
Like, the fuck're you talking about? 'Mate' this, and 'honor' duel that.
He's too ambitious to think about shit like that.

"Naruto-kun needs us"
You filthy weeb! She just met him...

"For her...I would walk through hell with a smile." That gives me chills mate, well done.

it was rushed... no concerete build-up

So damn good. Have you ever entertained the idea of starting your own book?

vampire arc is way to long

The cliffhanger! Its too damn powerful

Oh crap, spoke to soon. Definitely out of here. One thing I hate more than anything in fanfiction is when MCs unkowningly blurt out Beautiful... It doesn't happen. Ever. Naruto's interactions with chicks was fine up until that point. He blushed sure, wasn't confident when it came to women, he was always aware of what he was doing though. Know it is a stupid pet peeve but it's mine. Hate it even more when he is injured, arrives through some dimensional portal to another world only for him to say that as a chick stumbles upon him. Like no, your dying. Shouldn't be saying Beautiful or Angel or whatever stupid phrase.

Ah what a rant. Over something so totally pointless too!

Oh god, while the absurd amount of OCs was annoying this was still a great fic. This whole 'Honor Duel' is something straight out of fanfiction hell however lmao. That isn't Natsu, at all.

To think this fic that has such great and well thought out Arcs, even if they revolve around OCs, included trash fanfiction cliches like Honor Duels over females to create conflict. How sad. It's honestly made me want to stop reading. I expected better honestly.

The reason your OCs are killing your story is because it's dragging on way to much. From the introduction of Tatsumaki, which was neccessary for learning Dragon Slayer Magic, all the way to the current Arc through 4 seperate towns.

Bacchus Hometown, filled with OCs, the Town with Mira and Company (The only people from the Fairy Tail group that your readers have seen yet, but is the group we all want to see interaction with more than anyone else.), Hargeon with yet more OCs and Erigor and then on to Crocus were the royal family are situated. We also have Boruto somehow making Naruto his apprentice and more or less forcing him into this mission.

A mission that includes even more OCs. Now, I don't mind OCs in general, your fic however is starting to become over run by them. There hasn't seemed to have been a single chapter yet without a prominent OC. We are over 10 chapters in, this isn't even the last of this Arc. When are you going to get to what everyone wants? Interaction with Fairy Tail?

The only 2 OCs I have become attached to at all are Akira and Jeremiah, I still feel like this has been dragged on far to long though.

This review is probably completely pointless, not sure if your still working on it or not. That is why I think your recieving complaints about OCs though. The story is filled with them.

I know this is old but for a Naruto that killed a Dragon he is unbelievably weak. Regardless of it being an old and weak dragon are you telling me Tatsumaki would be beat by creatures of this level? If not then why is it that Naruto's Roar can somewhat damage his scales but not absolutely demolish weaker magical creatures like Lizardmen? Everytime I see him use his roar it pushes, never cuts. Why is that? Is getting annoying at this point.

zaz, z ZZ

Always hated the Dark Naruto persona or id...

It really, really has been overdone.

Just sayin'