|Reviews for We Stand United|
| Katie chapter 49 . 3/13
Please write soon. I love this story.
| Guest chapter 41 . 3/11
Brits don't use this term, in Scotland (and I belive Hogwarts is somwhere in the Highlands) they call it dux.
The fic is brilliant, I like it very much.
| Lord Schmodder chapter 49 . 3/9
Just found this and read it in one go.
Thanks for writing!
| Noble Korhedron chapter 49 . 3/9
MORE ASAP PLEASE! :-D
| Noble Korhedron chapter 34 . 3/9
Heh-heh. I like this more helpful version of Snape, he's doing nice things for people but still manages to be an acerbic git! *EVIL GRIN*
| Syret chapter 49 . 3/8
Great story! Can't wait for your next update.
| TheGallifreyanAtheist chapter 49 . 3/8
Gah! I hate cliffhangers! Great story though and I look forward to more. i have read your series starting with Before Hogwarts several times and loved them. Please keep writing because you have real talent
| Noble Korhedron chapter 18 . 3/8
Good riddance to bad rubbish! *EVIL ALUGH*
| Noble Korhedron chapter 1 . 3/8
Right, moving on to Ch. 2. I really hope UMBITCH gets some come-uppance in this one...
| Fury074 chapter 29 . 3/7
Alice Longbottom was an Auror.
| Guest111 chapter 49 . 3/7
| Fury074 chapter 2 . 3/6
Considering how old Madame Pomfrey is, I doubt Sirius would remember her older sibling as being a few years ahead of him in schooling.
| ThomasNealy chapter 49 . 3/3
If Harry does not stop hiding things from Sirius and Remus he is going to get people killed. He gets pissed about no one telling him any thing and yet he is doing the same thing.
| zha'aiacole chapter 49 . 3/2
This is one of the best stories I have read! I can hardly wait to read more and see the new twists and turns! Thanks so much for sharing it!
| Mighty pen 20 chapter 19 . 3/1
Well, the verdict so far:
You are a capable writer, there are no spelling or grammar mistakes, etc. The bad point is the repetitiveness you have injected upon the story, describing the daily happenings again and again. You sometimes sum them up, but they are still there. You could skip mentioning us every single day' s lesson and occurences if nothing of note happens. (That is what scene breaks are made for! ) And, we have of course, training, training, training, gah! Too much of it.
Concerning Harry' s new friends, (Anthony, Susan, Blaise ) there is no physical description of them (unless i missed it? ), and not even a single line of characterisation. They all speak and behave almost the same. If you swapped their names around, people would not even notice.
Personally, i think it would be better if you put out smaller chapters, but with action, and the important happenings. Of course, other people who have a hard on for detail would disagree with me. However, i find myself slightly bored and skipping paragraphs.
That said, on the few parts where there is action, you portray it very nicely, and we are kept on edge.
All in all, i think i will have to stop reading the story for now. What you have recounted until chapter 19 could have easily been said with half the word count. Might come back to this fic in the future, because despite everything, it does have its charm. Good luck with your future endeavors! ( Just remember, you do not need a large quantity to make sure you have got decent quality! )