|Reviews for Getting To Know Your Other Self|
| ReadingBlueWolf chapter 14 . 8/24/2013
What happened earlier in the day? Uh oh… Is this a continuation of the last one or something completely different? I love the radio voice. I think that’s magically ha ha. Do I get to know what song you chose? I think that might have everything to do with it. And what happened to Biyomon? I want to know these things in the beginning! I love how you use that little scene to dig the hooks in and make me want to read every last word on the page and then some. Boy, Biyo’s not in a good mood when she’s awoken by her man. Wait, what frigin song is it? Is it Breakfast at Tiffany’s? I love that song! NICE CHOICE! That’s why we’re other halves. Just so we’re clear. I like how you bring the reality of relationships into this. It’s not always rainbows and roses. There are tough times. There are times when it’s stretched and it might not work. But there’s also the fact that they are trying to work things out. I love that. I really love this pairing. I’m a Biyohawk shipper now thanks to you. Forever! I’m gonna tumblr it up and make it legit. Lol. Great job, IP!
| ReadingBlueWolf chapter 13 . 8/11/2013
YES! I’m super excited for this magic eight ball! Oh my God! I’m so so so excited. I wonder why he’s staring at it. Does he think it’s going to float? I love the bits of description in this from the plastic ball to Hawkmon’s sapphire eyes. That’s really awesome. I love how you labeled the eight ball an antique. That cracks me right up. Oh goodness. And I love the confusion about what it does. That’s awesome. I’m wondering what she’s going to ask it. And I always heard that you had to ask it silently in order for it to “work”. Ooohhhhh poor Biyomon. It’s doubtful she’ll be successful. That’s really sad. And then there’s issues with them thinking this is real. No! Don’t believe the eight ball! WHAT! I think you meant “After a quick shake”. And “A good shake”. I don’t like this one. It’s sad that they’re putting so much weight on that dumb toy. I like them together. I don’t want to see otherwise. They’re really cute together! Stupid toy! *Pouts in the corner.*
| Dominus Tenebrosus chapter 14 . 8/8/2013
At the title: Oh myyyyyy. This could be interesting... :P
"were playing from it." -Event?
"'Coming up next, it's" -For a moment, I thought that was talking about the band... Eh!
"it works…but I" -Which event was this again? XD
"come around. Maybe the" -Hmm... Fight?
"eyes widened. "Ooh," -... I'm guessing messages unintended will be sent. *nods*
""No, silly, it was" -Hmm... And she probably won't correct him, will she? Heh. Mind you, she probably doesn't know what he thought he heard... Hm.
""Oh, I can't wait" -Well, you probably will wish you had, I suspect. :P
"Early the next morning," -Well, this'll end well.
""I have something to" -Heh, or at least listen to. *nods*
"short sigh. "It better" -Man. What did happen?
""Here; open it up" -Well, here we go.
"look. "Just what is" -A good question!
""Are you telling me" -Very likely!
"more hurtful. "Is this" -If so, the joke is on him.
"he said. "I'm going" -Not a clue!
""…Are they not talking" -Not likely!
"her explanation. "Okay, so" -So, in short, poor choice.
"was said. "So the" -No, but the way he said that, I can guess what it was. XD
"still there. They wanted" -Makes that whole thing rather awkward, that it does. *nods*
"before replying, "I definitely" -D'aww...
"That's all he needed" -Very d'aww!
Well, it all went well in the end, but... heh. If only he'd done a little fact checking! A quick visit to 'lyrics-r-us' or something. Always a good idea with a song, even if you think you know the lyrics. *nods*
Anyway, hm. So what is the event that keeps being brought up, anyway? Don't seem to recall anything like that in the previous chapter, not exactly leastways... Hm. Well, either way...
Good stuff. :)
| Dominus Tenebrosus chapter 13 . 7/31/2013
At the A/N: Heh. Shift happens, eh?
""I wonder what this" -... Aw man. I don't even know what's going on, and already I know this is a bad idea. XD
"front of him. His" -*double checks the prompt* Ahh, right. Heh. Don't follow its advice. Bad idea. Trust me. XD
""Come in," he hollered" -Who I am sure will soon begin some epic facepalming, incidentally.
""Hey; so what's this" -Definitely so, then.
""Here it is,"" -They're fun to mess with; have one myself, I do. I don't think I'd call them antique, though.
""Well, he explains that" -With considerably less accuracy than a coin flip!
"give it a shot?"" -With a rifle or a handgun?
"encouraged her. "Just ask" -Aaaaand hilarity ensued.
"made up or something."" -*awesomeface .jpg*
"her answer. "It reads" -Better than mine; I ask it if I'm doomed, and it always reads some variation of 'certainly'.
""…Wait, what do you" -Roundabout d'aww is what she means. :P
"of anger. "Here, give" -I think he might be displeased at the possibility. *nods*
"After a quick shook," -Shake maybe, not shook? Hm. Either way, I guess those things are all fairly malevolent, aren't they?
"near watering. "What do" -Obviously, it means the thing's full of [EXPLETIVE DELETED].
"you do. Don't let" -D'aww...
"the favor. "Not a" -Soon followed by a crashing noise and a facetious 'oops', I'm sure.
"A good shook is" -Hmm, still thinking shake, but that's me. Hm. Either way... curiosity killed the cat, don't you know?
At the A/N: 'tis what they get for taking that thing seriously, really. XD
Yeah... don't believe a word those things say, they're notorious liars. And like to answer in ways contrary to desired outcomes. Best to give them a shot at 500 meters with an anti-tank rifle. *nods*
Er, anyway, so I guess that'd be an issue for the more superstitious, wouldn't it? Which means I'm not particularly surprised he's having issues with it (sort of), but I'm surprised she's taking it seriously at all. Heh. Just goes to show, I guess. Either way...
Good stuff. :)
| Dominus Tenebrosus chapter 12 . 7/27/2013
Heh, no prompty chapter title? :P
"Nobody should have to" -Something delightfully mundane, I'm guessing.
"store's door. Thanks to" -*awesomeface .jpg*
""Don't worry, we're almost" -The ordeal may end, but the scars are forever! D:
"top of the door." -*confused*
""Eh, I just tune" -Harmonica?
"buzzing with that noise." -Alarm clock?
"situation somewhat better...somewhat." -In the 'you're here, but why aren't we sharing the torment' sort of way?
""Oh, don't worry about" -Uh-huh...
"at his current position." -I sense that attempt is doomed to fail.
""Oh, hush up, will" -lolololol
"reply. "Is something the" -Oh, no, everything's just peachy.
"before replying, "Yes, and" -Heh. What is that thing, anyway?
"to explain, "I've been" -Oh. Ohhh. Man. Maybe I should have waited to do this review after I finished imbibing my coffee, that really should have been a gimme.
""Wanna talk to my" -*awesomeface .jpg x2*
""...No, but maybe talking" -Mayhap!
""It might? Because I'm" -Don't know until you try!
"a wall! Why was" -Because we're a delightfully unobservant species sometimes.
""I don't know, do" -You're close enough, so yes.
"his head. "No, but" -Heh. Or they could check this review... XD
"screaming out in agony." -Sounds like he needs an aspirin.
""You can close now" -A welcome relief, I'm sure.
"to ask, "Do you" -lulz. Yes, a spot of aspirin might help.
At the A/N: Hey, don't worry aboot it. Delays happen. *nods* Good luck with things, ja?
Heh, so don't see the prompt mentioned anywhere here, but that's alright, because somehow, I think I can guess. ;) Heh. It's really quite obvious in retrospect. And probably mentioned in the last chapter's A/N.
Anyway... Poor guy. Definitely needs an aspirin. I can imagine that getting rather old after a while. Hm. Particularly if he's been there all day, which it seems he has... Poor guy. Heh. Either way...
Good stuff. :)
| ReadingBlueWolf chapter 12 . 7/25/2013
Oh sad! I can't believe that he's kept in a cage. Regular birds are fine, but he's different. I feel bad that he has to be kept in a cage. Aww! His girl arrived! That's super adorable! I'm glad she showed up. But I have to agree with Hawkmon, those things are SUPER annoying!
her."-There's a speech tag at the end you don't need.
I love how Biyomon is trying not to make fun of him. That's really cute. However, when she starts getting snarky I absolutely love it! Her comment about his home was awesome.
There's a paragraph space between "off. Can" that's odd. You might want to check into that.
Hawkmon's snark and irritation made me chuckle. I love how he's telling her to talk to his migraine. That's awesome. I love the incorporation of bells into this.
"thoughts screaming" Another odd space. FFN is being super weird.
I love how it ends with Biyomon asking about the medicine to help him. That was adorable. I like this one. I was sad you didn't name this chapter though. :/ It was totally cute though!
I can't wait to see what you do with the Magic 8 Ball. That's going to be amazing! Great work!
| thats-a-moray chapter 5 . 7/3/2013
["Morning," was all that Hawkmon could reply to before he found himself laying back on the couch.] Hawkmon: World Champion Lightweight Drinker! I guess Digimon are crap at metabolizing alcohol. :P
It's so sweet that Biyomon is so choked up about this. Her reaction to it the previous night was a little bit subdued, but she's had time to think it over and you can tell his words really mean a lot to her. The fact that they're able to be so straight forward with each other shows that their relationship is maturing really fast. I also thought it was sweet to have Hawkmon brush away her tears.
[When he opened his beak up and moved his head to the side, Biyomon opened her beak up, and the two shared their first kiss.] This is a personal thing, but I wouldn't go into so much detail here. Beaks are cold, hard, and kind of unromantic, in my opinion.
I love Mrs. Takenoucki's reaction to seeing them kiss! Even if I'd seen Digimon before, which I assume Mrs. Takenoucki has, my reaction would be about the same. I kept expecting Hawkmon and Biyomon to share a laugh after she scampered off, but having them not laugh is even more awkward. Very cute!
| Dominus Tenebrosus chapter 11 . 7/1/2013
"minutes going by. Nonetheless," -The inevitability of time. And homework.
"entrance of her bedroom." -Indeed she is!
"a good two hours."" -Must be an engrossing chapter. When doing stuff like that, I tend to know, in agonizing detail, just how little time has passed. *nods*
""Oh, this is for" -You may want to consider just using 'dull' instead of 'dulling', just a thought. :) Either way, must be fascinating! XD
"you look at it."" -Though that depends on how much previous experience she has with it, I would think. *nods*
"the covers. Looking at" -Depending on what chapter she's at, that should be an... interesting question to answer. ;)
"a leg. "It's a" -Ahh, well that's going to be less awkward. XD Anyway, hm. Not how you get a leg up on the competition, that.
"talking about. "Oh, you" -Never seen it before? Hm.
"the answer. "Oh, so" -Nevermind, then. XD
"phone rang. "I'll get" -Sometimes I wonder about the physics entailed. I mean, it doesn't seem like such an appendage would be good for that, and yet this is hardly the first time something similar has been done... Hm. I'll just chalk it up to canon unfamiliarity. XD
"What're you up to?"" -I'd make a 'height' joke, except I have no idea how tall anyone is on here. Eh!
""…I just want to" -Hmm?
"small chuckle. "I already" -Ahh... Hm. One has to wonder how this came up, then.
""Oh, it's nothing too" -It just became serious?
""Yes, I'll be fine…" -lulz. What'd he do this time?
""Just wanted to say" -Again, I have to wonder how this came up. XD
""…Well I'm glad to" -... Blood for the blood god?
""No!"" -*awesomeface .jpg*
"was going on. "Is" -You better believe it. :P
""She'll be fine; I" -lololol
""Well that's good to" -Yeah, door face meetings are good to hear indeed. XD
""Thanks; I just hope" -That's blood, dear boy.
""Here; you wanted to" -Bahahahaha...
"put the tissue down!"" -XDDDD
"call was suddenly dropped." -Oh lawdy.
"hesitated before answering, "Yeah…" -Well, now he's very, very familiar with it I expect.
""I know; I was" -He wanted a second opinion, eh?
"her head. "Well, I" -Indeed! Though in his case, maybe he learned it a little too thoroughly. *nods*
Heh! Well, I suppose that's two ways to learn something, eh? Dictionary definitions and practical demonstrations! Heh. Good times. XD
I still find myself wondering how that specific topic of discussion came up, though. Hm. I mean, it's not something that usually comes up in everyday talk, so... Hm. Eh! Either way...
Good stuff. :)
| ReadingBlueWolf chapter 11 . 6/30/2013
I like the details in the first sentence about the clock. Oh, I hate studying. I feel Sora’s pain. But I’m wondering what she’s waiting on or for. Something’s going on here… Maybe she’s waiting for Biyomon to return? Just as a random question, how big are digimon compared to humans? Do they grow and shrink in size? Sometimes I think that Hawkmon and Biyomon are bigger and other times I think they’re smaller. Ew, two hours at a chapter. I know that feeling. It’s not pleasant. I love how curious that Biyomon is. It’s adorable. Digimon don’t bleed? Wait, I’m confused as to what’s going on. Yolei doesn’t know its blood? I was confused about the whole thing. Maybe it was the delivery, maybe it was the way it came about. I can’t put my finger on it. I like the idea that Hawkmon doesn’t know what blood is. I like that Biyomon is doing what she can to prove the fact she’s right. I thought those were very strong points. I also really enjoyed that Yolei and Sora were brought into this and you included studying.
I can't wait to see what you do with Bells!
| Dominus Tenebrosus chapter 10 . 6/19/2013
"Bolting from the hallway" -Well, what'd he do, than?
"so sorry…I-I thought" -Help by being elsewhere?
"split down the middle." -Hey, at least it wasn't legos. That'd qualify for hazmat gear. XD
"Not even waiting for" -Dustpan? Superglue?
""Umm…don't mean to" -Something else, than.
"try it, I guess."" -Ahh, hmm... I have to admit, this is one of the few problems for which that is less than an optimal solution. It's a very short list, mind. ;)
""Was that supposed to" -Well, maybe take some of the pressure off, anyway. :P
""Pretty much," the" -Ouch, dude. XD
""Wait; there's something else" -Oh myyyyyy.
""Close your eyes; trust" -*awesomeface .jpg*
"his eyes. A couple" -Hmm...
"Opening his eyes, the" -...XDDDD So that's what they're into- /shot
""I was surprised you" -I was sort of thinking that same thing. XD
"to him. How didn't" -Good question!
""Let's just say this" -Oh myyyyyyyyyyy.
""Is this another attempt" -It is, but the joke's on you. ;)
""Apparently you aren't real" -Might need burn ointment.
"to shrug. "Eh, guess" -Yes, yes it was.
"to happen. "I rest" -lololololol
She can be a bit mean sometimes, can't she? Mind you, apparently he can also be really... dense. And insensate, apparently, if that whole thing is to be any indication... How did he miss that?!
Eh, anyway... That end half is definitely amusing. Still, I wonder what exactly led up to that. I mean, I get he was trying to help, but with what, exactly? Hmm... Well, regardless...
Good stuff. :)
| ReadingBlueWolf chapter 10 . 6/18/2013
I love the fact that Hawkmon is in the middle of broken china ha ha. That’s awesome. Why is he so sad? Why does he want to cry? What! Is Biyomon attached to the china? That could be a pretty bad thing. I love how she’s going to fix it with duct tape. OMG. I’m done. If I could post a tumblr picture in this review I would. Just imagine this: Merida’s mother rolling off the bed with the words I’m Done flashing across the bottom. And I like her pun of don’t knock it ha ha. I don’t know if it was meant that way, but that’s a win. Is she going to Duct tape him? This could be getting kinky. Not to mention he might not be able to fly for a while lol. He didn’t feel the tape going around his body? Oh gosh. I enjoyed this chapter. I am wondering how he’s going to get out of that tape. Eek. That’s going to hurt!
| Dominus Tenebrosus chapter 9 . 6/13/2013
Commentary of Rolling Plus One:
"Hearing the waves crashing" -Does indeed sound soothing.
"video that was playing." -Ahh, so... Hm.
""Mind you, I was" -Not anymore!
""Well, you'll just have" -Oh myyyyy.
"make me look sophisticated" -*awesomeface .jpg*
"her shoulders. "I can't" -Well you could, but...
"at him. 'Remain calm," -Well, that's not gonna last long. XD
"you waiting; I was" -Hmm, seems to be one component missing to that, though. ;)
""Yeah, well you might" -Speaking of... :P
""As of now, you" -*ominous chord*
"smirk upon her face." -Cue horrified screech!
"be silly. I had" -Everything went better than expected!
"her, saying, "Oh, we" -Blatant lies?
"what she's talking about."" -Hmm...
"just heard. "Did she" -She did!
"After what felt like" -Sounds nice, I think.
""Hey, what's that up" -Danger?
"top of their destination." -Well, this won't end well.
"were gripping the railing." -Hmm... Suppose it's still eating him, eh?
"his head. "No; I" -Which back then are we talking aboot here? XD
""I wish I did;" -Hmm... My lack of canon knowledge is biting me here, I think.
"between us, got it?"" -Hmm...
"he couldn't say anything." -lulz
"up happening after all." -D'aww...
At the A/N: Yes, I was confused, good to know it'll be cleared up. XD And hmm... That sounds like it'll be interesting... :P
Well, that was interesting... For some raisin, I kept expecting something to happen though... Hm. Not sure why, it's not this story's format, after all... Eh!
Either way, sounds like he liked that tape. Perhaps a little too much, in fact. XD And the end was rather cute, wasn't it? :P Hm. ...You know, it would make a good vacation spot wouldn't it? From what I understand of it? Heh. Anyway...
Good stuff. :)
| Lazerwolf314 chapter 1 . 6/12/2013
[He shivered once again as another light wind struck Hawkmon, causing him to shiver a bit.] - You use shiver or a derivative thereof of shiver twice in the same sentance, annoying bit of repitition.
[Hawkmon landed on the rooftop, his talons landing softly on the flat-surfaced tile.] - Another bit of repition here, land(ing/ed). Also, his talons aren't landing on the rooftop, he's landing on the rooftop. A better way to say it would be, he landed on the rooftop, his talons clutching and sticking softly on the flat surfaced tile. and so on.
[Hawkmon located the numerous balconies lining outside of all the apartments.] - You can get rid of outside of all. Balconies imply being outside.
Otherwise, this is rather cute. I like how it goes from dark and desolate to light and warm. It's a pleasent mixture. I don't know much about the fandom, but that really doesn't matter here because you write this clearly and well enough.
Good on you.
I look forward to reading more of these.
| ReadingBlueWolf chapter 9 . 6/12/2013
It’s weird that Hawkmon is hearing gulls overhead while he’s lounging. A bird while lounging is hearing another bird. That sounds so odd! It sounds like a family vacation is going on. That’s always exciting! Or maybe Hawkmon was just listening to a recording of the beach and stuff. I love the sun block on the beak. It makes him sound like he’s a life guard. That’s hilarious. The fact that Hawkmon is irritated by Momoe is really funny. I feel bad that he’s called kid though. I mean, if anything, isn’t he a bird? And the fact he’s trying to remain calm is awesome. He’s late for a date! WHAT! Oh, that’s not good. And seriously, boys say girls take _forever_. The fact Biyomon figured Hawkmon would be late is priceless. That cracked me right up. Oh! I get to find out why the sister’s a little crazy? I love it. The fact Hawkmon remembered some horrible things was sad. I’m not quite sure what’s he’s referencing, but I still feel for him. I love how she clamped his beak shut. You go, girl! The fact they’re kissing makes me laugh. It’s so weird, but then again it’s like birds in animated films or that’s what I’m going to tell myself ha ha. The only thing that I would point out is there were two occasions where I felt like you had already shown or could have shown things. One was at the end where we know she held his beak shut and you said “seeing as he couldn't say anything.” The other was where it said “his face showing that he was annoyed”. Other than that, this was a fantastic chapter and I loved it! Oh and the fact I don’t get Hawkmon’s reference is apparently mentioned in revision. Or will be. So I will look for that while catching up! Fabulous job! I loved it!
| darkin520 chapter 7 . 6/10/2013
LOL...who knew birds liked soap operas? But it makes perfect sense. Anyway, it was too funny seeing how obsessed Biyo is over her show and how she won't move off the couch to tear her eyes away. It was also hilarious how she'd barely pick up the phone until she saw it was a commercial. Awww...poor Hawkmon being afraid of the dark. I don't know why Yolei won't be a little nicer to him. -shrugs- I guess she's trying to teach him a lesson, but it doesn't quite work like that. She could at least give him a flashlight. Anyway, it was really cute how Biyo talked to him...only for a minute until her show came back on and threw the phone to Sora. It was also really smart of Sora to realize it might be a phase. I do hope he gets over his fear, but I'm glad it was enough to help Hawkmon. LOL...too funny that Biyo won't get to find out what happens in her show until next week. But you're right. That's how those type of shows are. Well done. :)
A couple things:
seeing as Biyomon didn't want to get up to answer it.-since you're basically repeating what you said just before this, I'd change the wording a bit. You could simply end it at get up with a period or you could say, "seeing as Biyomon was not about to budge to tear herself away from her show," or something like that.
the big deal getting a night light for me."-the big deal about getting a night light for me."